No No No No No
Many thanks to Kenzie, our granddaughter for her drawing49 total reviews
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I would have thrown the varmint out. Who? The one you describe continually telling you no, no, no. I figure God gave us agency to make our own mind up, so like the CEC we are not to use outside sources to lift us up.
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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I would have thrown the varmint out. Who? The one you describe continually telling you no, no, no. I figure God gave us agency to make our own mind up, so like the CEC we are not to use outside sources to lift us up.
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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Sorry Tom, but that varmint was the Holy Spirit. Lol, but you wouldn't believe how many times in my life that I have thrown Him out.
However if I really would have had that dream, I might have really tried to go back to sleep fast!! hehehe!! As always, your reviews keep me smiling, so thank you for the fun review and comments. And who is the CEC? I should know this.
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What is the CEC? The committee that oversees all entries for their contests. Like the Wizard of Oz behind the curtain. All-knowing? They think so, making rulings whether the word count is correct or if you follow the demands an originator has with a contest developed. I've been Disqualified twice,and warned another four times.
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I am so sorry, but now I am laughing so hard, but it's not about you being disqualified or being warned 4 times.
(well maybe a little of that) but I have been DQ'd myself, but I understand that the author of Wizard of OS actually took first place in the contest after she tamed it down a bit.
Lol, I guess it's a good thing in my poem, No No No No,
I didn't reveal that my dream was about you, huh? Haha! So much for freedom of speech! : )
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I hope my little joke about my dream didn't make you speechless my friend. For that would knock Festus out of Dodge and send him somewhere over the rainbow. And we both know that the meaning of rainbows, sadly aren't what they used to be.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This a good poem. You covered multiple scenarios where temptation came into play. It is well-crafted. I noticed the number of no's change for each section they are used in. I think it would go better with the title if you used the same number of no's written in the title in each spot. I think the word "was" is missing in the 3rd line. Would be good if you told what type of antique of your dad's was broken, so the readers would know how valuable it may be and how great the temptation to lie was. Overall, good work. Good luck in the contest,
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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This a good poem. You covered multiple scenarios where temptation came into play. It is well-crafted. I noticed the number of no's change for each section they are used in. I think it would go better with the title if you used the same number of no's written in the title in each spot. I think the word "was" is missing in the 3rd line. Would be good if you told what type of antique of your dad's was broken, so the readers would know how valuable it may be and how great the temptation to lie was. Overall, good work. Good luck in the contest,
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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Thank you so much Sandra, I wanted to get a message out there without it being so serious. That's why I added that little risqué part at the end, to add some humor as well. As far as the amount of the no no's, I purposely changed for two different reasons, which was to keep from it becoming monotonous, and the other is to keep the rhythm even. I will check on the word was, and lol, an antique is an antique where my dad was concerned, yet it was the part that said, "and we've heard his temper blow" is the explanation of why the temptation to lie, along with the fact that it was an antique. I mean no disrespect; just explaining why I write as I do. Thanks for the great review, lovely comments and helpful feedback, my friend!
Do I appreciate it? Yes yes yes yes yes!! : )
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You are by no means being disrespectful when you explain your perspective. I expect a back-and-forth exchange because we all are trying to become better poets/writers. I caught that little witty/ sarcasm with the yes's. :) Please consider reading some poems in my portfolio. Good luck in the contest!
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You are so very sweet Sandra, and now that the contest is over, I am able to name you as a buddy and become a fan of yours.
I have read & reviewed two of your awesome works, and will be notified of more then as they come out. I do want to tell you a little about me. I am a person who tries to always be kind, and I understand how sometimes messages on text or any writing can come out looking the exact opposite of what someone means. Anyone who knows me will vouch that I don't have a mean or sarcastic bone in my body. So as your friend, I was trying to be kind funny and witty because my poem was called no no no. Just didn't want you to misunderstand.
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It's okay with me if you are sarcastic, I accept you as you are. I thought it was funny too! I will add you as a fan!
Comment from Whitewave
Well, right from the start, it's a Yes, Yes, Yes, Yes to Kenzie for her brilliant, exceptional art work!
Now, for the poem. I like its humor and purposeful, at times a little poignant, message. We have all been in similar situations and heard the, No, No, No, choosing to listen and obey or turn deaf and start to pray.
Thanks to you, and again to Kenzie.
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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Well, right from the start, it's a Yes, Yes, Yes, Yes to Kenzie for her brilliant, exceptional art work!
Now, for the poem. I like its humor and purposeful, at times a little poignant, message. We have all been in similar situations and heard the, No, No, No, choosing to listen and obey or turn deaf and start to pray.
Thanks to you, and again to Kenzie.
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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Hello there! I just took a screenshot of your awesome review and sent it to Kenz. Your comments are so very kind and they are so appreciated.
You are so right about temptation as it's what every single one of us struggle with, and have in common. But I find the more loyal I am to God, the more loyal He is back to me.
And yet, I am so undeserving of His Grace, but when I started asking Him daily to lead me on the path He wanted me to be on, is when He brought my poetry and me here to an awesome fellowship of wonderful authors, many Christians and like yourself, most of them awesome friends now.
I am so very blessed by those friendships. Thank you for being one of them!
Comment from lyenochka
This poem gives a great list of examples of temptation which really feel like actual autobiographical events. But how great that your conscience reminded you to say, NO! even to temptations in dreams!
Best wishes in the contest!
Beautiful drawing by your granddaughter! What a great artist!
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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This poem gives a great list of examples of temptation which really feel like actual autobiographical events. But how great that your conscience reminded you to say, NO! even to temptations in dreams!
Best wishes in the contest!
Beautiful drawing by your granddaughter! What a great artist!
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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Thank you so very much
Comment from John Ciarmello
I loved this one! It was refreshing, well-written, and to the point. Temptation is a tricky business. Most will take the chance if you think you can get away with something.
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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I loved this one! It was refreshing, well-written, and to the point. Temptation is a tricky business. Most will take the chance if you think you can get away with something.
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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Awe, thank you John! You are so very kind kind, and I appreciate the very nice comments! It is so appreciated my friend.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Lovely artwork by your granddaughter that goes well with your poem about temptation and the ability to listen to that inner voice. Good luck in the contest, I enjoyed your poem and author notes, cheers
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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Lovely artwork by your granddaughter that goes well with your poem about temptation and the ability to listen to that inner voice. Good luck in the contest, I enjoyed your poem and author notes, cheers
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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Thank you so very much Pearl! I truly appreciated your lovely review and comments! I will certainly pass on your sweet message to my granddaughter, as she loves when I use her artwork. When she was little, she drew close to fifty pictures of her and I holding hands and I still have every single one. Anyway, thank you again my friend!
Comment from royowen
You're granddaughrtbis certainly a very gifted artistic, although it's not my strength, I attempt to learn, but songwriting and attempting to write Poetry are my best things, beautifully written in rhyming couplets is great. Well done, yes you're fight, sin is cleaned, past present and future, Jesus lives in eternity, where there is only an eternal now! Beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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You're granddaughrtbis certainly a very gifted artistic, although it's not my strength, I attempt to learn, but songwriting and attempting to write Poetry are my best things, beautifully written in rhyming couplets is great. Well done, yes you're fight, sin is cleaned, past present and future, Jesus lives in eternity, where there is only an eternal now! Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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Thanks so much Roy, as you are always so gracious and generous with your complements. I love the art that Kenzie did, because it shows how satan can make evil look so beautiful like a flower, but its still the same evil of the symbolism of the snake. He cannot fool God, and I know that by asking Him daily to keep me surrounded by His love, to lead me daily, and let me a blessing to everyone I am in contact with, He led me here, where I am being blessed with you and so many other Christian authors. Oh what a Wonderful God that we serve, that he would turn the blessing around. Thank you again my friend!
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Amen dear friend
Comment from JoannaN
This is a poem with a nice story inside, a story of resilience, adhering to the rules, and having respect for other human beings. I like the structure, the rhymes used, and the message :)
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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This is a poem with a nice story inside, a story of resilience, adhering to the rules, and having respect for other human beings. I like the structure, the rhymes used, and the message :)
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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Joanna, thank you so much for your kind review and words. It is so very appreciated!
Comment from jessizero
This was a great poem about consciences. That little voice is always there to guide us, if we will only listen. I am relieved most of these things didn't happen. Tell your granddaughter that her picture is excellent. She is very talented (as are you!).
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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This was a great poem about consciences. That little voice is always there to guide us, if we will only listen. I am relieved most of these things didn't happen. Tell your granddaughter that her picture is excellent. She is very talented (as are you!).
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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Thanks so much Jessi, as you are always so gracious and generous with your complements. I love the art that Kenzie did, because it shows how satan can make evil look so beautiful like a flower, but its still the same evil of the symbolism of the snake. He cannot fool God, and I know that by asking Him daily to keep me surrounded by His love, to lead me daily, and let me a blessing to everyone I am in contact with, He led me here, where I am being blessed with you and so many other Christian authors. Oh what a Wonderful God that we serve, that he would turn the blessing around. Thank you again my friend!
Comment from LJbutterfly
I'm sure, as children and adults, we've all heard the voice of evil tell us to do something we know is wrong, like roll your groceries from the store to your car in a shopping cart and leave that cart where it doesn't belong, rather that return it to an allotted place. Your poem is clever and well crafted and I wish you the best in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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I'm sure, as children and adults, we've all heard the voice of evil tell us to do something we know is wrong, like roll your groceries from the store to your car in a shopping cart and leave that cart where it doesn't belong, rather that return it to an allotted place. Your poem is clever and well crafted and I wish you the best in the contest.
Comment Written 20-May-2022
reply by the author on 20-May-2022
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Thank you so very much for your very lovely review. Your example of the shopping cart is a perfect example of something we can try to justify, but it is wrong. I appreciate your kind words as well.
