Back Away from the Brink
Poem written after the death of my only child.41 total reviews
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Sandra,
first let me say from tearing eyes... Rest Easy Beautiful Ginia.
It's hard to separate review from the actual feeling I have at this moment... the lump wedged in my throat and the upheaval of emotion whilst entering into your personal-horrendous pain won't allow an objective collaboration. I am just someone who feels the pain of others in a very physical way and one who welcomes it, as if, in some way to alleviate even the most minute amount of pain and loss in being joined in the connection of it.
You are so fortunate to have had an Earth Angel designated to you... Linda, a true blessing. I hear it in your voice and within her steadfast action. Bless you Linda for negotiating-caring and keeping my new friend on even ground, whilst the ground had fallen completely away.
So no, this will not so much be a review, but more a connection to the strength and courage you have displayed in writing something so personal and painful... and yes a thousand times, I'm connected!
My utmost love and admiration to you for the bravery in this honest-heartbreaking truth... the hole that can never be filled, and at best can only ever be danced around and celebrated with the physical time spent with your Beautiful Ginia.
I had to read this multiple times to separate the tears from the response, and I hope it makes some kind of sense.
We all have personal journeys that seem to make no sense at all, but one can always find that ray of sunshine if one so chooses... what that is I do not know, it up to each individual to seek that out.
Bravo Sandra... kudos for sharing this heartbreaking story with us all... I know I am more because of it!
With our thoughts we create...
indelible magic memories.
Kindest regards,
James.
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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Hi Sandra,
first let me say from tearing eyes... Rest Easy Beautiful Ginia.
It's hard to separate review from the actual feeling I have at this moment... the lump wedged in my throat and the upheaval of emotion whilst entering into your personal-horrendous pain won't allow an objective collaboration. I am just someone who feels the pain of others in a very physical way and one who welcomes it, as if, in some way to alleviate even the most minute amount of pain and loss in being joined in the connection of it.
You are so fortunate to have had an Earth Angel designated to you... Linda, a true blessing. I hear it in your voice and within her steadfast action. Bless you Linda for negotiating-caring and keeping my new friend on even ground, whilst the ground had fallen completely away.
So no, this will not so much be a review, but more a connection to the strength and courage you have displayed in writing something so personal and painful... and yes a thousand times, I'm connected!
My utmost love and admiration to you for the bravery in this honest-heartbreaking truth... the hole that can never be filled, and at best can only ever be danced around and celebrated with the physical time spent with your Beautiful Ginia.
I had to read this multiple times to separate the tears from the response, and I hope it makes some kind of sense.
We all have personal journeys that seem to make no sense at all, but one can always find that ray of sunshine if one so chooses... what that is I do not know, it up to each individual to seek that out.
Bravo Sandra... kudos for sharing this heartbreaking story with us all... I know I am more because of it!
With our thoughts we create...
indelible magic memories.
Kindest regards,
James.
Comment Written 16-May-2022
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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Thank you so much. You get it..that life leaves us raw. I sense it in your poetry.
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
This is the one that I lost the review! Through my tears, my stupid jerking finger must have deleted. Last night and today I cry for you, as I have never lost a child; oh God please let me go first! I too just wrote a poem about the worst 6 months ever and have one ready for my nephew, who died almost exactly after his dad, my little brother. This must be the week for our sadness to come out.
Anyway there is so much passion in this poem for your daughter, and the pain had to be the most unbearable pain that a mother can feel!
I am so thankful for your Angel called Linda, as she was much more than just a friend. Any mother who can endure this and come back and learn to love again, is truly being held in the arms of Jesus. I know we had a couple rough meetings yesterday, but today is a new day and hopefully a new lovely friendship as you certainly are among, not just a fellowship of authors, but one of many Christians and caring and compassionate people. God Bless you my friend Sandra, and allow me to introduce myself one more time; I am Debi and I feel God telling me something very special about you, and when I hear my Heavenly Father talk to me, I listen! Once again, such a beautiful job, so please accept the stars you so deserve.
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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This is the one that I lost the review! Through my tears, my stupid jerking finger must have deleted. Last night and today I cry for you, as I have never lost a child; oh God please let me go first! I too just wrote a poem about the worst 6 months ever and have one ready for my nephew, who died almost exactly after his dad, my little brother. This must be the week for our sadness to come out.
Anyway there is so much passion in this poem for your daughter, and the pain had to be the most unbearable pain that a mother can feel!
I am so thankful for your Angel called Linda, as she was much more than just a friend. Any mother who can endure this and come back and learn to love again, is truly being held in the arms of Jesus. I know we had a couple rough meetings yesterday, but today is a new day and hopefully a new lovely friendship as you certainly are among, not just a fellowship of authors, but one of many Christians and caring and compassionate people. God Bless you my friend Sandra, and allow me to introduce myself one more time; I am Debi and I feel God telling me something very special about you, and when I hear my Heavenly Father talk to me, I listen! Once again, such a beautiful job, so please accept the stars you so deserve.
Comment Written 16-May-2022
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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Thank you so much for blessing me today with your heartfelt words and kindness. I have met only good people on this site. Thank you!
Comment from nomi338
I deeply feel your loss. I lost my oldest daughter, the only one with children. My wife and I were already raising her two children, her daughter has two sons and is expecting a daughter in a few months. So, the line continues. Her death still haunts me even though she has been deceased for about seven years.
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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I deeply feel your loss. I lost my oldest daughter, the only one with children. My wife and I were already raising her two children, her daughter has two sons and is expecting a daughter in a few months. So, the line continues. Her death still haunts me even though she has been deceased for about seven years.
Comment Written 16-May-2022
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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I'm sorry for your loss, and I understand how you feel. My daughter died in 2006 and her death haunts me too. There's nothing we can do. Thanks for reading my poem and rating it. Blessings to you and your family!
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Thank you.
Comment from tempeste
Ciao,
actually I went to check out your portfolio and was reading another of your poems .
The heart wrenching one where you speak about the tragic death of your child.
First off I am sorry for your immense loss.
I don't have children , nevertheless I can understand why you felt your life had no more meaning.
True friends like Linda are very hard to come by.
I hope she will be with you next week on the 16th anniversary / 26th May.
My heart goes out to you , stay strong.
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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Ciao,
actually I went to check out your portfolio and was reading another of your poems .
The heart wrenching one where you speak about the tragic death of your child.
First off I am sorry for your immense loss.
I don't have children , nevertheless I can understand why you felt your life had no more meaning.
True friends like Linda are very hard to come by.
I hope she will be with you next week on the 16th anniversary / 26th May.
My heart goes out to you , stay strong.
Comment Written 16-May-2022
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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Thank you for your heartfelt words of support. Yes. Linda and I are still close friends. She is my best friend. I appreciate you figuring out the exact unhappy anniversary date too. Thanks for rating the poem. Please read my others too. Blessings!
Sandra
Comment from Marienkiefer
I loved reading the poem, although it entailed difficult discussions and painful memories. A straight review would feel to me like an intrusion on very personal grief experienced by the author. And yet, I do feel an opportunity to communicate, inspired by your frankness. So I wish to comment on just three things for which I am grateful for that standout in your creativity and your poem:
-That your heart did not give out on that day, or 32 others, although close to heart attack.
-That your flowing tears did not drown you but kept you afloat to receive the gifts of God's angels
-That the losses that followed were what happened after. But nothing compares to the permanence of love that lived for 22 years as the name and the light of daughter.
May peace and love surround you. WWho of us can see our future? All the best.
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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I loved reading the poem, although it entailed difficult discussions and painful memories. A straight review would feel to me like an intrusion on very personal grief experienced by the author. And yet, I do feel an opportunity to communicate, inspired by your frankness. So I wish to comment on just three things for which I am grateful for that standout in your creativity and your poem:
-That your heart did not give out on that day, or 32 others, although close to heart attack.
-That your flowing tears did not drown you but kept you afloat to receive the gifts of God's angels
-That the losses that followed were what happened after. But nothing compares to the permanence of love that lived for 22 years as the name and the light of daughter.
May peace and love surround you. WWho of us can see our future? All the best.
Comment Written 15-May-2022
reply by the author on 16-May-2022
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Your beautiful words of support touched my aching heart. On the 26th of May, I will endure another unhappy anniversary. Thank you for your kindness to a stranger. Blessings to you!
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Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a beautifully written though heart wrenching story. So sorry for the tragic loss of your child. I can't imagine the pain. I lost my mom a brother and sister over the last two years and a very young niece of 37. And I'm struggling with those loss I can't imagine losing a child.
reply by the author on 15-May-2022
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This is a beautifully written though heart wrenching story. So sorry for the tragic loss of your child. I can't imagine the pain. I lost my mom a brother and sister over the last two years and a very young niece of 37. And I'm struggling with those loss I can't imagine losing a child.
Comment Written 15-May-2022
reply by the author on 15-May-2022
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Thank you for your supportive words. Sorry for your loss too.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I am so sorry for your loss and this story brought a tear to my eye, how very sad to lose your only child and whatever the circumstances, loss still cuts us deep inside with a wound that never heals. This is a heartbreaking poem Sandra, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 15-May-2022
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I am so sorry for your loss and this story brought a tear to my eye, how very sad to lose your only child and whatever the circumstances, loss still cuts us deep inside with a wound that never heals. This is a heartbreaking poem Sandra, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-May-2022
reply by the author on 15-May-2022
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Thank you for your kind words of support. It is indeed a heartbreaking experience.
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Sandra,
I'm so terribly sorry for your loss. I can't imagine the grief that you've endured and continue to feel. I'm glad that you had the support of a true friend to help you through the most trying time of your life. You've described your struggle with life and death so well that I can almost feel your pain and the desire to end it. I hope you find some comfort in the memories of your daughter and of course the real friendship that has been displayed to you. God bless and keep you.
Tom
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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Hello Sandra,
I'm so terribly sorry for your loss. I can't imagine the grief that you've endured and continue to feel. I'm glad that you had the support of a true friend to help you through the most trying time of your life. You've described your struggle with life and death so well that I can almost feel your pain and the desire to end it. I hope you find some comfort in the memories of your daughter and of course the real friendship that has been displayed to you. God bless and keep you.
Tom
Comment Written 14-May-2022
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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Thank you for reading my poem and your comforting words of support.
Comment from phill doran
Hello Sandra
I am sorry for your loss. There is nothing that can be said in such circumstances, but the actions of your friend were substantial and meaningful.
My impression of this piece is that perhaps poetry is not the right form for your thoughts in this instance. There's nothing wrong with your piece here, it is emotional and powerful, but I feel you could write a stronger, longer essay or recollection on your 32-days of imbalance; many parents would relate to you, and you clearly have a good command of your thoughts and a very direct way with words.
There is something cathartic in writing and your loss may find a purpose, as I say, every parent would relate - sadly, others will travel your exact journey "...None of us escapes this experience called life..." and your strength may feed theirs. Just my thoughts.
I wish you well with your continued writing.
cheers
phill
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reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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Hello Sandra
I am sorry for your loss. There is nothing that can be said in such circumstances, but the actions of your friend were substantial and meaningful.
My impression of this piece is that perhaps poetry is not the right form for your thoughts in this instance. There's nothing wrong with your piece here, it is emotional and powerful, but I feel you could write a stronger, longer essay or recollection on your 32-days of imbalance; many parents would relate to you, and you clearly have a good command of your thoughts and a very direct way with words.
There is something cathartic in writing and your loss may find a purpose, as I say, every parent would relate - sadly, others will travel your exact journey "...None of us escapes this experience called life..." and your strength may feed theirs. Just my thoughts.
I wish you well with your continued writing.
cheers
phill
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 14-May-2022
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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Hello Phil,
Thank you for your response. I prefer the medium of poetry but agree it could easily slide over into the essay category. I write a lot of narrative poetry that could be either poetry or an essay. Thanks for reading my poem and your words of support.
Comment from John Ciarmello
What a beautiful tribute to your daughter. She would have wanted you to move on and possibly your blessed friend was the way she told you that from the other side. Thank you for sharing this it is so beautiful and truthful.
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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What a beautiful tribute to your daughter. She would have wanted you to move on and possibly your blessed friend was the way she told you that from the other side. Thank you for sharing this it is so beautiful and truthful.
Comment Written 13-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Firstly, thank you for the exceptional rating. I never thought of my friend's actions in that way because she has always been a giving soul. I have had several signs my daughter watches over me. Poetry was my outlet during this horrible period.
