Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

Simple words, beautiful thought and well expressed in so few words. It reminds of the everlasting cycle of nature and life. Well done. Sending best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy

 Comment Written 05-May-2022

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reply by the author on 07-May-2022

Thanks, Wendy, for your kind review. Glad you liked it. Take care.

Comment from Rosemary Everson1

Excellent

Like your poem and words. When the sun rises the moon does descend. No truer words than what you wrote. When we wake up and there is sunshine, the day does seem brighter.

 Comment Written 04-May-2022

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reply by the author on 07-May-2022

Thanks, Rosemary. The rising sun and descending moon always give me a mystical sensation.

Comment from Bridge

Excellent

I loved your poem. It is very interesting that the sun arises and moon descends. The moon never arises. All the best to you in the contest.
With regards

 Comment Written 04-May-2022

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reply by the author on 07-May-2022

Thanks for reading and for the kind review.

Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko

Excellent

The objective correlative of your work reminisces the opposite directional movement between the sun and the moon.

The work highlights the sun as rising, while seeing the moon as descending.

The work earns its texture through its effective use of metaphors and a strict compliance with the eight words milieu of the poetry contest.

Excellent work. Bravo.

 Comment Written 04-May-2022

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reply by the author on 07-May-2022

Thanks so much for your kind and thoughtful review. So glad you like the poem.

reply by Lloyd T. Okoko on 08-May-2022

Remain Blessed.

Comment from KJ

Excellent

I would think it would be reaaaalllly hard to make 8 words into a fully formed idea, and not sure I would attempt myself. I like your use of imagery. I bet you did some serious googling of antonyms for "rising" or "arising" before settling on "sleeping" to end your work!!! "Retires" or "descends" might also have been interesting choices. Good job!

 Comment Written 03-May-2022

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reply by the author on 07-May-2022

Thanks so much for reading this and for your thoughtful review. I have changed the word sleeps to descends and it works much better.

Comment from Pam Lonsdale

Excellent

I like the use of two colors that are often seen together - gold and silver - to describe two heavenly bodies that high-five each other each day as one passes the torch to the next. Nicely done in such few words.

 Comment Written 03-May-2022

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reply by the author on 07-May-2022

Thanks so much for the lovely review. I think that the high giving personification idea is so cute and hilarious.