Interpretations For Consideration
Viewing comments for Chapter 28 "Unwavering"An Ekphrastic Poetry Collection for NaPoWriMo 2022
14 total reviews
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Debra,
Good job with this! I fought against a storm as an adult. It was long ago. A winter rain storm. Water was getting into my basement while the wind raged outside. Water had gathered against the north wall of my house. The ground was frozen, and no place to go except through a crack in my foundation. I went out there with a 5 gallon bucket, and started bailing in the face of the wind. I hollered at it as if it was a monster. I was ready to fight it. Was I a madman at that moment? You're darn right. "Enough is enough." You've got to be brave to fight against nature.
I especially like the alliteration in,
"freely flap and flutter"
I also like the pairing here,
"Absolutely resolute"
I also like the pairing of,
"ruffles chiffon"
Nicely penned!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 06-May-2022
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Hi Debra,
Good job with this! I fought against a storm as an adult. It was long ago. A winter rain storm. Water was getting into my basement while the wind raged outside. Water had gathered against the north wall of my house. The ground was frozen, and no place to go except through a crack in my foundation. I went out there with a 5 gallon bucket, and started bailing in the face of the wind. I hollered at it as if it was a monster. I was ready to fight it. Was I a madman at that moment? You're darn right. "Enough is enough." You've got to be brave to fight against nature.
I especially like the alliteration in,
"freely flap and flutter"
I also like the pairing here,
"Absolutely resolute"
I also like the pairing of,
"ruffles chiffon"
Nicely penned!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 05-May-2022
reply by the author on 06-May-2022
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Hi Kimbob :) Thank you for your great feedback and for sharing your own personal experience of fighting the storm. It sounds quite the ordeal...
I had a similar experience in the first house I ever owned - A water mains burst right outside the house and water was pouring downtime coal trap into my cellar... you could see the water rising up the cellar steps towards the ground floor and all I had to bail out with was a mop bucket! I called my aunt who lived close by and she brought her bucket round too and between us, we bailed until the water company stopped the water supply and got a machine round to suck the rest of the water from the cellar. I'd completely forgotten about that!! Thanks for triggering the memory!
Best wishes as always, Debra x
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Wow! That must have caused some damage. I hope you had a good insurance policy to cover a flood.
Spring flooding is always bad across Canada. Here in New Brunswick, the Saint John River always creates havoc in May, especially around Marysville. They are having a real bad time out in British Columbia where forest fires wiped out a lot of vegetation last summer. Over 18,000 people are stranded!
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Blimey.... what a dreadful situation.
We don't get such extreme weather here - we're fortunate that way.
Comment from karenina
Perhaps one of the strongest Etheree poems I've ever read. Seems no one ever wants to leave a line break when writing these... and it's SO effective here! I am pressing the keys a bit harder now... In support of "her" resolve. Bless you!
Karenina
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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Perhaps one of the strongest Etheree poems I've ever read. Seems no one ever wants to leave a line break when writing these... and it's SO effective here! I am pressing the keys a bit harder now... In support of "her" resolve. Bless you!
Karenina
Comment Written 01-May-2022
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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Hi Karenina :)
I'm so happy that you enjoyed this one - it's my first time writing and Etheree! Thank you for your kind and encouraging feedback.
Best wishes as always, Debra x
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Very fine. Stopped me in my tracks...
Comment from Lulube
great descriptive wording for great imagery. You created a very strong woman who's decision cannot be swayed any more. good one. just hope she never has to put into action.
lulube
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2022
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great descriptive wording for great imagery. You created a very strong woman who's decision cannot be swayed any more. good one. just hope she never has to put into action.
lulube
Comment Written 30-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2022
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Thanks so much for your feedback, Lulube :) I appreciate it!
Best wishes as always, Debra x
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no worries
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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I adore the sentiment her of this pillar of strength standing firm, the contrast of the delicate fluttering flimsy chiffon against the inner will of a firm rock-like mindset is magical and strong, much enjoyed Debra, this girl is determined things will change, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2022
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I adore the sentiment her of this pillar of strength standing firm, the contrast of the delicate fluttering flimsy chiffon against the inner will of a firm rock-like mindset is magical and strong, much enjoyed Debra, this girl is determined things will change, love Dolly x
Comment Written 30-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2022
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Thank you so much, Dolly :) I'm happy that you enjoyed this one :)
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Gloria ....
This is most intriguing. To me it seems that it is composed in reverse, but it is indeed not, as the poem reads as well from bottom to top as top to bottom.
It can also be interpreted literally or metaphorically. I personally like to see it as a bird taking off in flight.
Excellent reading here. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2022
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This is most intriguing. To me it seems that it is composed in reverse, but it is indeed not, as the poem reads as well from bottom to top as top to bottom.
It can also be interpreted literally or metaphorically. I personally like to see it as a bird taking off in flight.
Excellent reading here. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 29-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2022
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Hello Gloria :)
Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts with me - it's so good to know your interpretation - love the idea of the bird taking off in flight - I totally get it!
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from juliaSjames
Hello Debra
Excellent interpretation of the figure. You describe her femininity, her light and lovely clothes, but you also show the warrior inside who is determined to face down the storms of life. The etheree is a form I'm yet to use. Your confident write encourages me to try.
Stay safe and blessed, Julia
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2022
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Hello Debra
Excellent interpretation of the figure. You describe her femininity, her light and lovely clothes, but you also show the warrior inside who is determined to face down the storms of life. The etheree is a form I'm yet to use. Your confident write encourages me to try.
Stay safe and blessed, Julia
Comment Written 29-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2022
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Thank you so much, Julia, for your lovely feedback :) I appreciate you x
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from jessizero
This poem did a great job bringing life to the picture you included in your post. I like the last lines, when she realizes that enough is enough. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2022
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This poem did a great job bringing life to the picture you included in your post. I like the last lines, when she realizes that enough is enough. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2022
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Thank you so much, Jessi :)
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a powerful Etheree, Debra. I particularly liked the enjambement, and the end:
This time
she will stand her ground. Enough is enough.
Powerful stuff, and interestingly ambiguous.
Kate xx
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2022
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This is a powerful Etheree, Debra. I particularly liked the enjambement, and the end:
This time
she will stand her ground. Enough is enough.
Powerful stuff, and interestingly ambiguous.
Kate xx
Comment Written 29-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2022
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Thank you so much, Kate, I'm happy you enjoyed reading my poem.
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from lyenochka
Lovely etheree. I wonder what she is needing to stand her ground for. Perhaps it's a social statement that challenges her need to be totally feminine as chiffon skirt shows her and at the same time, she needs to stand up for her rights.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2022
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Lovely etheree. I wonder what she is needing to stand her ground for. Perhaps it's a social statement that challenges her need to be totally feminine as chiffon skirt shows her and at the same time, she needs to stand up for her rights.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2022
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Maybe you're right? I don't know!
Thanks for your great feedback, Helen :)
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Mama Baer
Fantastic! The imagery, the delicious words, and the meter all contribute to this elegant yet powerful message. And the "fun" alliteration throughout! We are so close to the finish, Debra! It has been a joy to take this journey with you.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2022
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Fantastic! The imagery, the delicious words, and the meter all contribute to this elegant yet powerful message. And the "fun" alliteration throughout! We are so close to the finish, Debra! It has been a joy to take this journey with you.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2022
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Thank you so much, Mama Baer, for your lovely feedback and generous star rating. I appreciate both!
Best wishes as always, Debra x
