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Viewing comments for Chapter 26 "Pickled Planets"An Ekphrastic Poetry Collection for NaPoWriMo 2022
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Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Debra,
You have quite an imagination to be able to see a mini-universe inside a pickle jar. But I suppose, with all those Mustard, Coriander, Celery, Fennel & Dill seeds, Allspice berries, and whole cloves floating around, it might give that impression. Hey, maybe that's where we are! ...inside one of God's jars of pickles! "PLEASE DON'T SHAKE!"
I love the triolet for its flow and repetition. You did a great job with it, adding stupendous rhymes for "universe/jar",
"Just take a look, it's in my purse -
I'll trade it for a candy bar!"
Nicely penned for the Triolet event in Potlatch Poetry.
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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Hi Debra,
You have quite an imagination to be able to see a mini-universe inside a pickle jar. But I suppose, with all those Mustard, Coriander, Celery, Fennel & Dill seeds, Allspice berries, and whole cloves floating around, it might give that impression. Hey, maybe that's where we are! ...inside one of God's jars of pickles! "PLEASE DON'T SHAKE!"
I love the triolet for its flow and repetition. You did a great job with it, adding stupendous rhymes for "universe/jar",
"Just take a look, it's in my purse -
I'll trade it for a candy bar!"
Nicely penned for the Triolet event in Potlatch Poetry.
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 01-May-2022
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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Hi Kimbob :) Thank you for your lovely feedback. Glad you enjoyed the read! Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from pome lover
that is very ekphrastic :) and you are most original, and humorous.
Wonderful choice of words to rhyme, and what an imagination - a small universe in a pickle jar-in your purse. You should tell that one to your class! Amazing!
PS
Have you just started wearing glasses?
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2022
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that is very ekphrastic :) and you are most original, and humorous.
Wonderful choice of words to rhyme, and what an imagination - a small universe in a pickle jar-in your purse. You should tell that one to your class! Amazing!
PS
Have you just started wearing glasses?
Comment Written 29-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2022
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Hi Katharine :)
Thank you so much for your lovely feedback. Glad you enjoyed this one - I had fun writing it!
I've worn glasses for a while, but just for long distance... the photo was taken at the theatre on Monday evening - I needed my glasses to see the stage properly!
Best wishes as always, Debra x
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The theater, how wonderful.
I haven't been since this crazy covid started. I have to wear them for distance, too, mostly daytime sunglasses.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Pickled Planets
by Debra White
Excellent Ekphrastic Triolet entry for the Potlatch challenge. I love ekphrastic poems. I really like the presentation of the mini universe. It's a very zen poem.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2022
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Pickled Planets
by Debra White
Excellent Ekphrastic Triolet entry for the Potlatch challenge. I love ekphrastic poems. I really like the presentation of the mini universe. It's a very zen poem.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2022
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Glad you enjoyed this one, Gypsy :)
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Gloria ....
Such a lovely triolet, and I thoroughly enjoy your subject. Vinegar of course can be understood a few different ways, but I like the interpretation that we at least on Earth have gotten ourselves into a bit of a pickle.
Wonderful and a most enjoyable read today. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2022
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Such a lovely triolet, and I thoroughly enjoy your subject. Vinegar of course can be understood a few different ways, but I like the interpretation that we at least on Earth have gotten ourselves into a bit of a pickle.
Wonderful and a most enjoyable read today. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 28-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2022
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Thank you so much, Gloria :)
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
There is another universe living under the water and under the ground, a world we know nothing about and I enjoyed your clever poem about it Debra, a fine poem with good rhymes and flow, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2022
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There is another universe living under the water and under the ground, a world we know nothing about and I enjoyed your clever poem about it Debra, a fine poem with good rhymes and flow, love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2022
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Thank you for your feedback, Dolly :)
Much appreciated as always,
Best wishes, Debra x
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Your description is excellent, Dera, and it works well with the quirky triolet poem form. However, what really entrances me is the quirky picture. I find it most unusual. Kate xx
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2022
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Your description is excellent, Dera, and it works well with the quirky triolet poem form. However, what really entrances me is the quirky picture. I find it most unusual. Kate xx
Comment Written 28-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2022
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I love the picture too :)
Thank you for your kind feedback, Kate, I appreciate it...
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from lyenochka
I like the fun picture and you worked in a happy beat for your imaginative pickled universe triolet. And well, maybe a candy bar might be more satisfying than pickled planets. Lol.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2022
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I like the fun picture and you worked in a happy beat for your imaginative pickled universe triolet. And well, maybe a candy bar might be more satisfying than pickled planets. Lol.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2022
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LOL! Definitely!
Thanks for your lovely feedback, Helen :)
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from juliaSjames
This delightfully silly triolet made me laugh, and I bet kids would love it. Uni-verse, Multi-verse, and now a Pickled Mini-verse. I've been exposed to so many new poetic forms during this poetry challenge that I think these three could well be added to the list. Your write is skillful as well as entertaining, not easy to add enjambment to the triolet.
Thanks for sharing
Stay safe and blessed, Julia
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2022
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This delightfully silly triolet made me laugh, and I bet kids would love it. Uni-verse, Multi-verse, and now a Pickled Mini-verse. I've been exposed to so many new poetic forms during this poetry challenge that I think these three could well be added to the list. Your write is skillful as well as entertaining, not easy to add enjambment to the triolet.
Thanks for sharing
Stay safe and blessed, Julia
Comment Written 27-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2022
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Thank you for your kind feedback, Julia :) Glad you enjoyed this one - I had fun writing it!
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from karenina
I'm realizing my memory for forms is slipping with age. I just went off to refresh myself:
"A Triolet is a poetic form consisting of only 8 lines.
Within a Triolet, the 1st, 4th, and 7th lines
repeat, and the 2nd and 8th lines do as well.
The rhyme scheme is simple: ABaAabAB, capital
letters representing the repeated lines.
(Grin)--- I'm now refreshed on what a Triolet is and YOU wrote it perfectly! (As if there was a doubt!)
Vinegar! It seems to preserve everything!
Nice one Debra.
Karenina
There is no set syllable count, although the preferred one for repeating forms is the standard of eight syllables but there are many good examples around using iambic pentameter and similar meters."
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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2022
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I'm realizing my memory for forms is slipping with age. I just went off to refresh myself:
"A Triolet is a poetic form consisting of only 8 lines.
Within a Triolet, the 1st, 4th, and 7th lines
repeat, and the 2nd and 8th lines do as well.
The rhyme scheme is simple: ABaAabAB, capital
letters representing the repeated lines.
(Grin)--- I'm now refreshed on what a Triolet is and YOU wrote it perfectly! (As if there was a doubt!)
Vinegar! It seems to preserve everything!
Nice one Debra.
Karenina
There is no set syllable count, although the preferred one for repeating forms is the standard of eight syllables but there are many good examples around using iambic pentameter and similar meters."
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Comment Written 27-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2022
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Hi Karenina :)
Thank you so much for your kind feedback. I'm glad you enjoyed the read! Best wishes as always, Debra x
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Peace!
K
Comment from royowen
You've written a triolet Debra, and a good one, the two repeating lines need to be good ones in the process of writing these, and you've done a darn good job, well done, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2022
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You've written a triolet Debra, and a good one, the two repeating lines need to be good ones in the process of writing these, and you've done a darn good job, well done, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 27-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2022
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Thanks so much, Roy!
I'm really happy you enjoyed my triolet :)
Best wishes as always, Debra
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Most welcome
