Nor'westers in Summer
An acrostic poem4 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
Ciao mystery poet, you now have 2 votes!
In my country we have bad storms too towards the end of Summer.
I have to disconnect the electrical devices to avoid them from being damaged ( sigh)
Living in a valley at 700 m the thunder makes my windows rattle .. good thing my house is made of stone and the walls are 40 cm wide. ( biggrin)
I enjoyed reading about your country and its climate.
Keep safe!
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
Ciao mystery poet, you now have 2 votes!
In my country we have bad storms too towards the end of Summer.
I have to disconnect the electrical devices to avoid them from being damaged ( sigh)
Living in a valley at 700 m the thunder makes my windows rattle .. good thing my house is made of stone and the walls are 40 cm wide. ( biggrin)
I enjoyed reading about your country and its climate.
Keep safe!
Comment Written 17-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work. Thank you very much for the vote...it is very encouraging.
It was good to connect with you.
With regards
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I'll take a look at your portfolio when the contest is over and I know your name.
I enjoy reading work from people around the globe.
I like to read about different cultures and customs.
Ciao!
Comment from Frank Malley
Nor'westers" is an acrostic poem which finds functional lines for all the letters of this apostrophy'd word. I think "feral" is a poor choice, as it always applies to animals in animals that have returned to life as a wild animal after having been unsuccessfully domesticated. Many lines could have used stronger, more compelling words; eg., 'Thunder and lightning in its cohort' has the strength of 'cohort,' a word that still has military associations, whereas 'mates' is an English tavern term for buddies. This poem doesn't do all it could to present a Nor'wester as the powerful meteorological force that it is.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2022
Nor'westers" is an acrostic poem which finds functional lines for all the letters of this apostrophy'd word. I think "feral" is a poor choice, as it always applies to animals in animals that have returned to life as a wild animal after having been unsuccessfully domesticated. Many lines could have used stronger, more compelling words; eg., 'Thunder and lightning in its cohort' has the strength of 'cohort,' a word that still has military associations, whereas 'mates' is an English tavern term for buddies. This poem doesn't do all it could to present a Nor'wester as the powerful meteorological force that it is.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2022
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work. Thank you very much for the helpful suggestions. I have made the changes . I really appreciate the help.
With regards
Comment from Paul McFarland
It's the Nor' Easters in my neck of the woods. I'll have to take a crack at an acrostic sometime. I'm a stickler for rhyme, and it always seemed difficult to deal with both ends of the line.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2022
It's the Nor' Easters in my neck of the woods. I'll have to take a crack at an acrostic sometime. I'm a stickler for rhyme, and it always seemed difficult to deal with both ends of the line.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2022
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work. It is greatly appreciated.
With regards
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I'm in the process of writing my first acrostic poem, so I've been reading the work of others when I can. I think you've done a great job of taking your vertical word and telling us the story of what it is and the awe it inspires in both humans and nature. I was thinking of rhyming mine, but you've inspired me to make it more of a free verse structure.
Here in the States, we have Nor'easters that dump snow and rain, but they certainly don't uproot trees!
Good luck in this contest.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2022
I'm in the process of writing my first acrostic poem, so I've been reading the work of others when I can. I think you've done a great job of taking your vertical word and telling us the story of what it is and the awe it inspires in both humans and nature. I was thinking of rhyming mine, but you've inspired me to make it more of a free verse structure.
Here in the States, we have Nor'easters that dump snow and rain, but they certainly don't uproot trees!
Good luck in this contest.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2022
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Thank you for the wonderful review .It is greatly appreciated. Also all the best to you in writing your poem.
With regards