Interpretations For Consideration
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Moley Smoke"An Ekphrastic Poetry Collection for NaPoWriMo 2022
16 total reviews
Comment from karenina
I felt as if I'd fallen into Alice's deep hole! Instead of meeting Cheshire Cat-- who knew? There'd be a mole! He did beguile, he made me smile, he was a lively host! I'd like to sit for tea with him, but I'd decline his toast!
(smile)
Karenina
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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I felt as if I'd fallen into Alice's deep hole! Instead of meeting Cheshire Cat-- who knew? There'd be a mole! He did beguile, he made me smile, he was a lively host! I'd like to sit for tea with him, but I'd decline his toast!
(smile)
Karenina
Comment Written 12-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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I love your feedback!
This is probably the poem that I enjoyed writing the most during the challenge - I don't know where the mole came from, but he wasn't having the best of days!
Debra x
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As you can see your mole inspired me to pen a little ditty for a review...
Clever MOLE, he!
Comment from lyenochka
Lol! So he came up out of his nice cozy mole hole for air because he had burnt his toast! That's cute as it starts out rather mysteriously but then the ending is rather funny!
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2022
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Lol! So he came up out of his nice cozy mole hole for air because he had burnt his toast! That's cute as it starts out rather mysteriously but then the ending is rather funny!
Comment Written 08-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2022
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Glad you enjoyed this one, Helen, and thank you for the feedback :) Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Gloria ....
Ha, I love your humour here, Debra. This sounds like a great thing to do with burnt toast, And your title just brings it all together.
I got a great laugh from this, and a smile that just goes on. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2022
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Ha, I love your humour here, Debra. This sounds like a great thing to do with burnt toast, And your title just brings it all together.
I got a great laugh from this, and a smile that just goes on. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 06-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2022
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Thank you so much, Gloria :) I'm happy you enjoyed this one - it was fun to write! Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Mama Baer
A-d-o-r-a-b-l-e! I am loving reading your ekphrastic poetry. You are a poet, indeed, and cover such a wide range of genres. This is a clever one! Love it.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2022
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A-d-o-r-a-b-l-e! I am loving reading your ekphrastic poetry. You are a poet, indeed, and cover such a wide range of genres. This is a clever one! Love it.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2022
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Thank you so much, Mama Baer, for your generous star rating and lovely feedback :) I'm happy you enjoyed this one - it was fun to write! Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Aussie
Hee, Hee, a mole with a toaster? Well, I guess the animals have all mod cons these days. Smoky Joe hiding in his hole, a castle with a microwave; Smokey Joe squinting so, Frank Sinatra singing Smoke gets in your eyes!
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2022
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Hee, Hee, a mole with a toaster? Well, I guess the animals have all mod cons these days. Smoky Joe hiding in his hole, a castle with a microwave; Smokey Joe squinting so, Frank Sinatra singing Smoke gets in your eyes!
Comment Written 06-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2022
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Thank you so much :) I'm happy you enjoyed this one - it was fun to write! Best wishes, Debra
Comment from juliaSjames
Your imagination is out of bounds, Debra. Yup, there's a mole in the smoke. Just how much toast did he burn to create this inferno?
You have a true talent for humour poetry. Have you checked Ancestry.com to see if Edward Lear is one of your forebears?
Thanks for the giggle.
Stay safe and blessed, Julia
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2022
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Your imagination is out of bounds, Debra. Yup, there's a mole in the smoke. Just how much toast did he burn to create this inferno?
You have a true talent for humour poetry. Have you checked Ancestry.com to see if Edward Lear is one of your forebears?
Thanks for the giggle.
Stay safe and blessed, Julia
Comment Written 06-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2022
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Thank you so much, Julia, you're too kind! :) I'm happy you enjoyed this one - it was fun to write! Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Debra,
Burnt toast for the smoke in your picture... perfect nonsense poem to accompany it! You are able to humanize the "manic mole" very well. You gave him personality. He can speak! Wow!
"I've gone and burnt my bloody toast!"
How many people have done that? Too many crumbs left in the bottom of the toaster! Only a matter of time before they catch on fire... and there goes the smoke alarm!
You added some nice alliteration,
"swirling smoke"
"manic mole"
"blinked a bit"
"stranger still, he spoke"
"burnt my bloody"
"coughed and coughed"
Nice rhyming with "aloft/coughed".
We had a teacher in Grade 12 at my High School. His name was "Mr. Margolian". He was actually a very good Geometry teacher. But he'd remind you of Danny DeVito as the Penguin in one of those Batman movies. His nickname, and as you know... kids can be cruel... "The Mole". I didn't name him! He had been dubbed long before I got to that school!
Oops! I have to mention as well... your title, "Moley Smoke". Nice play on words for "Holy Smoke"!
Nicely penned!
Hugs,
Kimbob
p.s. You're doing a good job with the NaPoWriMo.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2022
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Hi Debra,
Burnt toast for the smoke in your picture... perfect nonsense poem to accompany it! You are able to humanize the "manic mole" very well. You gave him personality. He can speak! Wow!
"I've gone and burnt my bloody toast!"
How many people have done that? Too many crumbs left in the bottom of the toaster! Only a matter of time before they catch on fire... and there goes the smoke alarm!
You added some nice alliteration,
"swirling smoke"
"manic mole"
"blinked a bit"
"stranger still, he spoke"
"burnt my bloody"
"coughed and coughed"
Nice rhyming with "aloft/coughed".
We had a teacher in Grade 12 at my High School. His name was "Mr. Margolian". He was actually a very good Geometry teacher. But he'd remind you of Danny DeVito as the Penguin in one of those Batman movies. His nickname, and as you know... kids can be cruel... "The Mole". I didn't name him! He had been dubbed long before I got to that school!
Oops! I have to mention as well... your title, "Moley Smoke". Nice play on words for "Holy Smoke"!
Nicely penned!
Hugs,
Kimbob
p.s. You're doing a good job with the NaPoWriMo.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2022
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Hey Kim :) You grew some new whiskers!! They suit you LOL!
Thank you so much for your thorough and lovely review of my poem. I'm happy you enjoyed reading it - it was fun to write :)
Best wishes as always, Debra
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Especially for Easter, my dear!
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a very amusing outlandish poem. It has shades of Lewis Carroll's work, both in the fact that the animal has humanoid characeristics and because of the mundanen yet at the same time bizarre, things that happen to it.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2022
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This is a very amusing outlandish poem. It has shades of Lewis Carroll's work, both in the fact that the animal has humanoid characeristics and because of the mundanen yet at the same time bizarre, things that happen to it.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2022
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Thank you so much, Kate :) I'm happy you enjoyed this one - it was fun to write! Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Ha ha ha, a mole making toast and burning it! What a lunch Debra, this is the funniest write I have read in ages, you really entertained me here, clever rhymes and a fun sentiment, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2022
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Ha ha ha, a mole making toast and burning it! What a lunch Debra, this is the funniest write I have read in ages, you really entertained me here, clever rhymes and a fun sentiment, love Dolly x
Comment Written 06-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2022
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Thank you so much, Dolly :) I'm happy you enjoyed this one - it was fun to write! Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is really quite charming and amusing. I can just see that mole with his paws up and smoke rolling from his hole. (Actually tried smoking them out of my garden once--didn't work) The idea of burned toast is terrific. I think weird is correct spelling but maybe not in the Queen's English.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2022
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This is really quite charming and amusing. I can just see that mole with his paws up and smoke rolling from his hole. (Actually tried smoking them out of my garden once--didn't work) The idea of burned toast is terrific. I think weird is correct spelling but maybe not in the Queen's English.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2022
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Thank you so much, Carol, for your kind feedback and for pointing out the spelling error! I've put it right ;)
Thanks and kind regards, Debra
