The watch
A short story3 total reviews
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Wow. That was quite the super-power you selected for a day. I know this is play time but gee wilikers, cheating on a math test. You could have rob a bank, or entered the girls' lockeroom... but cheating.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2022
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Wow. That was quite the super-power you selected for a day. I know this is play time but gee wilikers, cheating on a math test. You could have rob a bank, or entered the girls' lockeroom... but cheating.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2022
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Thank you for taking time to read and review my work. It is greatly appreciated.
With regards
Comment from Thatguypk
I find this so amusing. Imagine having that superpower to make yourself invisible and to use it for such an insignificant piece of mischief. :-) A very silly and enjoyable piece of fiction.
PK
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2022
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I find this so amusing. Imagine having that superpower to make yourself invisible and to use it for such an insignificant piece of mischief. :-) A very silly and enjoyable piece of fiction.
PK
Comment Written 22-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2022
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work. It is greatly appreciated. Thank you for the encouragement.
With regards
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
It may be an idea to incorporate some line breaks into your work. Inserting clear lines between paragraphs can make for a cleaner write which is more easily followed on screen. Also, many folk skip over blocks of unbroken text.
Fits the brief as far as superpowers and word count go, which is always nice.
caught my eyes.Did it work? - spacing here.
As I bent to pick it up , a genie stood- no spacing needed before the comma.
You don't need spaces after the opening speech marks and before the closing ones.
Ideally, the punctuation should come inside of the speech marks when punctuating dialogue.
Poof ! he disappeared. - He.
in my pocket.Yes! It did work! - spacing.
I checked out Thomas's answers went out took off the watch and came in and quickly marked out my answers before I forgot. - insert a comma before went and the first and.
So there you have, cheating pays! And here ends our lesson for the day.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2022
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Hi there,
It may be an idea to incorporate some line breaks into your work. Inserting clear lines between paragraphs can make for a cleaner write which is more easily followed on screen. Also, many folk skip over blocks of unbroken text.
Fits the brief as far as superpowers and word count go, which is always nice.
caught my eyes.Did it work? - spacing here.
As I bent to pick it up , a genie stood- no spacing needed before the comma.
You don't need spaces after the opening speech marks and before the closing ones.
Ideally, the punctuation should come inside of the speech marks when punctuating dialogue.
Poof ! he disappeared. - He.
in my pocket.Yes! It did work! - spacing.
I checked out Thomas's answers went out took off the watch and came in and quickly marked out my answers before I forgot. - insert a comma before went and the first and.
So there you have, cheating pays! And here ends our lesson for the day.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 22-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2022
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work. Thank you for all your help. It is greatly appreciated. I did edit my work.
With regards
