Comment from Carolyn Dooley

Excellent

Thank you for sharing this poem and the story is so powerful. I really like the picture. I am praying for the war to end. It is going to take all of us to pray together. You have a great day and stay safe.

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 03-May-2022

Thanks so much. I?m praying hard too. God bless.

reply by Carolyn Dooley on 03-May-2022

You are welcome.

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi there,

Well this one fits all the criteria. six syllables, check. Two lines, check. Internal and end rhymes, check.

I'd disagree though that the poem understands grief as it's much more complex and individual thing but for the purposes of this competition, it does the job

All the best
GMG

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022

Good point. I have changed the word understands to explores?that is whatI was really trying to say. Thanks.

reply by giraffmang on 23-Apr-2022

I think that's spot on.

Comment from John Ciarmello

Excellent

Nicely said. I'm going to read it again to get its full meaning. I sense you're saying we can control our grief if only for a few minutes of relief. I wish you much success with the contest.

 Comment Written 20-Mar-2022

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reply by the author on 23-Mar-2022

Thanks so much. I think that if people believe that they will feel better after a while that belief in and of itself will bring some relief. Thanks again for reading this and for your kind words.

Comment from in777wr#

Excellent

A very true statement. Your rhyming scheme is consistent throughout the poem. You delivered a needful message with this two-line poem. This was well crafted. Nice job.

 Comment Written 20-Mar-2022

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reply by the author on 23-Mar-2022

Thanks so much. I'm so glad you like it. Take care.

reply by in777wr# on 23-Mar-2022

You are welcome.