Comment from Carolyn Dooley

Excellent

You have a message, it is short and to the point. You have a meaning poem. I enjoyed reading the post. You have a way with words Thank you for posting. Have a great day. Good luck.

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2022

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2022

Thanks, Carolyn. So glad you like this. You are so kind and encouraging.
Jane

reply by Carolyn Dooley on 06-Mar-2022

You are welcom. And keep up with the great work.

Comment from SimianSavant

Excellent

*revised up due to correction*
This is good but it does not meet the syllable count requirement of the contest (the last line is 6 instead of 5). Fix it and I will be happy to modify this review up a star.
-Harambe

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2022

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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2022

Hi. Thanks for pointing out. I have changed the last line and would love it if you would modify the review up a star. Also if you could let me know how you think the revised last line sounds, I would love thanks!

reply by the author on 03-Mar-2022

Hi. Thanks for pointing out. I have changed the last line and would love it if you would modify the review up a star. Also if you could let me know how you think the revised last line sounds, I would love thanks!

reply by SimianSavant on 03-Mar-2022

It is fine, though I think it might have more power if you converted the verb tense. Something like *this dark sultry night*