Football - A Novel
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Comment from Sankey
It seems I missed the notification of this. I had wondered how you were doing with the service where you were.
A lovely romantic chapter with some lovely history. "You've put a lot of planning into this, [did](have)n't you?"
OR "You['ve] put a lot of planning into this, didn't you?"
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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It seems I missed the notification of this. I had wondered how you were doing with the service where you were.
A lovely romantic chapter with some lovely history. "You've put a lot of planning into this, [did](have)n't you?"
OR "You['ve] put a lot of planning into this, didn't you?"
Comment Written 27-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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Sorry, it didn't come into your box. Thank you.
Comment from Judy Lawless
I'm way behind on my reviewing, Barbara, due to obstructed vision. Today it's better so I'm going to get as many done as I can.
This is a beautiful chapter. You're bringing together all of the issues, real or imagined, that Katherine, Gabriel and the boys have been going through. Now that most of them have been dealt with, they can face the chemo together. The date idea was excellent. It brought a tear to my eye.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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I'm way behind on my reviewing, Barbara, due to obstructed vision. Today it's better so I'm going to get as many done as I can.
This is a beautiful chapter. You're bringing together all of the issues, real or imagined, that Katherine, Gabriel and the boys have been going through. Now that most of them have been dealt with, they can face the chemo together. The date idea was excellent. It brought a tear to my eye.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the kind review and I'll pray for your recovery.
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You're most welcome, Barbara, and I thank you for your prayers. Today I'm feeling I'm on the road to recovery. Hugs
Comment from BLACKTITANIUM86
This is going to be one of the thickest book
known to man. I guess things will slim down
in the editing room? Nevertheless, you continue
to impress. Keep Writing. And don't forget to stop
by to talk. For, there is always something new on
deck. Stay Connected
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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This is going to be one of the thickest book
known to man. I guess things will slim down
in the editing room? Nevertheless, you continue
to impress. Keep Writing. And don't forget to stop
by to talk. For, there is always something new on
deck. Stay Connected
Comment Written 23-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. This novel is under the 100,000 word limit for romance novels.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Good writing.
I asked my wife if she would give up her phone under these circumstances - NO!
I asked myself if I would be upset/bothered by a bunch of nuisance calls - YES
So we agreed that he should not ask for the phone (controlling) and he should count the calls if excessive - kids are too needy and she's a helicopter parent. Deal breakers, both.
But that's just us. lol
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022
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Good writing.
I asked my wife if she would give up her phone under these circumstances - NO!
I asked myself if I would be upset/bothered by a bunch of nuisance calls - YES
So we agreed that he should not ask for the phone (controlling) and he should count the calls if excessive - kids are too needy and she's a helicopter parent. Deal breakers, both.
But that's just us. lol
Best wishes.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022
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LOL Under the circumstances I would give up my phone. If and emergency happened, she could still be reached. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
A romantic setting for two wonderful characters in your story. I'm so glad that Katherine is making progress with her cancer and hopefully the last appointment will have great results.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022
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A romantic setting for two wonderful characters in your story. I'm so glad that Katherine is making progress with her cancer and hopefully the last appointment will have great results.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. Katherine still has a long way to go with her treatment.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-I liked the picture of the gazebo
and the story to go with it, barbara.
-You did a good job showing how much
Katherine and Gabe care about each other.
-The date was a good idea and gave them
some needed alone time to just be themselves
and enjoy a special occasion.
-I also like the ending section that shows
strong family bonds, and making sure
that the boys understand things that are
going on; that is so important for young people
because they worry a lot.
-One small thing:
and now cancer you've impressed me
[comma after cancer]
-Hope you had a good flight and a good visit.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022
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-I liked the picture of the gazebo
and the story to go with it, barbara.
-You did a good job showing how much
Katherine and Gabe care about each other.
-The date was a good idea and gave them
some needed alone time to just be themselves
and enjoy a special occasion.
-I also like the ending section that shows
strong family bonds, and making sure
that the boys understand things that are
going on; that is so important for young people
because they worry a lot.
-One small thing:
and now cancer you've impressed me
[comma after cancer]
-Hope you had a good flight and a good visit.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022
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Thank you, I will make that correction.
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You are welcome.
Comment from amahra
I love this chapter. It is so romantic. Gabriel always comes through for Katherine. Also, I don't know if you mentioned this in earlier chapters, because I missed them. But I like knowing why Katherine was dragging her feet with such a great guy as Gab. She was not sure of her worth when she felt she had not measured up to her dad and husband. If it was repeated background, thank you. I needed to know that. Just one thing below:
"While married to George, I felt I couldn't be the wife he[ wanted/needed]."
[putting a slash between words is for narration but doesn't belong in dialogue. People don't speak in slashes.] Dialogue must always sound like we speak ["...the wife he wanted or needed.]
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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I love this chapter. It is so romantic. Gabriel always comes through for Katherine. Also, I don't know if you mentioned this in earlier chapters, because I missed them. But I like knowing why Katherine was dragging her feet with such a great guy as Gab. She was not sure of her worth when she felt she had not measured up to her dad and husband. If it was repeated background, thank you. I needed to know that. Just one thing below:
"While married to George, I felt I couldn't be the wife he[ wanted/needed]."
[putting a slash between words is for narration but doesn't belong in dialogue. People don't speak in slashes.] Dialogue must always sound like we speak ["...the wife he wanted or needed.]
Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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You're right. Thank you for the help.
Comment from Annmuma
I am enjoying the story and the characters and am almost sad to see it come to an end in 4 more posts. My only problem is the size of the font. It is a little small for me to see and I wish it were just a tad larger. Good writing. ann
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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I am enjoying the story and the characters and am almost sad to see it come to an end in 4 more posts. My only problem is the size of the font. It is a little small for me to see and I wish it were just a tad larger. Good writing. ann
Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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I write in 26 font. I don't understand why when I copy and paste it gets smaller. I'll see what I can do.
Comment from Anne Johnston
I loved this chapter. Gabriel really put a lot of thought into this date with Katherine, showing her how much he cared for her. I am glad he loves her boys as well as her, and that they are willing for him to be with their mom.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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I loved this chapter. Gabriel really put a lot of thought into this date with Katherine, showing her how much he cared for her. I am glad he loves her boys as well as her, and that they are willing for him to be with their mom.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome, Barbara
Comment from Sanku
Beautiful chapter, beautiful date and beautiful relationship. They have slowly waltzed into a firm relationship. I enjoyed reading about their date and the dialogue echoed the seriousness and sincerety on both sides
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Beautiful chapter, beautiful date and beautiful relationship. They have slowly waltzed into a firm relationship. I enjoyed reading about their date and the dialogue echoed the seriousness and sincerety on both sides
Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.