Reflections
Viewing comments for Chapter 62 "Embrace"Illustrated poems
6 total reviews
Comment from juliaSjames
Excellent imagery of the loved one. Asleep or awake she is in the care of a benevolent universe. The last line could refer to the author or to the Divine.
In these short poems the title can enhance or amplify the write. Something to bear in mind for the future. Also every word/ syllable counts. Adjectives could have been used instead of the definite article when referring to the moon and sun.
However I think this is a worthy entry just as it is and should do well in the contest
Best of luck
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2022
Excellent imagery of the loved one. Asleep or awake she is in the care of a benevolent universe. The last line could refer to the author or to the Divine.
In these short poems the title can enhance or amplify the write. Something to bear in mind for the future. Also every word/ syllable counts. Adjectives could have been used instead of the definite article when referring to the moon and sun.
However I think this is a worthy entry just as it is and should do well in the contest
Best of luck
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
Comment Written 18-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2022
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Thanks, Julia. For the kind review,Take care,
Jane
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You're welcome
Comment from Hannah Baham
Very pretty verses, my criticism is that I wish it were longer. Even still, it's a beautiful narrative of how love can seem to make every contradiction work and every opposite complimentary and beautiful.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2022
Very pretty verses, my criticism is that I wish it were longer. Even still, it's a beautiful narrative of how love can seem to make every contradiction work and every opposite complimentary and beautiful.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2022
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Thanks, Hannah.
I appreciate your kind words.
Comment from mrsmajor
The moon guards her dreams...I like that first line, made me think for a moment, this is a good entry for the contest. Good Luck in the contest.
Regards,
Victoria
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2022
The moon guards her dreams...I like that first line, made me think for a moment, this is a good entry for the contest. Good Luck in the contest.
Regards,
Victoria
Comment Written 18-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2022
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Thanks, Victoria.
It?s good to know what works in a poem.
Jane
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Jane a fantastic Friday to you, I hope this finds you well. I liked your 5-7-5 Poem contest entry, you executed it well. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2022
Hello Jane a fantastic Friday to you, I hope this finds you well. I liked your 5-7-5 Poem contest entry, you executed it well. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2022
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Thanks so much for your praise. I appreciate it.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
All syllables present and correct in this finely written piece. i think I just read another piece of yours and am sensing a sun/mon theme at play in your work. lol
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2022
Hi there,
All syllables present and correct in this finely written piece. i think I just read another piece of yours and am sensing a sun/mon theme at play in your work. lol
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 18-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2022
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Thanks so much. I am fascinated by nature and the universe. So glad you like this piece.
Jane
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
Short and beautiful. I enjoyed reading your heartfelt poem. You have a great talent. I want to wish you well. I hope, you win the contest. You tell a story without a lot of words.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2022
Short and beautiful. I enjoyed reading your heartfelt poem. You have a great talent. I want to wish you well. I hope, you win the contest. You tell a story without a lot of words.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much for your generous praise.
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You are welcome.