In God's Eyes
Winning the race13 total reviews
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Hopefully, this is not how it really was but only a response to te challenge of sixty words. Do you believe there are still dads like this? Maybe, but they are so far fewer due to circumstances like never marrying to begin with and then the big D @ 50%
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2022
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Hopefully, this is not how it really was but only a response to te challenge of sixty words. Do you believe there are still dads like this? Maybe, but they are so far fewer due to circumstances like never marrying to begin with and then the big D @ 50%
Comment Written 16-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2022
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I had a very strict German father who not only was a chauvenist but he thought his way was the only way. Since his passing, I've tried to come to terms with the man and why he was the way he was. Studying my ancestry, I learned a lot and have mellowed a little. Thank you for reading my post. Smiles, Carol
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ur welkum
Comment from Shirley McLain
What a sad, but beautiful 60 word dash. You did an excellent piece of work that I enjoyed reading. I didn't find any errors. I hope you have a wonderfully blessed day. Shirley
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2022
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What a sad, but beautiful 60 word dash. You did an excellent piece of work that I enjoyed reading. I didn't find any errors. I hope you have a wonderfully blessed day. Shirley
Comment Written 16-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2022
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It was sad and it happens too many times in the life time of some children. Thanks for reading and reviewing. I appreciate it very much,
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Bill Schott
This sixty-word flash fiction story, In God's Eyes, has the required word count and gives us a good reason to swim FIRST. The good news is Devon's happy save.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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This sixty-word flash fiction story, In God's Eyes, has the required word count and gives us a good reason to swim FIRST. The good news is Devon's happy save.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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Thank you for understanding the "welcomed grace" for Devon compared to his father's irresponsible drive. Appreciate the review.
Have a great day!
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
God was definitely watching out for this athlete. Competition is good for some and not for others. Was he racing or just practicing? The dad sounds a little too pushy, so God stepped in....
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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God was definitely watching out for this athlete. Competition is good for some and not for others. Was he racing or just practicing? The dad sounds a little too pushy, so God stepped in....
Comment Written 15-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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I had one of those demanding father's. Luckily, I was a girl and he didn't think "girls" or "Women" could accomplish much. Thanks for the review.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
This is bad way to become a winner. It seems some parents can be a bit too demanding. I'm sure God smiles welcoming his children home but he might not smile on the suffering father who learns when his kid said "Please Dad, I can't" he meant it. Nicely written flash.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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This is bad way to become a winner. It seems some parents can be a bit too demanding. I'm sure God smiles welcoming his children home but he might not smile on the suffering father who learns when his kid said "Please Dad, I can't" he meant it. Nicely written flash.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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I had a dad like that and I never ever uttered the word 'can't'. Sometimes, I wish things could have been different, but they are what they are. There is no going back!
Hugs, Carol
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello mystery writer a merry Monday to you, I hope this finds you well. I liked your 60 word dash entry, you executed it well, sad story though. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Hello mystery writer a merry Monday to you, I hope this finds you well. I liked your 60 word dash entry, you executed it well, sad story though. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much for the review and your kind words. It is sad that sixty words could relate the pain of a lifetime of a father-son relationship and how it tormented one's soul. At least, he could rejoice in the love of the Lord.
Have a great day!
Comment from Wendy G
It is a sad story, and poignant, but it makes an excellent point, in that what is counted as a winner in God's eyes may be quite different from what humans see as winners. Creative, original entry. Sending best wishes.
Wendy
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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It is a sad story, and poignant, but it makes an excellent point, in that what is counted as a winner in God's eyes may be quite different from what humans see as winners. Creative, original entry. Sending best wishes.
Wendy
Comment Written 13-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I appreciate it very much! Have a great day!
Comment from LisaMay
How awful that Devon's father was such a demanding task master... driving him to die of exhaustion. Our Father in Heaven will look after him better now. Being a winner doesn't necessarily mean an earthly race.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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How awful that Devon's father was such a demanding task master... driving him to die of exhaustion. Our Father in Heaven will look after him better now. Being a winner doesn't necessarily mean an earthly race.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I appreciate it very much! Have a great day!
Comment from lyenochka
That's the worst possible thing to backfire when a parent is too pushy for achievement. I wasn't expecting that kind of ending but I guess it can happen. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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That's the worst possible thing to backfire when a parent is too pushy for achievement. I wasn't expecting that kind of ending but I guess it can happen. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 13-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I appreciate it very much! Have a great day!
Comment from rspoet
This is an excellent short story for the contest,
but more than a little sad. Abuse is the best description
of the father' behavior.
A winner in God's eyes.
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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This is an excellent short story for the contest,
but more than a little sad. Abuse is the best description
of the father' behavior.
A winner in God's eyes.
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
Comment Written 13-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I appreciate it very much! Have a great day!
