Football - A Novel
Viewing comments for Chapter 74 "Football Chapter 45"A mother faces life's struggles.
28 total reviews
Comment from Sanku
Now MIlton Ivory has become a good samaritan. That is good and it means one more friend .
The chapter moves forward smoothly.Now more trouble may come via the in-laws.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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Now MIlton Ivory has become a good samaritan. That is good and it means one more friend .
The chapter moves forward smoothly.Now more trouble may come via the in-laws.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Heather Burroughs
Barbara, I enjoyed this chapter as much as the others. Your dialogue always seems effortless.
And your notes make everything come together. Thank you for sharing. Many blessings to you.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2022
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Barbara, I enjoyed this chapter as much as the others. Your dialogue always seems effortless.
And your notes make everything come together. Thank you for sharing. Many blessings to you.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the kind reivew.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
The dialog kept me interested but lost at times because I didn't know the cast of characters. Not your fault. I haven't read any other chapters. Good luck and congrats for your acheivements.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2022
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The dialog kept me interested but lost at times because I didn't know the cast of characters. Not your fault. I haven't read any other chapters. Good luck and congrats for your acheivements.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. I have a character list at the bottom.
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Yes, I saw it and it helped greatly afterwards.
Comment from amahra
Good written action in this chapter, Barbara. Just one thing below:
Katherine released the breath[e] she'd been holding. [delete 'e'. It's breath not breathe]
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2022
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Good written action in this chapter, Barbara. Just one thing below:
Katherine released the breath[e] she'd been holding. [delete 'e'. It's breath not breathe]
Comment Written 08-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2022
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I just added that e. Now I will get rid of it.
Comment from eliz100
This is another great chapter. It moves the story along nicely. I was a little confused with the part about Milton Ivory. I did not see him on your list of characters. It sounded like she and her in-laws have cancer.mIs that what you meant to portray?
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2022
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This is another great chapter. It moves the story along nicely. I was a little confused with the part about Milton Ivory. I did not see him on your list of characters. It sounded like she and her in-laws have cancer.mIs that what you meant to portray?
Comment Written 08-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2022
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I'm sure he is in my character list, but I will check. Thank you for the kind review.
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Your welcome.
Comment from tfawcus
As always, good interaction between the characters and snappy, believable dialogue. You use the dialogue well to progress the plot, and it's always in character. Good writing.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2022
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As always, good interaction between the characters and snappy, believable dialogue. You use the dialogue well to progress the plot, and it's always in character. Good writing.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Gabe does have a little of a temper. I wonder what the audience thought when he threw his hat on the ground. I hope his temper is only on the field and not in the relationship.
Have a nice visit with your mom. She'll love to have you come.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Gabe does have a little of a temper. I wonder what the audience thought when he threw his hat on the ground. I hope his temper is only on the field and not in the relationship.
Have a nice visit with your mom. She'll love to have you come.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Yes, Gabe likes to win. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lancellot
Your writing is always well polished and edited. Your characters stay true to their designated roles. If you are happy with whatever your plot is, then keep going on that path. I hope it all works out well for you and your novel in the remaining six parts.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Your writing is always well polished and edited. Your characters stay true to their designated roles. If you are happy with whatever your plot is, then keep going on that path. I hope it all works out well for you and your novel in the remaining six parts.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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I have confidence that this book will do well. I write for a difference audience than you do. My audience likes my work. There are still plenty of us old fashioned people out there. Thank you.
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I wish you all the success in the world. You have writing talent, no doubt about that.
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Thank you. I refuse to compromise my standards.
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It's not about the sexual standards. It is about the plot, character development, and goal of the story (the message the author is trying to convey).
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Comment from BLACKTITANIUM86
I can see, that you are knee deep in it. For, chapter
45 is the bomb...and it looks like your headed to
the likes of Stardom!!! For, your writing skills are
superb. Keep Writing. And Stay Connected
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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I can see, that you are knee deep in it. For, chapter
45 is the bomb...and it looks like your headed to
the likes of Stardom!!! For, your writing skills are
superb. Keep Writing. And Stay Connected
Comment Written 07-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-This is an excellent chapter, barbara.
-I appreciated your notes and hope you
have a good visit with your mother.
-I enjoyed this chapter with everything that
was taking place and how it flowed from
one event to the next.
-It is nice to see the relationship of Katherine and Gabe flowering.
-I like how everyone in Katherine's circle is looking out for her.
-Her boys are very mature and understanding.
-The one wrinkle is her former in-laws. There isn't a good
enough word to describe them; their actions do it for them.
-At least Melton Ivory saw them for what they were.
-The discussion about the UT job was very good, too!
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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-This is an excellent chapter, barbara.
-I appreciated your notes and hope you
have a good visit with your mother.
-I enjoyed this chapter with everything that
was taking place and how it flowed from
one event to the next.
-It is nice to see the relationship of Katherine and Gabe flowering.
-I like how everyone in Katherine's circle is looking out for her.
-Her boys are very mature and understanding.
-The one wrinkle is her former in-laws. There isn't a good
enough word to describe them; their actions do it for them.
-At least Melton Ivory saw them for what they were.
-The discussion about the UT job was very good, too!
Comment Written 07-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You are very welcome.