A Playful Touch
a 5-7-5 poem31 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Melissa,
This 5-7-5 is a good mixture of personificiation and metaphor to describe the sound of the river starting to move in the Spring melt.
Congratulations on placing second in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2022
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Melissa,
This 5-7-5 is a good mixture of personificiation and metaphor to describe the sound of the river starting to move in the Spring melt.
Congratulations on placing second in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 24-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2022
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Hi Joan. Thank you so much. I hope you are doing well and staying healthy too. Hugs!!
Melissa
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You are most kindly welcome, Melissa.
Joan
Comment from starkat
Hi - Congrats on your second place finish. Really enjoyed the beautiful artwork and connected imagery in your first two lines - long fingers tickle melting mountain streams. When I read this, I thought of a satori ... gurgles of giggles. Of course, 'gurgles of laughter' works fine. Wonder what you think about the alliterative 'gurgles of giggles'?
Cheers ... ;-)
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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Hi - Congrats on your second place finish. Really enjoyed the beautiful artwork and connected imagery in your first two lines - long fingers tickle melting mountain streams. When I read this, I thought of a satori ... gurgles of giggles. Of course, 'gurgles of laughter' works fine. Wonder what you think about the alliterative 'gurgles of giggles'?
Cheers ... ;-)
Comment Written 22-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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Hello and thanks so much for your thoughts on the verse. I love the "gurgles of giggles" alliteration. I really hope you incorporate it into one of your pieces. It makes a person want to laugh out loud. :) Thanks again.
Melissa
Comment from Debbie Pope
What delightful imagery. I love the thought of the sun having fingers that can tickle. And, those mountain springs, that do gurgle indeed, laughing in response.
This is very well done. I am just out of six star ratings. It's definitely worth a six.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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What delightful imagery. I love the thought of the sun having fingers that can tickle. And, those mountain springs, that do gurgle indeed, laughing in response.
This is very well done. I am just out of six star ratings. It's definitely worth a six.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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Thank you, dear friend, for your lovely review on this playful, short one. :). It is fun to try to think outside the box... gurgling streams came to mind. I really appreciate your views on it. Hugs, Debbie!
Melissa
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Congratulations on your second place win (it should have been first). I knew that it was particularly good.
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Thank you Debbie. You always are such an encouragement to me :). I love your pieces too!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I heard the sounds here and felt the chill as the sunlight battles with the season with its long fingers and manages to melt the snow into trickling water, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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I heard the sounds here and felt the chill as the sunlight battles with the season with its long fingers and manages to melt the snow into trickling water, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 19-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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Thank you, dear friend, for your lovely review on this playful, short one. :). It is fun to try to think outside the box... gurgling streams came to mind. I really appreciate your views on it. Hugs, Dolly!
Melissa
Comment from poetwatch
Some people may differ with the, "gurgles of laughter" you wrote, Melissa. After a sunny day where temperatures are cold, a little run-off becomes a flood, and the house becomes a boat. :) This is a good entry for the 5-7-5 poetry Contest. I hope you and yours and doing great and staying warm.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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Some people may differ with the, "gurgles of laughter" you wrote, Melissa. After a sunny day where temperatures are cold, a little run-off becomes a flood, and the house becomes a boat. :) This is a good entry for the 5-7-5 poetry Contest. I hope you and yours and doing great and staying warm.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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Thank you, dear friend, for your lovely review on this playful, short one. :). It is fun to try to think outside the box... gurgling streams came to mind. I really appreciate your views on it. Hugs, Jose!
Melissa
Comment from Irish Rain
Oh wow,
what an awesome 5-7-5!
I love the beautiful picture
also.
The play on words is so very
imaginative!
This is a wonderful entry!
Good luck,
blessings...
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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Oh wow,
what an awesome 5-7-5!
I love the beautiful picture
also.
The play on words is so very
imaginative!
This is a wonderful entry!
Good luck,
blessings...
Comment Written 18-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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Thank you, dear friend, for your lovely review on this playful, short one. :). It is fun to try to think outside the box... gurgling streams came to mind. I really appreciate your views on it. Hugs, Judy!
Melissa
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Have a great week!!
Comment from judiverse
Excellent inagery. I like the fingers of sunlight and the stream with its gurgles of laughter. The picture you used was well chosen. The effect of the sunlight does look like fingers. Best of luck in the contest. judi
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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Excellent inagery. I like the fingers of sunlight and the stream with its gurgles of laughter. The picture you used was well chosen. The effect of the sunlight does look like fingers. Best of luck in the contest. judi
Comment Written 18-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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Thank you, dear friend, for your lovely review on this playful, short one. :). It is fun to try to think outside the box... gurgling streams came to mind. I really appreciate your views on it. Hugs, Judi!
Melissa
Comment from l.raven
Hi Melissa, your poem had me smiling my sweet friend...
what a wonder thought of sunlight's long fingers...tickling
water in the streams...only to hear them laugh...
I love your poem sweet girl...and love your stunning picture...very nicely written you...good luck in the contest...love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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Hi Melissa, your poem had me smiling my sweet friend...
what a wonder thought of sunlight's long fingers...tickling
water in the streams...only to hear them laugh...
I love your poem sweet girl...and love your stunning picture...very nicely written you...good luck in the contest...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 18-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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Thank you, dear friend, for your lovely review on this playful, short one. :). It is fun to try to think outside the box... gurgling streams came to mind. I really appreciate your views on it. Hugs, Linda!
Melissa
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your so very welcome sweet girl...love xxoo
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a nicely written 5-7-5 poem. It has a Beautiful overall presentation. Very Breathtaking photo to compliment your words as well. Very nicely done.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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This is a nicely written 5-7-5 poem. It has a Beautiful overall presentation. Very Breathtaking photo to compliment your words as well. Very nicely done.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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Thank you, dear friend, for your lovely review on this playful, short one. :). It is fun to try to think outside the box... gurgling streams came to mind. I really appreciate your views on it. Hugs, Joanne!
Melissa
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Your welcome my friend 🙂
Comment from June Sargent
I love this lghthearted one! It tickles my fancy! The imagery of fingers tickling the streams until they gurgle is wonderful. Made me smile. Keep them coming. You are on a roll. My muse has fallen asleep the past few days...zzzz
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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I love this lghthearted one! It tickles my fancy! The imagery of fingers tickling the streams until they gurgle is wonderful. Made me smile. Keep them coming. You are on a roll. My muse has fallen asleep the past few days...zzzz
Comment Written 17-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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Thank you, dear friend, for your lovely review on this playful, short one. :). It is fun to try to think outside the box... gurgling streams came to mind. I really appreciate your views on it. Hugs, June!!!!
Melissa