At the Bird Feeder
5-7-5 poem (contest entry)16 total reviews
Comment from Susie Fisher
I love this! I'm a bird lover and blue birds especially bring such magic--I just saw one this morning. I especially like the play on words "seedy joint."
Well done!
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2022
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I love this! I'm a bird lover and blue birds especially bring such magic--I just saw one this morning. I especially like the play on words "seedy joint."
Well done!
Comment Written 27-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2022
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Hello Susie :)
Thank you so much for your lovely feedback. I appreciate it! Best wishes, Debra
Comment from dragonpoet
I like the pun in the first line as a literal description of the feeder and a definition of a dive restaurant. Birds are vocal artistes. The seeds give them energy to sing.
Congrats on the honorable mention in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
dp
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2022
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I like the pun in the first line as a literal description of the feeder and a definition of a dive restaurant. Birds are vocal artistes. The seeds give them energy to sing.
Congrats on the honorable mention in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
dp
Comment Written 27-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2022
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Hello dp :)
Thank you so much for your lovely feedback and congratulatory message. I appreciate both! Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment from mermaids
I enjoyed reading your poem. I have a bird feeder and love watching the variety of birds that come to dine. Excellent haiku that creates a scene of nature.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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I enjoyed reading your poem. I have a bird feeder and love watching the variety of birds that come to dine. Excellent haiku that creates a scene of nature.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much for your lovely feedback. Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment from LisaMay
hahaha.... I love the 'seedy joint'. Well done on your mention in the site contest with this witty and charming presentation. What a great photo, too.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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hahaha.... I love the 'seedy joint'. Well done on your mention in the site contest with this witty and charming presentation. What a great photo, too.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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Thank you, LisaMay :) It was a nice surprise to get a mention!
Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from PoemsOfDD
What a great photo to go along with this lighthearted entry.
All syllables are correct for this 5-7-5.
I particularly enjoyed the play on words in the first line with
seedy joint - very clever!
Well done and best of luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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What a great photo to go along with this lighthearted entry.
All syllables are correct for this 5-7-5.
I particularly enjoyed the play on words in the first line with
seedy joint - very clever!
Well done and best of luck in the competition.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much, DD, for your kind feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both :)
Kind regards, Debra
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Great image and nice presentation, Debra.
-It looks like they have a lot to say.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-I like the images you chose like "seedy joint."
-You paint a good word picture of the scene
and have a good concluding line.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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-Great image and nice presentation, Debra.
-It looks like they have a lot to say.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-I like the images you chose like "seedy joint."
-You paint a good word picture of the scene
and have a good concluding line.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much, Pam, for your kind feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both :)
Kind regards, Debra
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You are very welcome, Debra.
Comment from Gloria ....
My word, what a terrific and beautiful entry into this contest. You have captured the dining performance of birds at the feeder with great observation skills. They are most entertaining to watch, and listen to.
Wishing you great luck with the Committee, Debra. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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My word, what a terrific and beautiful entry into this contest. You have captured the dining performance of birds at the feeder with great observation skills. They are most entertaining to watch, and listen to.
Wishing you great luck with the Committee, Debra. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 17-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much, Gloria, for your kind feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both :)
Kind regards, Debra
Comment from Shirley McLain
You wrote an excellent 5-7-4 poem that I enjoyed reading. I think the picture is great and sets the poem off perfectly. I didn't see one error. Have a great night. Shirley
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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You wrote an excellent 5-7-4 poem that I enjoyed reading. I think the picture is great and sets the poem off perfectly. I didn't see one error. Have a great night. Shirley
Comment Written 16-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much, Shirley, for your kind feedback and generous star rating. I appreciate both :)
Best wishes, Debr
Comment from lyenochka
Loved your word play and alliteration! And that it is a "seedy joint" sounds perfect for birdies especially artsy ones doing a duet! Cute picture, too! Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
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Loved your word play and alliteration! And that it is a "seedy joint" sounds perfect for birdies especially artsy ones doing a duet! Cute picture, too! Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 16-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
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Hi Helen :)
Thank you so much for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both!
Best wishes, Debra x
Comment from Sally Law
Your hilarious sense of humor comes through once again in this short verse 5/7/5 haiku. I love the daily concerts. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for upcoming contest,
Sal XOs...
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
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Your hilarious sense of humor comes through once again in this short verse 5/7/5 haiku. I love the daily concerts. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for upcoming contest,
Sal XOs...
Comment Written 16-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
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Hi Sal :)
Thank you so much for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both!
Best wishes, Debra x