Melancholy's Edge
A sonnet27 total reviews
Comment from John Ciarmello
Hello SUGARAY77,
I loved this! It did my heart good to see you didn't fall into the abyss. I felt some pain in this piece, or maybe it was a comforting darkness as if warm bed blankets were pulled over your head. It's beautiful!
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2022
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Hello SUGARAY77,
I loved this! It did my heart good to see you didn't fall into the abyss. I felt some pain in this piece, or maybe it was a comforting darkness as if warm bed blankets were pulled over your head. It's beautiful!
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2022
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Hello John. Thank you for your insightful review. I really appreciate your comments and perceptions. Thanks for your review.
Melissa
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Melissa,
This is a good place to renew your sanity... by concentrating on all the blessings of this life, most of which we overlook day after day. That's where we'll find some peace in the midst of a storm. I'm glad this isn't where you are right now, "not autobiographical".
Good abab/cdcd/efef/gg rhymes. You bring us to the edge with you, and then save us from "a cavernous abyss".
The only thing I wondered about, these lines...
"Acknowledging the good things I receive
will warm my heart by basking in the sun." ... (I wondered if it might be better this way,
Acknowledging the good things I receive
will warm my heart by basking in the Son.) ...just wondering~
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2022
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Hi Melissa,
This is a good place to renew your sanity... by concentrating on all the blessings of this life, most of which we overlook day after day. That's where we'll find some peace in the midst of a storm. I'm glad this isn't where you are right now, "not autobiographical".
Good abab/cdcd/efef/gg rhymes. You bring us to the edge with you, and then save us from "a cavernous abyss".
The only thing I wondered about, these lines...
"Acknowledging the good things I receive
will warm my heart by basking in the sun." ... (I wondered if it might be better this way,
Acknowledging the good things I receive
will warm my heart by basking in the Son.) ...just wondering~
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2022
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Thank you KB. I really appreciate your view on this sonnet. It was a little dark for my normal way of writing, but it seemed to write itself. Thanks for the suggestions, my friend. Hugs!!
Melissa
Comment from tempeste
This pandemic has put a toll on people 's health .. many fond it hard to face weeks of lockdowns and now restrictions ..
Easy to fall victim of depression, I'm lucky I'm by nature gloomy , lockdowns didn't bother me nor restrictions .. what stresses me ? :
I hate germs .. so you can image the effect a virus has on my life.
I'm continuously washing my hands and disinfecting items , door handle etc despite I live on my own.
I go out once a week only to do shopping and pay bills. I feel I'm living in a bubble, my life is on hold .. I'm in limbo and at times THAT weighs on my spirits.
But then I switch on the tv and I see people struggling /dying with covid because they don't have even clean water or a cyclone or an earthquake has destroyed their house..
When I see all there horrible things, I give my self a kick in the butt and say : you re pathetic, stop moaning.
You used very descriptive words ..
WITH CLENCHING HANDS .. is powerful
it depicts how desperate the person is, the struggle he / she faces to stay attached on the edge of a rocky precipice ( abyss).
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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This pandemic has put a toll on people 's health .. many fond it hard to face weeks of lockdowns and now restrictions ..
Easy to fall victim of depression, I'm lucky I'm by nature gloomy , lockdowns didn't bother me nor restrictions .. what stresses me ? :
I hate germs .. so you can image the effect a virus has on my life.
I'm continuously washing my hands and disinfecting items , door handle etc despite I live on my own.
I go out once a week only to do shopping and pay bills. I feel I'm living in a bubble, my life is on hold .. I'm in limbo and at times THAT weighs on my spirits.
But then I switch on the tv and I see people struggling /dying with covid because they don't have even clean water or a cyclone or an earthquake has destroyed their house..
When I see all there horrible things, I give my self a kick in the butt and say : you re pathetic, stop moaning.
You used very descriptive words ..
WITH CLENCHING HANDS .. is powerful
it depicts how desperate the person is, the struggle he / she faces to stay attached on the edge of a rocky precipice ( abyss).
Comment Written 22-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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Hello Franca. Thank you. I did not know that you were having to isolate yourself to such a degree. I know that must be weighing you down. I so hope this virus goes away and we can all get back to normal!!! I really appreciate your thoughts on this one, sweet friend.
Melissa
Comment from Irish Rain
Love your notes...I get that a lot, and my poetry is rarely about me.
I love what you've done with one lovely phrase, 'on the edge
of melancholy.'
Such a truly beautiful sonnet, and the ending is awesome.
Appreciation always brings joy.
Blessings...
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Love your notes...I get that a lot, and my poetry is rarely about me.
I love what you've done with one lovely phrase, 'on the edge
of melancholy.'
Such a truly beautiful sonnet, and the ending is awesome.
Appreciation always brings joy.
Blessings...
Comment Written 12-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Thank you Judy. So glad you enjoyed this sonnet. Sometimes it seems I have to write about sad things too. I appreciate your thoughts on it!
Melissa
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I think the 'haunted melancholy' poems suit poetry best!
Comment from Gloria ....
I love the atmosphere of your sonnet here, Melissa. The edge of emotional darkness overcome with by hope and counting one's blessings.
You write a fine, fine sonnet, and this is no exception.
Thank you for sharing. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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I love the atmosphere of your sonnet here, Melissa. The edge of emotional darkness overcome with by hope and counting one's blessings.
You write a fine, fine sonnet, and this is no exception.
Thank you for sharing. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 12-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much Gloria. So glad you enjoyed this sonnet. Sometimes it seems I have to write about sad things too. I appreciate your thoughts on it!
I always value your take on my writing!!!
Melissa
Comment from Gee
Nicely done Mrs. Melissa.
I'm glad you clarified the poem a little in the notes.
Why didn't you enter this in the sonnet contest?
Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Nicely done Mrs. Melissa.
I'm glad you clarified the poem a little in the notes.
Why didn't you enter this in the sonnet contest?
Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 11-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Thank you very much Eugene!! So appreciate the comments!
Melissa
Comment from robyn corum
Mel,
I like your sonnet quite a lot. As one who DOES suffer from depression and the like, I thought the opening description was really apt. Very clever. I then really appreciated the turn and change to a more positive outlook. Thank you!
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Mel,
I like your sonnet quite a lot. As one who DOES suffer from depression and the like, I thought the opening description was really apt. Very clever. I then really appreciated the turn and change to a more positive outlook. Thank you!
Comment Written 11-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Thank you Robyn... So glad you enjoyed this sonnet. Sometimes it seems I have to write about sad things too. I appreciate your thoughts on it!
Melissa
Comment from Pantygynt
I was thankful for the note. This does look as though you are skirting around the edges of depression. After all. melancholy is a feature of the depressive state. I am feeling a bit flat at the moment. dental extraction always leaves me like that.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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I was thankful for the note. This does look as though you are skirting around the edges of depression. After all. melancholy is a feature of the depressive state. I am feeling a bit flat at the moment. dental extraction always leaves me like that.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Thank you Jim. So glad you enjoyed this sonnet. Sometimes it seems I have to write about sad things too. I appreciate your thoughts on it!
Melissa
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I love the idea of a Melancholy's Edge. It's very poetic. Sometimes helps if you just write: non-fiction in your author notes.
The rhymes do not seem forced. Your poem flows well. It draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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I love the idea of a Melancholy's Edge. It's very poetic. Sometimes helps if you just write: non-fiction in your author notes.
The rhymes do not seem forced. Your poem flows well. It draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Thank you Gypsy. So glad you enjoyed this sonnet. Sometimes it seems I have to write about sad things too. I appreciate your thoughts on it!
Melissa
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Well done, Melissa. This is a lovely sonnet and indeed true. Having just survived three horrible Holiday's I realize we just did that and we thank God for his blessings and seeing us through it all. Well done my sweet friend, well done. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2022
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Well done, Melissa. This is a lovely sonnet and indeed true. Having just survived three horrible Holiday's I realize we just did that and we thank God for his blessings and seeing us through it all. Well done my sweet friend, well done. Nancy:)
Comment Written 10-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2022
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Thank you so very much, Nancy. Wintertime can place people in melancholia and tempt everyone to get down in the dumps... we must count our blessings and look at the bright side of things. Thanks again!
Melissa
