I'll Pass
Contest entry26 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your contest entry, Yvonne. Your words are well thought out with good smooth flow. I like the cross rhyme sweets/treats and out/doubt. The internal rhyme of why/I and good use of alliteration work well, too. The image is a great pairing, too. I like the word 'folderol.' Who knew it. However, it sums up resolution perfectly.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2021
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You did a great job with your contest entry, Yvonne. Your words are well thought out with good smooth flow. I like the cross rhyme sweets/treats and out/doubt. The internal rhyme of why/I and good use of alliteration work well, too. The image is a great pairing, too. I like the word 'folderol.' Who knew it. However, it sums up resolution perfectly.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 29-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2021
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Thank you. I appreciate your support.
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello damommy, Yvonne, you're a girl after my own heart. Resolutions begone! Besides, with this Covid thing that keeps coming round and round, what else is there to do, but enjoy a nice meal and some treats when the family visits. Your poem reads and flows well, and I especially liked:
What should I do? Go on a diet, no sweets,
or treats for me. Potato chips are out,
no doubt, no pies or cakes of any kind.
(Y, when I say that I like these lines, I do, but what I really like are the sweets and treats, potato chips, pie and cakes of any kind...I'll be right over. Put the coffee/tea on.)
Well-chosen photo. Silky rhyming. A pleasure to read. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2021
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Hello damommy, Yvonne, you're a girl after my own heart. Resolutions begone! Besides, with this Covid thing that keeps coming round and round, what else is there to do, but enjoy a nice meal and some treats when the family visits. Your poem reads and flows well, and I especially liked:
What should I do? Go on a diet, no sweets,
or treats for me. Potato chips are out,
no doubt, no pies or cakes of any kind.
(Y, when I say that I like these lines, I do, but what I really like are the sweets and treats, potato chips, pie and cakes of any kind...I'll be right over. Put the coffee/tea on.)
Well-chosen photo. Silky rhyming. A pleasure to read. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 29-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2021
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Coffee's on. Come anytime. We'll have a feast.
Comment from tfawcus
What a fine rhyming word folderol is! You've nailed it! I'm with you on this particular subject. All my resolves dissolve before the end of the first week. I like the whimsical humour of this little poem.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2021
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What a fine rhyming word folderol is! You've nailed it! I'm with you on this particular subject. All my resolves dissolve before the end of the first week. I like the whimsical humour of this little poem.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2021
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Thank you. I'm wondering if anyone keeps their resolutions all year. I'm glad I'm not the only one who doesn't make one. I gave up years ago.
Comment from lyenochka
I agree! Good for you ! What's the point as it only sets us up for disappointment because no one has control over the future and to insist on resolutions means we claim we can still do things regardless of unforeseen future events. Great thoughts in rhyme. Hope you do well in the contest!
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2021
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I agree! Good for you ! What's the point as it only sets us up for disappointment because no one has control over the future and to insist on resolutions means we claim we can still do things regardless of unforeseen future events. Great thoughts in rhyme. Hope you do well in the contest!
Comment Written 29-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2021
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Thank you. I'm finding out that no one keeps resolutions if they even make them. Except Jim. See his review.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
I'm with you all the way on this! I wrote a prose piece on the theme of forgoing resolutions. Heads up--not sure if this matters for the contest, but you classified this as prose fiction. Clever verse in fine form.
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reply by the author on 30-Dec-2021
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I'm with you all the way on this! I wrote a prose piece on the theme of forgoing resolutions. Heads up--not sure if this matters for the contest, but you classified this as prose fiction. Clever verse in fine form.
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Comment Written 29-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2021
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I know. I simply went to the contest and submitted. We'll see what happens. Thanks. I'm beginning to think no one makes resolutions or keeps them if they do.
Comment from Malerie
Nicely written and flows well. You connected each stanza and told a story but my favorite is the last stanza, "So many tasks to set and then not keep.
I'll save myself the trouble, skip them all.
No guilt at all I feel, I must confess,
so, I'll pass up this new year folderol." Well done and enjoyable to read.
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reply by the author on 30-Dec-2021
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Nicely written and flows well. You connected each stanza and told a story but my favorite is the last stanza, "So many tasks to set and then not keep.
I'll save myself the trouble, skip them all.
No guilt at all I feel, I must confess,
so, I'll pass up this new year folderol." Well done and enjoyable to read.
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Comment Written 29-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2021
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Thank you. I'm so glad you liked it.
