Revenge
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
OMG! That was so close! I do hope this plan comes together, or the other girls will be in big trouble. Marian was just in time with her fainting act in order to save Sam. I'll be going to bed soon with high blood-pressure and a racing heart! Off to the next part. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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OMG! That was so close! I do hope this plan comes together, or the other girls will be in big trouble. Marian was just in time with her fainting act in order to save Sam. I'll be going to bed soon with high blood-pressure and a racing heart! Off to the next part. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 12-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Thank you so much. Forgive the cut and paste but I am so far behind with showing my appreciation to everyone. Please know it is sincere. This story went in a darker direction than I originally planned (maybe my life got caught up in it) but as we draw closer to the end, I am thrilled that you have continued to follow and enjoy it.
I hope you have the best of holidays. Hugs, Carol
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is good, very well-written and full of action. Almost too much action as far a Sam is concerned. James better get taken down soon or Sam is in trouble. Marian did the right thing, supposedly fainting, to save Sam. Have read the next section and it blends seamlessly with this one. In first paragraph Sam's car pulls into driveway through Marian's window.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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This is good, very well-written and full of action. Almost too much action as far a Sam is concerned. James better get taken down soon or Sam is in trouble. Marian did the right thing, supposedly fainting, to save Sam. Have read the next section and it blends seamlessly with this one. In first paragraph Sam's car pulls into driveway through Marian's window.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Thank you for taking the time to read and support my writing. I appreciate it very much. Hugs, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
Hum, getting a little riskier in this chapter than most, for lack of a better way to say it. An old bird like me who has about seen and heard it all doesn't usually pay much attention, but coming from you, it woke me up. LOL. Thanks for sharing. Hope you have a wonderful weekend!
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2021
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Hum, getting a little riskier in this chapter than most, for lack of a better way to say it. An old bird like me who has about seen and heard it all doesn't usually pay much attention, but coming from you, it woke me up. LOL. Thanks for sharing. Hope you have a wonderful weekend!
Comment Written 10-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2021
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Wow...what a compliment, my friend. I discovered a smile on my lips, spreading from ear to ear. Thank you for brightening my morning and for the awesome review. I surprise myself at times when I read what I've shared; usually, I'm not that open.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from lyenochka
Well, you created extra tension with the uneasy entanglement with James and Sam noticing the unlocked door. It's good that Scarlett/Marian caused a big enough scene to put an end to that. I sure hope that Sam is right and will be able to put an end to Moretti's plans and get Jaz rescued.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Well, you created extra tension with the uneasy entanglement with James and Sam noticing the unlocked door. It's good that Scarlett/Marian caused a big enough scene to put an end to that. I sure hope that Sam is right and will be able to put an end to Moretti's plans and get Jaz rescued.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Though it sounds like I am complaining because I can't catch up.... well, I guess I am, but it doesn't change how much I appreciate your support and continued encouragement. Thank you as always.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Wendy G
That was too close for comfort. Sam needs to be extremely careful now she's playing with a man who has no scruples whatsoever. Have to keep telling myself that this is just a story! Very vividly written, and with great skill.
Wendy
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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That was too close for comfort. Sam needs to be extremely careful now she's playing with a man who has no scruples whatsoever. Have to keep telling myself that this is just a story! Very vividly written, and with great skill.
Wendy
Comment Written 09-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Though it sounds like I am complaining because I can't catch up.... well, I guess I am, but it doesn't change how much I appreciate your support and continued encouragement. Thank you as always.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
Well I trust Scarlett's colapse was to save Samantha. This game has me on edge and I keep forgetting I shouldn't worry becuase these characters are all in your capable hands, even the bad ones. Wouldn't it be terrible if you created a character so real,he came to life and started pulling the strings without consulting you. LOL
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Well I trust Scarlett's colapse was to save Samantha. This game has me on edge and I keep forgetting I shouldn't worry becuase these characters are all in your capable hands, even the bad ones. Wouldn't it be terrible if you created a character so real,he came to life and started pulling the strings without consulting you. LOL
Comment Written 09-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Though it sounds like I am complaining because I can't catch up.... well, I guess I am, but it doesn't change how much I appreciate your support and continued encouragement. Thank you as always.
Hugs, Carol
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I can't catch up either. I have a lot to do to get ready for Christmas and I can't catch up with reviewing my fans work so I can't find time to write.
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I have half my Christmas decorations sitting on the floor... and I think they are going back in storage this morning. I am suppose to have Christmas with my three great grandchildren today before they leave on vacation with their dad. Yeah right! I write to stay sane (weird, huh?) but then go crazy when I discover I have 190 reviews to answer.
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That is what you get for being so good at what you do. Everyone wants to read your work.
Betj
Comment from LJbutterfly
Whew! I'm exhausted from so many twists and turns and narrow escapes. You don't give your characters (or your readers) a break. I was sweating bullets when James thought he saw someone in the shed. Plus, naughty, naughty Carol, able to write erotica as creative and captivating as your mystery storytelling. Great chapter!
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Whew! I'm exhausted from so many twists and turns and narrow escapes. You don't give your characters (or your readers) a break. I was sweating bullets when James thought he saw someone in the shed. Plus, naughty, naughty Carol, able to write erotica as creative and captivating as your mystery storytelling. Great chapter!
Comment Written 09-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Me too! My head is spinning and I never know where I am headed in the story or my life. Thank you for always supporting me, Lorraine.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Judy Lawless
Carol, I wanted to just scroll down and read the rest of this! You have gotten the element of suspense down pat with this story. It's a good thing Marian knows what to do when Sam needs her. Extremely well done!
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Carol, I wanted to just scroll down and read the rest of this! You have gotten the element of suspense down pat with this story. It's a good thing Marian knows what to do when Sam needs her. Extremely well done!
Comment Written 09-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Though it sounds like I am complaining because I can't catch up.... well, I guess I am, but it doesn't change how much I appreciate your support and continued encouragement. Thank you as always.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Brilliant. Brutal rendering of James's rage. The suspense is excruciating!
Sensing James's motive was to dominate, not harm her ??? !!!
Sugg: flag for violence.
Sugg: He recognized Charles' ring[TONE], and with one hand, he pulled the phone from his pocket. (I was picturing the distinctive literal ring from prior chapters)
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Brilliant. Brutal rendering of James's rage. The suspense is excruciating!
Sensing James's motive was to dominate, not harm her ??? !!!
Sugg: flag for violence.
Sugg: He recognized Charles' ring[TONE], and with one hand, he pulled the phone from his pocket. (I was picturing the distinctive literal ring from prior chapters)
Comment Written 09-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Though it sounds like I am complaining because I can't catch up.... well, I guess I am, but it doesn't change how much I appreciate your support and continued encouragement. Thank you as always.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am really worried about what's going to happen at Francisco's. Samantha also lost the battle here. She needs to be more careful.
"James!" Sam squealed. "Someone might see--" His lips devoured hers, preventing any further protest. (In narrative Samantha should be spelled out.)
The sharp ring of his phone grated against his nerves. Releasing Sam's luscious body, he answered it. "Yeah! I'm busy, Charles. What's up?" (In narrative Samantha should be spelled out & and comma after 'answered' you can omit 'it')
He grinned. "lunch with you." (capital 'l' on Lunch)
"Wait!" He called after her. (lower case 'h' needed on 'he')
Samantha ran her wet tongue across her lips, and smiled as she drew out every spoken word. (comma after 'word')
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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I am really worried about what's going to happen at Francisco's. Samantha also lost the battle here. She needs to be more careful.
"James!" Sam squealed. "Someone might see--" His lips devoured hers, preventing any further protest. (In narrative Samantha should be spelled out.)
The sharp ring of his phone grated against his nerves. Releasing Sam's luscious body, he answered it. "Yeah! I'm busy, Charles. What's up?" (In narrative Samantha should be spelled out & and comma after 'answered' you can omit 'it')
He grinned. "lunch with you." (capital 'l' on Lunch)
"Wait!" He called after her. (lower case 'h' needed on 'he')
Samantha ran her wet tongue across her lips, and smiled as she drew out every spoken word. (comma after 'word')
Comment Written 09-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Though it sounds like I am complaining because I can't catch up.... well, I guess I am, but it doesn't change how much I appreciate your support and continued encouragement. Thank you as always.
Hugs, Carol