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Separate Pools

A commentary on the recent school shooting in Michigan.

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Comment from BLACKTITANIUM86
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Although this was a very important message about gun violence...I thought it could have been a lot more creative. Nevertheless, It was definitely on point. And I like that. But poetry is poetry. Something that has more meaning, whenever it touches the soul. Keep Writing.

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 Comment Written 17-Dec-2021


reply by the author on 17-Dec-2021
    Thank you. While I am not trying to justify my poem's brevity, I will say in my defense, I did not want to come off as preachy, as those with the right mindset, probably already know. Those opposed, will probably not be convinced by mere words.
Comment from Bill Schott
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This poem, Separate Pools, sums up the tragedy of December 1st' school shooting and the weird story behind this poster family for dysfunction. More to come I'm afraid.

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2021


reply by the author on 09-Dec-2021
    Sadly you are so right. We live in a copycat world. Whatever headline news event that happens, good or bad, will soon be repeated by someone who feels emboldened by the last person who did it. "I want to do it too."
Comment from karenina
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Another horrific tragedy. I see the parents, too, have been arrested and charged. So many warning signs and still he was allowed to remain in school! Four more children dead... This must stop!

Karenina

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2021


reply by the author on 09-Dec-2021
    As long as the NRA has money to spend on spineless politicians it will not happen, change will not come.
reply by karenina on 09-Dec-2021
    It's always "thoughts and prayers" for the victims and their families. How about some better regulations? I'm all in on being able to own guns...but what about keeping them out of the hands of children and the very disturbed?

    Karenina
Comment from Paul McFarland
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A sad commentary on the present state of affairs. I'm with you on the gun issue. I'm afraid that we are going to see incidents such as this one continue.

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2021


reply by the author on 07-Dec-2021
    You are so right. I woke up this morning to hear on the 6 am news that another senseless shooting had claimed some more victims, one was a six year old girl.
Comment from Goodadvicechan
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We need better gun control. Unfortunately there are too many shootings everyday.

Our country is becoming less safe and less safe daily. What a shame... As a senior I am afraid to go out. I used to go to watch evening movies and walked home. Now, no way. What has happened to America?

Thanks fro sharing your writing

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2021


reply by the author on 07-Dec-2021
    I believe that the bad has only gotten worse. We are rushing headlong into the days the bible has already described as the end times. I very much fear that they are not only here, I believe they are nearing the apex. Be afraid, be very much afraid.
Comment from lauralumummu
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I agree with you. An insightful and timely write. You really think about things and some people don't. You are a rare gem, Thanks for sharing this.
God bless you, Laura.

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2021


reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
    Thank you so much, your word are high praise that I totally love and appreciate.
Comment from amahra
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Your poem bears a lot of truth, but I would even take it a step farther. Parents need to exercise more responsibility for their kids. Also, did you see the mother's email to her murderous son? "No mommy's not mad. You need to learn how not to get caught." Or something to that effect. But I know my paraphrasing is close.

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2021


reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
    Yes I was aware of the email. I tried to touch on it by saying that the parents did not try to teach him to show love for anyone. Thank you for your fine comments.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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commentary on the recent school shooting in Michigan.
Separate Pools
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Excellent commentery poem about the recent school shooting in Michigan. The parents are in custody and I hope they go to jail for what they did. They are responsible. They knew their son was unstable.

I just wrote a poem about it.

Well done

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2021


reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
    Thank you for your review comments.
Comment from MissMerri
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I agree Nomi... guns should be locked away and unavailable to people not adult enough to act responsibly. Thank you for this thought provoking poem written in mono rhymes with only two rhymes in the entire poem. Well done.

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2021


reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
    Thank you, your comments are appreciated.
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
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Chilling. America would mobilize its might to protect it from outer forces, diseases and keep its citizens safe. But not the gun violence which has spread to the school. Very sad. A very telling poem indeed!.

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2021


reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
    Thank you. I totally agree with your statements.