Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi Carol, This is cooming together very nicely, but I'm still wondering who James is really after. I've fallen seriously behind and I will now make a huge effort to follow up. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021

I'll help out because I am about to post a significant chapter, and you need to know what's going on. Vito (an ex-con) pretends to be the husband (James) of Marion Carrington, who they believe to be demented. Instead, she is James's sister. Vito/James wants revenge against Allie (working with the FBI and girlfriend of Garth). He has been slowly setting her up.

Here's the tricky part--- Samantha and Marian are working for the FBI on a case involving James. They were unaware that Garth (FBI) and Hank are working on the case involving Allie's missing sister, Jaz.

They are about to learn that the two cases are entwined together.

I hope that makes things clearer for you. It's easy to lose track of the story if you haven't followed it closely because there are so many moving parts.

Thanks for trying to follow it. Hugs, Carol

reply by Ulla on 21-Nov-2021

Thanks a lot foor making this clarification. That's a great help.:)))

Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante

Excellent

This game is becoming extremely dangerous. Who is James trying to entrap -- Samantha, or someone else? I think he stands to make too much money from Samantha.

My suggestions:

When his visitor didn't get the hint, I added, "I'm working on a prostitution scam in the area.
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When his visitor didn't get the hint, he added, "I'm working on a prostitution scam in the area.

"I'm going to have cut this short.
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"I'm going to have to cut this short.

"You're going to pay for this bitch."
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"You're going to pay for this, bitch."

James instructed him to staple a note on the outside, asking, Are you interested?
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James instructed him to staple a note on the outside, asking, "Are you interested?"

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I'm not sure where you're going with this, Carol, but it's getting interesting.

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021

Thanks for sticking with my story, Mary Kay. You boost my confidence and my spirit all the time. Hugs, Carol

Comment from Carol Hillebrenner

Excellent

It's coming together very well, unless James has figured out who Samantha really is. I'm wondering who is going to die. A couple of spots you might want to think about: Garth's stomach . . . (detached instead of unattached would work better) . . . Finally he (sank) Very much enjoying this even out of order.

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021

Thanks for the suggestions and for the review. I truly appreciate your help.

Hugs, Carol

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

Oh dear, it looks like Welcher is on his own here. Serves him right. But he's not going to give up yet. Not that he'll ever recognise her again, her disguise was far too good. I'm loving this story, my friend, well done. I'm off to the next part now. :)) Sandra xxx

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021

Love you! Thanks for the review.

Comment from Carol Clark2

Excellent

Another great scene. The plot keeps getting more and more twisted and involved. It's going to be interesting when the sheriff finds out his only friend is in business with the woman who is avenging him. Blessings.

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021

Thank you so much for your time, your thoughts on the story and your support.

Hugs, Carol

Comment from LJbutterfly

Excellent

I am soo impressed with the detail, twists and turns of this story. Each chapter is more compelling than the last. Welcher's reaction to the photos in the envelop left me quite satisfied. Sam got her revenge.

You may want to change one word:
When his visitor didn't get the hint, I added, "I'm working on... (he added)

Great episode. On to the next.

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021

I am flattered that you have continued to read and follow the story. So thrilled you are enjoying them. Thank you so much!

Hugs, Carol

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

I guess the sheriff is bit upset about all those nude pictures of him. He would be shocked to find the lady giving him problem is the one hoping to do business with James. Both of them would be shocked to learn is part of team hoping to take them down.

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021

I hope I am doing this story justice, because you and so many who continue to follow deserve a good story. I thank you for your friendship and your reviews.

Hugs, Carol

Comment from dmt1967

Excellent

Another good chapter but it doesn't have the same bite as the first one I read. I still enjoyed reading it and you seem to be getting a good balance between telling and showing.

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021

I hope I am doing this story justice, because you and so many who continue to follow deserve a good story. I thank you for your friendship and your reviews.

Hugs, Carol

Comment from Patty Palmer

Excellent

Another captivating chapter! The plot thickens and I'm glad that you have a list of the characters because sometimes I have to go back and refresh my mind as to who is who! Great job!
Patty

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021

I hope I am doing this story justice, because you and so many who continue to follow deserve a good story. I thank you for your friendship and your reviews.

Hugs, Carol

Comment from Iza Deleanu

Excellent

Wow, of course man will say that the only way a women will be succesful in the business of acting is just if she is getting through the bedroom of a director, so sad. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the next chapter.

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021

My apologies for responding with a thank you so late, but know I truly appreciate your time and the review.

Hugs, Carol