Revenge
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Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Very good chapter and interesting people involved. Samantha seems to have a bit too much certainty of her skills at manipulating people. I know she's alive in 20, but have to see if she is still sailing through trouble with such ease in 19.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Very good chapter and interesting people involved. Samantha seems to have a bit too much certainty of her skills at manipulating people. I know she's alive in 20, but have to see if she is still sailing through trouble with such ease in 19.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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I am flattered that you have read so many chapters in a row and thrilled you are enjoying them. Thank you so much!
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Very good chapter and interesting people involved. So is Samantha demon or angel? Sounds demonic here? Am going to take a brief dip into 17 as there are a few things I don't remember.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Very good chapter and interesting people involved. So is Samantha demon or angel? Sounds demonic here? Am going to take a brief dip into 17 as there are a few things I don't remember.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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I am flattered that you have read so many chapters in a row and thrilled you are enjoying them. Thank you so much!
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
Well played. Samantha has James wrapped around her finger. It's going to take some fancy footwork, for her to get through this without having to give him any serious action of her own. He's going to eventually get antsy, with cravings going wild.
My suggestions for revisions:
Samantha Ropes In James
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Samantha Ropes in James
he reminded himself she could be a dangerous adversary,
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he reminded himself she could be a dangerous adversary;
"Does a million dollars excite you?" asked Samantha. [In a new paragraph; otherwise it looks like James is still speaking.]
They will remain here at the mansion but available at his discretion.
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They will remain here at the mansion but be available at his discretion.
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I like your artwork. It might look intriguing on the book cover, but I don't know where you got it, or if there are copyrights involved.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Well played. Samantha has James wrapped around her finger. It's going to take some fancy footwork, for her to get through this without having to give him any serious action of her own. He's going to eventually get antsy, with cravings going wild.
My suggestions for revisions:
Samantha Ropes In James
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Samantha Ropes in James
he reminded himself she could be a dangerous adversary,
-->
he reminded himself she could be a dangerous adversary;
"Does a million dollars excite you?" asked Samantha. [In a new paragraph; otherwise it looks like James is still speaking.]
They will remain here at the mansion but available at his discretion.
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They will remain here at the mansion but be available at his discretion.
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I like your artwork. It might look intriguing on the book cover, but I don't know where you got it, or if there are copyrights involved.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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I hope I am doing this story justice, because you and so many who continue to follow deserve a good story. I thank you for your friendship and your reviews.
Hugs, Carol
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You certainly are! You're writing an amazing story here, especially considering all the stress you've been experiencing. I don't know how you imagine it all. May God bless you!
Love, Mary Kay xoxo
Comment from BethShelby
This sounds like quite a trap they are setting and I can't wait to see how it will play out. I alos hope to find out seen how much detail Samantha grandfater got in thos picture he took of the action in the beach.
Nicely written chapter.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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This sounds like quite a trap they are setting and I can't wait to see how it will play out. I alos hope to find out seen how much detail Samantha grandfater got in thos picture he took of the action in the beach.
Nicely written chapter.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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I am not trying to be a horrible person, but I feel ashamed that I can not keep up with the thank yous. Please know that I am sincerely appreciative of the time, review and kindness.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from dmt1967
Another well written chapter. I like the build up to the main scene and the way the reader is left wanting more at the end. Both hooks are great. Thank you for sharing and take care.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Another well written chapter. I like the build up to the main scene and the way the reader is left wanting more at the end. Both hooks are great. Thank you for sharing and take care.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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I hope I am doing this story justice, because you and so many who continue to follow deserve a good story. I thank you for your friendship and your reviews.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Ulla
So the trap is set. This is very entertaining story and I enjoy reading it. Men can be so predictable and James certainly lives up to. Now onto what happens next. Great writing, Carol. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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So the trap is set. This is very entertaining story and I enjoy reading it. Men can be so predictable and James certainly lives up to. Now onto what happens next. Great writing, Carol. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 14-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Thank you so much for your time, your thoughts on the story and your support.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Patty Palmer
The saga continues! The plot gets deeper with every chapter, just as it should. Samantha better be careful before she gets into something she doesn't want. But she can take care of herself. She has so far done a great job at investigating. Very much enjoyed this chapter.
Patty
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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The saga continues! The plot gets deeper with every chapter, just as it should. Samantha better be careful before she gets into something she doesn't want. But she can take care of herself. She has so far done a great job at investigating. Very much enjoyed this chapter.
Patty
Comment Written 14-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Thank you so much for your time, your thoughts on the story and your support.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I actually took a step back and breathe the beauty of this description, forgetting all about the plot: "She leaned against the compact car, relishing the warmth of the Georgia sun as it enveloped her; its golden rays painted everything with a honey glaze. Glimpsing Marian in an upstairs window, she twirled around, swaying in the sunlight like a child. Raising her hands to the sky, she waved her fingers, with no one suspecting." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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I actually took a step back and breathe the beauty of this description, forgetting all about the plot: "She leaned against the compact car, relishing the warmth of the Georgia sun as it enveloped her; its golden rays painted everything with a honey glaze. Glimpsing Marian in an upstairs window, she twirled around, swaying in the sunlight like a child. Raising her hands to the sky, she waved her fingers, with no one suspecting." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Thank you so much for your time, your thoughts on the story and your support.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from LJbutterfly
You are really talented and creative. There are many little sub-stories developing within the main plot. Each is carrying its own suspense. I find it fascinating to anticipate how everything will ultimately come together. This is a great Chapter.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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You are really talented and creative. There are many little sub-stories developing within the main plot. Each is carrying its own suspense. I find it fascinating to anticipate how everything will ultimately come together. This is a great Chapter.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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My apologies for responding with a thank you so late, but know I truly appreciate your time and the review.
Hugs, Carol
Comment from prettybluebirds
I have been reading this story and it just continues to get more interesting with each chapter. I really enjoyed this one with the idea of selling two hotties to a millionaire. Very creative and original. I will continue to read as you continue to write.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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I have been reading this story and it just continues to get more interesting with each chapter. I really enjoyed this one with the idea of selling two hotties to a millionaire. Very creative and original. I will continue to read as you continue to write.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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My apologies for responding with a thank you so late, but know I truly appreciate your time and the review.
Hugs, Carol