Comment from Sherry Asbury

Excellent

How adorable is this? You have captured the innocence of a first kiss. It is something no one ever forgets. I am pretty sure many men in the earlier days experienced this - times were sweeter and people had more manners. Nowadays it isn't the first kiss...it's the whole enchilada.
Very wonderful presentation and an adorable picture that made me smile.

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2021

Thanks, Sherry. You are right about the whole enchilada.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I don't think I thought of going.beyond the kiss, until one day...but a beautifully written and very sweet poem, with some excellent advice for those that want to go beyond the kissing stage. Excellent rhyming, flow and rhyming, well done, good luck, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2021

Thanks, Roy. I'm with you about thinking beyond the first kiss. Those were the good old days.

reply by royowen on 06-Nov-2021

Good job

Comment from Jumbo J

Excellent

Hi,
Great rhyme, great rhythm... with nice theme and flow.

If at all, personally, I would drop the first 'that' change to an 'a' on your last line... but of course, this is your poem and regardless, I enjoyed reading it very much.

Light-hearted, great artwork accompanying the poem. All the very best in this contest... a good contender.

With our thoughts we create...

Kind regards,
James.

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2021

Thanks for the review and suggestion. I'll take a peek.

Comment from Terry Broxson

Excellent

What a great little poem for this contest. Good luck. Your poem is sweet and kind and a little innocence, with some anticipation that may or may not be forth coming. Atlas, I remember it well. Good Job.

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 Comment Written 06-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2021

Thanks for the review. It was a quicky.

Comment from Melodie Michelle

Excellent

Excellent entry for the Kiss writing prompt! The poem flowed nicely and smoothly as it was not forced at all;-)

Thank you for sharing and many blessings to you and your family;-)

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 Comment Written 06-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2021

Thanks, Melodie. My first date did not flow very nicely.

reply by Melodie Michelle on 07-Nov-2021

I'm sorry;-(

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