Football - A Novel
Viewing comments for Chapter 59 "Football Chapter 32 part 1"A mother faces life's struggles.
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Comment from Rosemary Everson1
wow, you brought in another man...Gabe kind of gets a little irritated when he sees someone at the door other than him. She must be quite the lady; I like her as a character in your story.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2021
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wow, you brought in another man...Gabe kind of gets a little irritated when he sees someone at the door other than him. She must be quite the lady; I like her as a character in your story.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Melodie Michelle
EXCELLENT story my friend! The storyline is awesome keeping you anticipating what's next and the characters nicely interact together! This is well written and thought out;-)
Thank you so much for sharing and many blessings to you and your family;-)
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2021
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EXCELLENT story my friend! The storyline is awesome keeping you anticipating what's next and the characters nicely interact together! This is well written and thought out;-)
Thank you so much for sharing and many blessings to you and your family;-)
Comment Written 04-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
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Comment from Word Junkie
Hello Barbara,
Reading this was enjoyable because the characters are engaging, and the dialogue moves the story along as it serves to strengthen characterization. Description is good and pace is appropriate. When I read your writing it's easy to feel as if I'm in the midst of the scene.
Well done. Write on!
~Lana
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2021
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Hello Barbara,
Reading this was enjoyable because the characters are engaging, and the dialogue moves the story along as it serves to strengthen characterization. Description is good and pace is appropriate. When I read your writing it's easy to feel as if I'm in the midst of the scene.
Well done. Write on!
~Lana
Comment Written 03-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from estory
I probably missed some posts here, I haven't been able to review much because I'm spending three days a week looking after my dad, who had a stroke. But the dialogue here is as realistic as ever, and we get this low level tension between Gabe and Katherine as this stranger injects some jealousy into their relationship to test it. As happens with all couples. It is good realism and it will be interesting to see how Gabe and Kath navigate this in the future chapters. estory
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2021
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I probably missed some posts here, I haven't been able to review much because I'm spending three days a week looking after my dad, who had a stroke. But the dialogue here is as realistic as ever, and we get this low level tension between Gabe and Katherine as this stranger injects some jealousy into their relationship to test it. As happens with all couples. It is good realism and it will be interesting to see how Gabe and Kath navigate this in the future chapters. estory
Comment Written 03-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Soledadpaz
Strange that he doesn't react when she says she's in a committed relationship. If that is so, why would he be scared off by a guy handing her a rose.
Unclear: I don't want to do that either-- perhaps she means: I don't want to do either
A typo: Melton or Milton?
Must be hard typing with one hand. I feel for you.
Sol
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2021
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Strange that he doesn't react when she says she's in a committed relationship. If that is so, why would he be scared off by a guy handing her a rose.
Unclear: I don't want to do that either-- perhaps she means: I don't want to do either
A typo: Melton or Milton?
Must be hard typing with one hand. I feel for you.
Sol
Comment Written 03-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind review. Will make the corrections.
Comment from Sanku
Milton I vory, I hope is a passing ship possibly as a foil to Gabriel and to create a bit of jealousy.
I LIKED THE way she reassured him.
Hope your wrist is getting better.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2021
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Milton I vory, I hope is a passing ship possibly as a foil to Gabriel and to create a bit of jealousy.
I LIKED THE way she reassured him.
Hope your wrist is getting better.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from tfawcus
It seems that the course of of true love never runs smooth. Your introduction of a little competition for Katherine's attention looks like adding a bit of spice. It will be interesting to see how things turn out.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2021
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It seems that the course of of true love never runs smooth. Your introduction of a little competition for Katherine's attention looks like adding a bit of spice. It will be interesting to see how things turn out.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Begin Again
I hope the new guy in town (Milton Ivory) wasn't being tricky and trying to gain information for the in-laws. I could see some sneaky guy doing just that. Gabriel couldn't conceal his jealousy very well and I think Katherine enjoyed it just a little.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2021
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I hope the new guy in town (Milton Ivory) wasn't being tricky and trying to gain information for the in-laws. I could see some sneaky guy doing just that. Gabriel couldn't conceal his jealousy very well and I think Katherine enjoyed it just a little.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 02-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind review. I'm sure she did.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Barb,
I enjoyed reading this chapter. How nice that Gabriel gave a red rose to Katherine (from the image of the rose its beautiful) and a red rose is saying, 'I love you'
Gert
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2021
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Barb,
I enjoyed reading this chapter. How nice that Gabriel gave a red rose to Katherine (from the image of the rose its beautiful) and a red rose is saying, 'I love you'
Gert
Comment Written 02-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind review. Gabriel didn't give her the rose another man did.
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You are welcome I'll go back and see who the other man is.
Gert
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
You have a wonderful way of making your characters seem completely real and the reader is instantly engaged and involved. Normally anything with football in the title has me looking for the next post. But I am always assured an excellent read you never disappoint fantastic work Barbara you are smashing love Meia x
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2021
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You have a wonderful way of making your characters seem completely real and the reader is instantly engaged and involved. Normally anything with football in the title has me looking for the next post. But I am always assured an excellent read you never disappoint fantastic work Barbara you are smashing love Meia x
Comment Written 02-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2021
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This is not actually about football. It's just in the background. Thank you for the encouragement.