Someone I Love.
Hurt and Betrayed...10 total reviews
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your poem is excellent in all respects--skillfully written and vividly descriptive of the range of emotion we experience when one of our children--no matter his/her age--is devastated.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Your poem is excellent in all respects--skillfully written and vividly descriptive of the range of emotion we experience when one of our children--no matter his/her age--is devastated.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Thank you for reading my poem and for your thoughtful comments. :)
Comment from MissMerri
A moving and emotional poem, for sure, and one that many will be able to relate to. Who has not had a friend confide his/her hurt and betrayal, and not felt a similar response to what is so aptly described in these lines? Anyone having shared this experience would know exactly what you're describing. Well done, with excellent rhyming and meter too. One typo... Women in stanza six should be spelled woman. Best of luck in this contest. MM
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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A moving and emotional poem, for sure, and one that many will be able to relate to. Who has not had a friend confide his/her hurt and betrayal, and not felt a similar response to what is so aptly described in these lines? Anyone having shared this experience would know exactly what you're describing. Well done, with excellent rhyming and meter too. One typo... Women in stanza six should be spelled woman. Best of luck in this contest. MM
Comment Written 03-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Thank you for this great review and for pointing out the typo...I completely missed it. :)
Comment from Wendy G
A beautiful poem, thoughtful and sensitive. You have offered love and compassion to your friend, and in due course she will return to you emotionally. Your poem is carefully constructed with smooth rhyme and metre, and I wish you well for your entry n the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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A beautiful poem, thoughtful and sensitive. You have offered love and compassion to your friend, and in due course she will return to you emotionally. Your poem is carefully constructed with smooth rhyme and metre, and I wish you well for your entry n the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 03-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Thank you for this nice review, it's very appreciated. :)
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Betrayal is the worst heartache. When you put your pen to paper you can write what you believe and be relieved of how you feel. No one wants someone who has betrayed another human being; it is the wrong way to get what they want. If you love someone, how can you hurt that person?
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Betrayal is the worst heartache. When you put your pen to paper you can write what you believe and be relieved of how you feel. No one wants someone who has betrayed another human being; it is the wrong way to get what they want. If you love someone, how can you hurt that person?
Comment Written 03-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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I agree, there couldn't have been any love there if you can betray someone. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my poem. :)
Comment from Paul McFarland
a heartfelt poem. I hope that your friend realizes what she has in you. I'm assuming this is a true story. Hopefully it was not too many years wasted.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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a heartfelt poem. I hope that your friend realizes what she has in you. I'm assuming this is a true story. Hopefully it was not too many years wasted.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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It's my daughter actually and she's invested 11 years in the relationship. It's heartbreaking. Thank you for reading.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
There is much sorrow inside these words as broken hearts can indeed break us up and make us feel deep grief, I have been there and you captures the emotion in these well rhymed words here, I could identify with these words, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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There is much sorrow inside these words as broken hearts can indeed break us up and make us feel deep grief, I have been there and you captures the emotion in these well rhymed words here, I could identify with these words, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2021
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Thank you for reading my poem. I'm very appreciative. :)
Comment from Eunice Amero
This is a sad poem. Its awful when someone you love breaks your heart in two. No woman deserves that. Your poem was well written. I truely liked it and thank you so much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021
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This is a sad poem. Its awful when someone you love breaks your heart in two. No woman deserves that. Your poem was well written. I truely liked it and thank you so much for sharing it.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021
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Thank you for this understanding review. It's my daughter who is going through this hard time...and she's pregnant. It's heartbreaking. Thanks again for reading.
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Oh what ashame. Tell her if she needs someone to talk to she can write me at 1951eunice@gmail.com. Tell her to keep strong. We all make mistakes. you are more than welcome
Comment from Mary Shifman
This is a very well written poem. It rhymes well and has and has excellent meter. Your imagery is also very vivid and poignant. It reminds me of my mother standing aside when I was heartbroken because there was nothing she could do to make me feel better. She was there and that was enough. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021
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This is a very well written poem. It rhymes well and has and has excellent meter. Your imagery is also very vivid and poignant. It reminds me of my mother standing aside when I was heartbroken because there was nothing she could do to make me feel better. She was there and that was enough. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021
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Thank you for this understanding review. I'm the mom in this case and it's my oldest daughter who is suffering. It's heartbreaking. Thanks for reading.
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You are welcome. I feel for you and for her.
Comment from Anne Johnston
A great poem for this contest. Our hearts feel for one who is going through something like this, but there are not words to say to ease their pain. Each one has to face their problems, and find a way to rise above them.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021
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A great poem for this contest. Our hearts feel for one who is going through something like this, but there are not words to say to ease their pain. Each one has to face their problems, and find a way to rise above them.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021
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Thank you for this thoughtful review....you are such a sweet lady. :)
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You are welcome
Comment from Eternal Muse
It is a very nice compassionate poem dedicated to the dear friend who was hurt by her significant other. I liked your rhyming, imagery and visuals. I can sense despair and helplessness in your lines - alas, we can't always help people we care about.
I didn't understand why you had to repeat the first stanza in its entirety. I would understand if this was a single line which a refrain or the necessary repeating for a particular poetic form. But I can't get it here.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021
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It is a very nice compassionate poem dedicated to the dear friend who was hurt by her significant other. I liked your rhyming, imagery and visuals. I can sense despair and helplessness in your lines - alas, we can't always help people we care about.
I didn't understand why you had to repeat the first stanza in its entirety. I would understand if this was a single line which a refrain or the necessary repeating for a particular poetic form. But I can't get it here.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2021
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Thank you so much for this nice review. :)