Bogey II
An interstellar review gains an exemplar.2 total reviews
Comment from lancellot
Good theme. I do recommend that you edit this one a bit more.
notes:
"Now what, captain?"
- I would capitalize Captain when in direct address as a name.
"It's okay, XO," Looking around his quarters. ["]We can go home now."
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"Take us home, Glenn.["]
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"Asked and answered, Mr. Secretary," said (as) Barnett,
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such demeaning terms in what should be a civil conversation.["]
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Certainly not in our lifetime I guarantee.["]
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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021
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Good theme. I do recommend that you edit this one a bit more.
notes:
"Now what, captain?"
- I would capitalize Captain when in direct address as a name.
"It's okay, XO," Looking around his quarters. ["]We can go home now."
- add
"Take us home, Glenn.["]
-add
"Asked and answered, Mr. Secretary," said (as) Barnett,
- remove
such demeaning terms in what should be a civil conversation.["]
-add
Certainly not in our lifetime I guarantee.["]
- add
Comment Written 23-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021
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Two ears and a tail to you! You are so right. Thanks for stopping by and the gracious affirmation, Live long and right well, Fantasist
Comment from Jay Squires
You have an exemplary gift writing Science Fiction. You conveyed to me, as a reader, the helplessness our earth, with her technological advancements, can be when faced with a superior power who can shut down our systems with the push of a button.
The Kingston continued its cautious approach to the enormous vessel that loomed larger and larger as their horizon was filled by it. [A superb image!]
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021
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You have an exemplary gift writing Science Fiction. You conveyed to me, as a reader, the helplessness our earth, with her technological advancements, can be when faced with a superior power who can shut down our systems with the push of a button.
The Kingston continued its cautious approach to the enormous vessel that loomed larger and larger as their horizon was filled by it. [A superb image!]
Comment Written 23-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021
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It was a hurried post and your trip through this bit of fantasy with the gracious affirmation is deeply appreciated. Live long and write well, Fantasist.