Desultory Drifting
The Golden Shovel poetry form...54 total reviews
Comment from amahra
The artwork is very beautiful and appropriate for your poem. Below is a line I liked. Though I enjoyed the entire writing.
Death is the bird that perches; [I like this line.]
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021
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The artwork is very beautiful and appropriate for your poem. Below is a line I liked. Though I enjoyed the entire writing.
Death is the bird that perches; [I like this line.]
Comment Written 23-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021
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Thanks.... It does seem we are only a bird call away from the hereafter. I think that is why we cling to fragile hope...
Karenina
Comment from June Sargent
So nice to hear from you again! I really like this format of the Golden Shovel. I must try it. You have chosen a worthy poet to inspire your piece. It is similar in sentiments to Dickinson's piece, yet different. Thank you for sharing this.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021
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So nice to hear from you again! I really like this format of the Golden Shovel. I must try it. You have chosen a worthy poet to inspire your piece. It is similar in sentiments to Dickinson's piece, yet different. Thank you for sharing this.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021
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Thanks! Please do try it! I enjoyed the challenge...
Emily is my favorite poet so of course I elected to use her lines!
Karenina
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written poem you have penned using the Golden Shovel form. You used great descriptive words. That is very beautiful imagery you chose. So happy to see you posting! love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021
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This is a very well written poem you have penned using the Golden Shovel form. You used great descriptive words. That is very beautiful imagery you chose. So happy to see you posting! love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 23-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2021
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Hi Teri! Thanks! Jess did the typing but the poem was all me. I'd never heard of this form before and so enjoyed coming up with lines with Emily's words as my end words...
Karenina
Comment from 8upchef
This is a really interesting form, that I am now going to have to try. I don't think this will be an easy one, but I really love challenges. Poetic Form challenges especially. Cool writing.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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This is a really interesting form, that I am now going to have to try. I don't think this will be an easy one, but I really love challenges. Poetic Form challenges especially. Cool writing.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Thanks. I'd never come upon it before and I felt I had to give it a try as well! It was a worthwhile challenge for sure.
Karenina
Comment from Ric Myworld
The poem introduction read: the Golden Shovel poetry form. Of course, I only reads parts of most sentences of everything that isn't directly in a story or poem. So, I read the Golden Shower . . . Of course, dummy me, didn't know what a Golden Shower was, so I looked it up. Then, I was more confused: knowing darn well that you wouldn't have sent out a poem for people to read about a Golden Shower. Once I re-read the whole sentence I realized where I had gone wrong. Wish I had a six. Thanks for sharing, and I hope you are getting better by the day!
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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The poem introduction read: the Golden Shovel poetry form. Of course, I only reads parts of most sentences of everything that isn't directly in a story or poem. So, I read the Golden Shower . . . Of course, dummy me, didn't know what a Golden Shower was, so I looked it up. Then, I was more confused: knowing darn well that you wouldn't have sent out a poem for people to read about a Golden Shower. Once I re-read the whole sentence I realized where I had gone wrong. Wish I had a six. Thanks for sharing, and I hope you are getting better by the day!
Comment Written 23-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Wish I could six star you for the most humorous review! You cracked me up, Ric. Two entirely different things I think! Nope--it was indeed Golden SHOVEL! Next surgery coming up. Hopefully the second time will be the charm and I can get back to using my hands again! Thanks again,
Karenina
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You will be in my thoughts and prayers as you have been every day!!! ((HUG))
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Thanks Ric. You ate in my thoughts as well.
K
Comment from WalkerMan
Welcome back to posting, K! We are all glad to see you recovering.
Your new poem in the Golden Shovel form created by Terrence Hayes is both deep and wise, just as is the Poem by Emily Dickinson which inspired it.
Yes, hope is there to steady us in difficult times; but accepting the truth of a situation is required in order to plan a viable way forward.
Nothing is assured in life other than continual change and ultimate end, so we should cherish what we have and not fuss over what we don't.
Being positive -- best accomplished through helping others -- is the ideal "flight path for our soul"; such a life has few regrets.
You have given us a splendid example of the Golden Shovel form as inspiration to try it some day.
Superb, and beautifully illustrated.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Welcome back to posting, K! We are all glad to see you recovering.
Your new poem in the Golden Shovel form created by Terrence Hayes is both deep and wise, just as is the Poem by Emily Dickinson which inspired it.
Yes, hope is there to steady us in difficult times; but accepting the truth of a situation is required in order to plan a viable way forward.
Nothing is assured in life other than continual change and ultimate end, so we should cherish what we have and not fuss over what we don't.
Being positive -- best accomplished through helping others -- is the ideal "flight path for our soul"; such a life has few regrets.
You have given us a splendid example of the Golden Shovel form as inspiration to try it some day.
Superb, and beautifully illustrated.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Thank you most kindly, Mike. You always bring the finest wisdom and a keen eye to every bit of writing you review. I appreciate all you do for me and for others. Your explanation of my intended meaning is spot on... Since you are always helping others, I'd say your soul's flight path it right on track...just no time soon please!
The six was a bonus!
Karenina
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You are most welcome, K. You certainly earned it, especially by taking on such a challenge while still in recovery. That is a tribute to your own inner strength. God knows where the "good souls" are, and yours is one of them.
Helping others to the best of my ability has been my purpose ever since my "Icy Blind Curve Encounter" in 1990. I can do no less.
I have been told that I will be here only once, so I am making the best of that limited time. I'll stay as long as God considers appropriate.
Friends here -- including you -- are in some ways closer than family. | cherish that as much as I am sure you do. :)) -- Mike
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I do indeed! You were among the first to reach out and extend a welcoming hand all those years ago... It meant the world to me then and it still does!
K
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Thank you. Dean Kuch used to greet nearly every new member; but I don't have that much free time, so I must choose. I knew from the start that you were worth befriending. :)) -- Mike
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How lucky can a gal be?! You AND Dean greeted me at the door!
K
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How nice! I remember when he greeted me when I was new here. He became a good friend too. :)) -- Mike
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I miss him...
K
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Yes, he made a difference for which there is no substitute. He had a truly caring heart and a good sense of humor, too. -- Mike
Comment from Eternal Muse
Karen, it's a very elegant offering and an interesting form I've never heard about. Done with your usual finesse and flair.
I know Emily Dickinson is your idol, but in my opinion, poetically she can't hold a candle to you. Maybe it's my penchant for a classic rhymed poetry which I haven't found in Emily's repertoire. Again, it is my opinion, exercising my constitutional right of a free speech (lol).
Nice to see you writing again.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Karen, it's a very elegant offering and an interesting form I've never heard about. Done with your usual finesse and flair.
I know Emily Dickinson is your idol, but in my opinion, poetically she can't hold a candle to you. Maybe it's my penchant for a classic rhymed poetry which I haven't found in Emily's repertoire. Again, it is my opinion, exercising my constitutional right of a free speech (lol).
Nice to see you writing again.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Wow. Not in all the world would I consider myself on par with Ms. Dickinson... You are very kind to say so, but Lord, trust me when I say I struggle with each post! The form was new to me as well and Jess was very patient with me as I "wrote" this by reciting an endless revision of words as she penciled, erased, corrected and ultimately typed in the post! Surgery two coming up. I'm praying it does the trick! Many Thanks,
Karenina
Comment from Janetsue
I find this to be a complicated form and you have done an excellent job with your posting. I like your winsome feathers metaphor, and that the poem concludes with a positive image of a possibly rewarding flight path for one's soul. Smiles and hugs, Janet
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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I find this to be a complicated form and you have done an excellent job with your posting. I like your winsome feathers metaphor, and that the poem concludes with a positive image of a possibly rewarding flight path for one's soul. Smiles and hugs, Janet
Comment Written 23-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Thanks Janet. As fragile as hope is, we need it at times to wind our way through life. I'm an eternal optimist, so looking for my soul's flight path seemed to be a proper ending! A fun new (for me) form to try! Thanks so much,
Karenina
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job, Karenina. I enjoyed reading this new to me style of poetry. Your words flow smoothly using the ending words from the great poem. You give readers much to think about. Thank you for the notes. This style is interesting and you handled it well.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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You did a great job, Karenina. I enjoyed reading this new to me style of poetry. Your words flow smoothly using the ending words from the great poem. You give readers much to think about. Thank you for the notes. This style is interesting and you handled it well.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 23-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Thanks so much Jan. I happened upon this form and it really called out for me to give it a try. Glad you enjoyed my attempt! I try to include the instructions for any poetry form I post... Sometimes I forget!
Karenina
Comment from judiverse
You did beautifully with this. I recognized the Emily Dickinson in your style. "A frozen spike of ice is hope" is so very Emily. Great imagery. Yes, the course of our lives blows this way and that. There's so much that seems left to chance. I like your line about finding a flight path for our souls. Definitely worthy of a 6. judi
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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You did beautifully with this. I recognized the Emily Dickinson in your style. "A frozen spike of ice is hope" is so very Emily. Great imagery. Yes, the course of our lives blows this way and that. There's so much that seems left to chance. I like your line about finding a flight path for our souls. Definitely worthy of a 6. judi
Comment Written 23-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Thank you so much. I haven't written in quite some time and this form, using Emily's lines as end words just seemed so intriguing! I so appreciate your six stars!
Karenina
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It was wonderful. judi
