Within the Bone
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Strays"A tale of love, magic, and revenge.
3 total reviews
Comment from AJ McCall
I ABSOLUTELY LOVE THIS CHAPTER! I was so happy to finally see you post a chapter for Within Bone again; I was missing Mara and Aallotar. I'm taking notes on the description; it was super clear, understandable and I so so so wish I could write mine like that. I didn't see any typos so you're good! I can't wait to read the next chapter or post you put up! SIX STARS!
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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I ABSOLUTELY LOVE THIS CHAPTER! I was so happy to finally see you post a chapter for Within Bone again; I was missing Mara and Aallotar. I'm taking notes on the description; it was super clear, understandable and I so so so wish I could write mine like that. I didn't see any typos so you're good! I can't wait to read the next chapter or post you put up! SIX STARS!
Comment Written 19-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing! I've been missing Mara and Aallotar as well, so I wanted to get back to them. I'm glad the description came through so clearly.
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I'm glad it did as well. You're welcome!
Comment from NABattaglia
This excerpt shows your well-balanced writing. The chapter starts with strong descriptions that is balanced well to not be over the top. The middle and end of the chapter is obviously driven by dialogue and what is happened as the action quickens. Thanks for sharing this piece, interested in reading more!
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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This excerpt shows your well-balanced writing. The chapter starts with strong descriptions that is balanced well to not be over the top. The middle and end of the chapter is obviously driven by dialogue and what is happened as the action quickens. Thanks for sharing this piece, interested in reading more!
Comment Written 19-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing. I really appreciate it and I hope you have a good day.
Comment from J.R. Michael
Coming into this story late and cold. Having said that, I was truly intrigued as to the story as a whole. The way you described the events going on was written in a way that allows for the fantasy elements to be elevated. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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Coming into this story late and cold. Having said that, I was truly intrigued as to the story as a whole. The way you described the events going on was written in a way that allows for the fantasy elements to be elevated. Nicely done.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing. I really appreciate it and I hope you have a good day.
