cold fingers
A Poem about the Supernatural17 total reviews
Comment from Midi O'Rourke
Interesting poem. It sounds like the woman is waiting and wanting to die. It flows perfectly to the end. The end is very real. She is scared as so many of us are.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Interesting poem. It sounds like the woman is waiting and wanting to die. It flows perfectly to the end. The end is very real. She is scared as so many of us are.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
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Dear Midi O, Thank you for your review and the five stars.
Yes, you have it in one. She died accidentally although by her own hand, and now fears for her immortal soul. She has lost everyone she loves and now wants nothing more but to join them in eternity. "Pray for me ,Oh pray for me" cheers Cass
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
cold fingers
by Cass Carlton
Good entry for the Supernatural Free Verse writing prompt contest. Good free verse form. Your poem flows well. It draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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cold fingers
by Cass Carlton
Good entry for the Supernatural Free Verse writing prompt contest. Good free verse form. Your poem flows well. It draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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Dear Gypsy, Thank you for your review and the five stars. This piece took longer to write than I first thought it would. At first I had six rhyming lines at the end, but, to avoid disqualification, I amended them to non-rhyming lines. It's always best to follow the stated requirements, isn't it? cheers Cass
Comment from Bill Schott
This supernatural poem, Cold Fingers, written in archaic language, brings the final moments to one who has suffered through all others' passings. Well penned.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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This supernatural poem, Cold Fingers, written in archaic language, brings the final moments to one who has suffered through all others' passings. Well penned.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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Dear Bill, Thank you for your review and the five stars.
Yes, it is the final moments for the poor, grieving mother, pleading for prayers to ease her unshriven soul.
cheers Cass
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This a sad supernatural free verse as this wo.an finally succumbs to her sorrow at the loss of her family and succumbs to a forever sleep. Well told and good luck in the contest. Cheers
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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This a sad supernatural free verse as this wo.an finally succumbs to her sorrow at the loss of her family and succumbs to a forever sleep. Well told and good luck in the contest. Cheers
Comment Written 19-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Dear Pearl, Thank you for your review and the five stars. You have summed up the story very well, so I am pleased to find my meanings and images aren't incomprehensible. It does mean a lot to me.
cheers Cass
Comment from Boogienights
This is incredibly sad, not scary at all but heartbreaking. This spirit is crying out for help that will never come, I'm sure there are many spirits who can't pass on because they are in too much pain. Thanks for sharing. :)
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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This is incredibly sad, not scary at all but heartbreaking. This spirit is crying out for help that will never come, I'm sure there are many spirits who can't pass on because they are in too much pain. Thanks for sharing. :)
Comment Written 19-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Dear Friend, Thank you for your review and the five stars.Yes there IS sadness within this piece due to the mother having taken the sleeping potion meant for the baby to help him sleep. It was too strong and she went from sleep to Death instead of waking up.cheers Cass
Comment from HarryT
"And Life looked back at me." This is confusing since the poem ends in death. I also wondered of what sins the dying man feels guilt. Other than these two questions, I think this is a fine poem about a supernatural encounter.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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"And Life looked back at me." This is confusing since the poem ends in death. I also wondered of what sins the dying man feels guilt. Other than these two questions, I think this is a fine poem about a supernatural encounter.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Dear Harry, Thank you for your review and the five stars. When the writer of the poem saw the form of a ghost she thought it was Death she saw, but it was a ghost that still held Life in its being.(that's how it was able to speak.) The "sins" weighing heavily are those of the unshriven soul. She died in her sleep and wasn't
able to cleanse her heart and soul before she died.
cheers Cass
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Thanks for the response. Your explanation makes sense.
Comment from l.raven
HI Cass, OMG my sweet friend...this is so very sad sweet girl...this is an awesome entry to the contest...I feel so bad I'm out of sixes....******...it's awful to have all your loved ones die before you...sigh...I love your poem sweet girl...and the picture...perfect...VERY well written you...
good luck in the contest...
I'll have to go see if it's a FanStory contest...or if we the people can vote for it...love you much...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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HI Cass, OMG my sweet friend...this is so very sad sweet girl...this is an awesome entry to the contest...I feel so bad I'm out of sixes....******...it's awful to have all your loved ones die before you...sigh...I love your poem sweet girl...and the picture...perfect...VERY well written you...
good luck in the contest...
I'll have to go see if it's a FanStory contest...or if we the people can vote for it...love you much...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 18-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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Dear Linda, Thank you for your review and the five stars. This is a votable contest, so off you go and make your mark. Oh what a good girl you are to be sure. Yes, it is sad when we have to farewell our dear ones before we are ready, but we need to remember our eternal Father knows what He's doing, so we must trust in Him . My little chickadee!!! cheers Cass
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I know we have to put our faith in Him beautiful girl...and I do trust Him...but they doesn't stop the pain...sigh...
I love your replies...you are so cute...and always so welcome...much love too you...Linda xxoo
Comment from forestport12
I really loved the approach to the supernatural with nuances of heightened fear and dread and sometimes the unknown. I don't like those ones who prey on blood and gore. This was like a Hitchcock stroke of disguised or masked fear.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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I really loved the approach to the supernatural with nuances of heightened fear and dread and sometimes the unknown. I don't like those ones who prey on blood and gore. This was like a Hitchcock stroke of disguised or masked fear.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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Dear Friend, Thank you for your review and the five stars. I have an affinity for the macabre and spooky, so it was an easy topic for me to write about. However, to have my words referred to in the same sentence as "the master" Alfred Hitchcock is a compliment of the highest order for which I thank you most sincerely. cheers Cass
Comment from royowen
A very well written "haunting" post here, there's a few written on site. I've never had a "ghostly" encounter before, but love the possibility of one. This is beautifully written, and affective, a shiver attached itself to my backbone, written in couplet rhyming, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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A very well written "haunting" post here, there's a few written on site. I've never had a "ghostly" encounter before, but love the possibility of one. This is beautifully written, and affective, a shiver attached itself to my backbone, written in couplet rhyming, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 18-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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Dear Roy, thank you for your review and the five stars. I seem to have an affinity for ghostly themes, so this one was just begging for the treatment. Your comments are generous and most welcome. cheers Cass
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My privilege Cass
Comment from amada
You write very good descriptions, dear poet. I was stopped in the movement of the curtains flow...I have this habit of watching soft movements as well, like the still waters in a cozy lake. It was great to read this poem.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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You write very good descriptions, dear poet. I was stopped in the movement of the curtains flow...I have this habit of watching soft movements as well, like the still waters in a cozy lake. It was great to read this poem.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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Dear Amada, Thank you for your review and the five stars. I am glad you liked my words and the images they brought forth.cheers Cass