The Chronicals Of Bethica: The Rise
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "The Chronicles Of Bethica"Abram must defeat a deadly humanoid race of beings
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Comment from justafan
I really enjoyed this chapter. Your mind is a marvelous place to visit.:)
Books have always been an escape for me and this is proving to be quite the adventure. BRAVO!!
Thank you for sharing your incredible talent with us.
Always
Justafan of yours
Missy
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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I really enjoyed this chapter. Your mind is a marvelous place to visit.:)
Books have always been an escape for me and this is proving to be quite the adventure. BRAVO!!
Thank you for sharing your incredible talent with us.
Always
Justafan of yours
Missy
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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Oh, thank you. And you are so welcome. I'm happy you like it. Is that a new profile picture of you? I like it. It's cute.
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Yes ty? getting old!! Lol
Comment from J. P. Olesen
Hi, amahra,
I stopped by late last night for a look at this and was very pleasantly surprised.
I'm not much of a Sci-fi or Fantasy reader, and I guess I thought this would be a bad imitation of a "Chronicles of Narnia" type of thing--not that I've read or know anything about that work either.
I was absolutely floored!
Very engaging, quick-paced, and extremely well-written! Not one single flaw in the writing, which is a huge tell to me, because it means you've spent hours upon hours polishing your work.
You really know your craft and are one terrific writer. I wish you all the best with your work!
J.P.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2021
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Hi, amahra,
I stopped by late last night for a look at this and was very pleasantly surprised.
I'm not much of a Sci-fi or Fantasy reader, and I guess I thought this would be a bad imitation of a "Chronicles of Narnia" type of thing--not that I've read or know anything about that work either.
I was absolutely floored!
Very engaging, quick-paced, and extremely well-written! Not one single flaw in the writing, which is a huge tell to me, because it means you've spent hours upon hours polishing your work.
You really know your craft and are one terrific writer. I wish you all the best with your work!
J.P.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2021
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Oh my goodness, J.P. You have floored 'me' with your review, not the stars, but your review. Readers like you are why I try so hard. Thank you!
Comment from lyenochka
I like your inventive names and you give us a feel for this fantasy world with all the various places and people and the customs. And yet, the problems do seem familiarly like human history.
Minor comment:
"I'm sorry, I was just curious," Ndornah said, sincerely. (comma not needed before sincerely as the adverb should follow the verb directly.)
"Oh, poppy cocks," Ndornah interrupted. (poppycock) is a single word:
https://www.dictionary.com/browse/poppycock
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2021
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I like your inventive names and you give us a feel for this fantasy world with all the various places and people and the customs. And yet, the problems do seem familiarly like human history.
Minor comment:
"I'm sorry, I was just curious," Ndornah said, sincerely. (comma not needed before sincerely as the adverb should follow the verb directly.)
"Oh, poppy cocks," Ndornah interrupted. (poppycock) is a single word:
https://www.dictionary.com/browse/poppycock
Comment Written 14-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2021
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Don't be sorry; I thank you for pointing things out to me. And poppy cocks...lol I thought I created it. I had no idea the word existed. Thanks for telling me. lol
Comment from Ric Myworld
Where are all those sixes when I need them most. As I might have said before, I've never read much fantasy. But, your outstanding writing as struck a match and lit up my interest to read more. Great chapter. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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Where are all those sixes when I need them most. As I might have said before, I've never read much fantasy. But, your outstanding writing as struck a match and lit up my interest to read more. Great chapter. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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I'm really flattered, Rick. Thank you.
Comment from Alaskastory
"The Chronicles Of Bethica" has quite an opening told by Melitah all about her homeland, Ndornah. It was so full of detail, I felt of it as a wonderful fairytale. Also, a fun read was the scary temptation to drink a new wine. Well done.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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"The Chronicles Of Bethica" has quite an opening told by Melitah all about her homeland, Ndornah. It was so full of detail, I felt of it as a wonderful fairytale. Also, a fun read was the scary temptation to drink a new wine. Well done.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much for your review. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is an interesting chapter, Amarah, with a twist of events. Looks like the rest of the journey with these new women on board might prove to be a different kind of challenge. Well done.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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This is an interesting chapter, Amarah, with a twist of events. Looks like the rest of the journey with these new women on board might prove to be a different kind of challenge. Well done.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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Thank you, Judy. The women are not done quite yet.
Comment from Versch
Perfectly written narrative and dialogues. They flow well throughout the story. Very interesting plot, keep me wondering about the characters. Great job!
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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Perfectly written narrative and dialogues. They flow well throughout the story. Very interesting plot, keep me wondering about the characters. Great job!
Comment Written 12-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from lancellot
A very well written chapter. I really like the story within the story and the history the sisters provided. That story shows how fickle men and the gods are. You also did well showing the difference in personalities of the sister. One brash, and outspoken and the other cautious and measured.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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A very well written chapter. I really like the story within the story and the history the sisters provided. That story shows how fickle men and the gods are. You also did well showing the difference in personalities of the sister. One brash, and outspoken and the other cautious and measured.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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Thank you very much. I'm so glad you liked it. And I appreciate the stars.
Comment from Jay Squires
Well, it looks like Ndornah is starting to come around and be more sociable. There was a good history of the sister's life comingled with a lot of god-lore, which adds richness to the overall story. It was a good breather after the tension of the last chapter.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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Well, it looks like Ndornah is starting to come around and be more sociable. There was a good history of the sister's life comingled with a lot of god-lore, which adds richness to the overall story. It was a good breather after the tension of the last chapter.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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Thank you, Jay. I always appreciate your review.
Comment from royowen
Brehira and Gangus have plenty of wisdom, serving drink to two amazons might be very dangerous for the men indeed. Just love the explanation of people living in foreign lands, isn't that our perception of foreign lands we journey to. Beautifully written Amahra, and excellent episode, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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Brehira and Gangus have plenty of wisdom, serving drink to two amazons might be very dangerous for the men indeed. Just love the explanation of people living in foreign lands, isn't that our perception of foreign lands we journey to. Beautifully written Amahra, and excellent episode, blessings Roy
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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Thank you, Roy. I'm glad you liked it.
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I did