Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

Excellent story, very well told, with a great twist at the end. You built up the drama very well with the dialogue, which sounded real and authentic. The fresh cuts also led the reader to a wrong conclusion. Well done. Best wishes for your entry!

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 Comment Written 02-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 02-Jun-2021

Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my contest entry. I appreciate the comments and your interest, Have a great day!

Comment from patricia dillon

Excellent

Very deftly done. At the beginning i really thought Jason was a potential suicide. The terse dialogue built up the tension. It was quite a surprise when the parachute opened and he floated safely to the ground.

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 Comment Written 02-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 02-Jun-2021

Thank you for taking the time to read my contest entry. I appreciate it very much. I am glad that you felt the tension and found the ending surprising. Have a great ay!

reply by patricia dillon on 02-Jun-2021

You're welcome.