Legend Says
An adventure or is it pure terror?22 total reviews
Comment from equestrik
This is a good picture choice to set the scene for your story. Certainly speaks to the fact that revenge is indeed sweet. It is a good entry for the contest.
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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This is a good picture choice to set the scene for your story. Certainly speaks to the fact that revenge is indeed sweet. It is a good entry for the contest.
Comment Written 12-May-2021
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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thank you for reading, reviewing and leaving kind thoughts. I appreciate it very much. Have a great day!
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is very well done! You've taken us along on a eerie journey through this abandoned home, knowing there might be a ghost lurking there. Too bad Edward didn't take his sister along! A surprise and humourous ending. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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This is very well done! You've taken us along on a eerie journey through this abandoned home, knowing there might be a ghost lurking there. Too bad Edward didn't take his sister along! A surprise and humourous ending. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-May-2021
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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Never underestimate the power of a scorned woman (or little sister). She got even with him for sure. Thanks for reading and enjoying. Have a great day!
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Wickedly clever twist--I wasn't expecting that--brilliant set-up for the punch--stunning imagery and skillful narration builds the suspense. Nice work!
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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Wickedly clever twist--I wasn't expecting that--brilliant set-up for the punch--stunning imagery and skillful narration builds the suspense. Nice work!
Comment Written 12-May-2021
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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thank you for reading and enjoying my contest entry. Appreciate that you liked the ending. Hurrah for girl power. Have a great day!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Haha, good for Emma. She's a resourceful one for sure. I enjoyed your contest entry. I like the atmosphere you create surrounding the old farmhouse. Your words are descriptive and create great imagery.
May I suggest ~
3 mentions of 'proton pack' in a small space. Perhaps you could describe it another way or say 'armed with his weapon'
Last word 'behind'--->the 'd' didn't make it into the bold font.
Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 11-May-2021
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Haha, good for Emma. She's a resourceful one for sure. I enjoyed your contest entry. I like the atmosphere you create surrounding the old farmhouse. Your words are descriptive and create great imagery.
May I suggest ~
3 mentions of 'proton pack' in a small space. Perhaps you could describe it another way or say 'armed with his weapon'
Last word 'behind'--->the 'd' didn't make it into the bold font.
Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 11-May-2021
reply by the author on 11-May-2021
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I did go back and fix the proton pack... I meant to do that earlier but got involved with another story. Thanks for reminding me. Appreciate the review and your kindness. Have a great day!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
LOL!!! You really had me going then. I thought the dead wife was going to claim him as her long lost husband! You are good at this horror lark, Carol, I really enjoyed this. What I like is your detail, it slips in as if we are there seeing it in our own eyes. Great writing, my friend, and a wonderful contest entry. Good luck! :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 11-May-2021
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LOL!!! You really had me going then. I thought the dead wife was going to claim him as her long lost husband! You are good at this horror lark, Carol, I really enjoyed this. What I like is your detail, it slips in as if we are there seeing it in our own eyes. Great writing, my friend, and a wonderful contest entry. Good luck! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 11-May-2021
reply by the author on 11-May-2021
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Thank you, Sandra... How did you know it was mine? I have to watch myself because I always want to sign the reviews with a Smile and they will say I gave it away. LOL I am glad you enjoyed the little story. I did too! Smiles, Carol
How's the move coming along? Hope you didn't over do.
Comment from Anne Johnston
Your story using the beginning words "The old farmhouse" is very well written, lots of suspense and the your surprise ending is very effective. Looks like the sister had the last laugh.
reply by the author on 10-May-2021
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Your story using the beginning words "The old farmhouse" is very well written, lots of suspense and the your surprise ending is very effective. Looks like the sister had the last laugh.
Comment Written 10-May-2021
reply by the author on 10-May-2021
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thanks, Anne. Glad you took the time to read the contest entry and to respond. Yes, never under estimate the power of a woman (or girl) especially when they are excluded from something. Have a great day!
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Comment from Sharon Davis
This is a funny story that responds to the writing prompt to continue the story. The author successfully builds suspense throughout the piece, then throws in a twist at the end, which creates a lighthearted humorous conclusion. Great job.
reply by the author on 10-May-2021
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This is a funny story that responds to the writing prompt to continue the story. The author successfully builds suspense throughout the piece, then throws in a twist at the end, which creates a lighthearted humorous conclusion. Great job.
Comment Written 10-May-2021
reply by the author on 10-May-2021
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Good morning, Sharon... Thank you for reading my contest entry and for enjoying the bit of humor. Never estimate the power of a woman..regardless her age and size LOL. Have a great day!
Comment from Erika Seshadri
Wow, you packed a lot of action into this short story, and I love the ending. The sister gets the last laugh!! Well written, and well done. Thanks for sharing.
Have a great week!
reply by the author on 10-May-2021
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Wow, you packed a lot of action into this short story, and I love the ending. The sister gets the last laugh!! Well written, and well done. Thanks for sharing.
Have a great week!
Comment Written 10-May-2021
reply by the author on 10-May-2021
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Good morning, Erika... Never underestimate the power of a woman...especially one scorned by her brother. LOL Appreciate the kind review. Have a great day!
Comment from Bonnie Seach
Edward, don't mess with your sister ever again. Your proton pack will be null and void in the face of a young woman's scorn! Learn how to handle a woman and you will ride the stars and steer the moonbeams!
But why chase after ghosts? Chase after the great poets and writers of today. They are forging pathways for you. Every success.
reply by the author on 10-May-2021
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Edward, don't mess with your sister ever again. Your proton pack will be null and void in the face of a young woman's scorn! Learn how to handle a woman and you will ride the stars and steer the moonbeams!
But why chase after ghosts? Chase after the great poets and writers of today. They are forging pathways for you. Every success.
Comment Written 10-May-2021
reply by the author on 10-May-2021
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Good morning, Bonnie... Wow, you've made my day! Thank you for the very kind review and the shiny stars. One should never under estimate the power of a woman regardless of her age and size. LOL
I agree...I follow my dreams through writing and can go anywhere I want. Have a great day!
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What you say -- that you follow your dreams through writing, is how I feel too! Writing is the reward for being curious and observing life around us. In my opinion the Bible book of Job is one of the best ever written. It was written by Moses who had a speech impediment.. If you cannot say it, you can write it in a most surpassing way. I love to write, and you do too. Every success. Sweet Dreams till sunbeams find you
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What you say -- that you follow your dreams through writing, is how I feel too! Writing is the reward for being curious and observing life around us. In my opinion the Bible book of Job is one of the best ever written. It was written by Moses who had a speech impediment.. If you cannot say it, you can write it in a most surpassing way. I love to write, and you do too. Every success. Sweet Dreams till sunbeams find you
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Thank you and have a blessed day!
Comment from Ulla
Aha, so his sister Emma got the better of him. I liked that, and she managed to scare the heck out of him. It's a great entry for the contest and we'll thought out. Good luck in the contest. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 10-May-2021
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Aha, so his sister Emma got the better of him. I liked that, and she managed to scare the heck out of him. It's a great entry for the contest and we'll thought out. Good luck in the contest. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 10-May-2021
reply by the author on 10-May-2021
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Hi Ulla... How very nice of you to stop by this morning to read my bit of fun... Never underestimate the power of a woman... regardless of how small they might be. LOL Thank you for your kind review. have a great day!
