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A Layer Underneath

An introspective look under the surface

31 total reviews 
Comment from dragonpoet
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Jesse,
This short essay tells us of the things most of us strive to achieve. I like the strong metaphors you use for each one. The last one has a romantic sense to it.
Keep writnig and stay healthy
Joan

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2021


reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021
    Thanks, Joan, for the surprising review of a previous post. Thank you for the encouragement and kind comments. I am trying to stay healthy and, I am continuing to write...at least, in my journal. I appreciate your concern and caring manner.
    Have a wonderful rest of your week,
    Jesse
reply by dragonpoet on 09-Sep-2021
    You?re most kindly welcome, Jesse, When there are new posts to review, I will delve into a portfolio
    Joan
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2021
    Good afternoon, Joan.
    You are unique in that you delve into my portfolio and keep reviews of previous work coming!
    I appreciate your feedback and curiosity!
    Jesse
Comment from Poetic Friend
Exceptional
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James, my dear, friend,

Your quest is quite achievable. You are a dear person; thus, it is quite easy to befriend you. A lean, sinewy body, depends upon the standards that you have set for yourself, and not necessarily those of society. Intimacy shall follow the friendship. You deserve the best, my friend.

I love your descriptive analogies. They're very creative.


 Comment Written 30-May-2021


reply by the author on 30-May-2021
    Wow, what a nice surprise this Sunday afternoon! I thank you so much for the six stars and the wonderfully encouraging review! I like your way of looking at the bright side of my life and saying that my goals are achievable. You are a special friend! I appreciate the kind comments and hope that you are right about intimacy following the friendship. I am happy that you love my analogies.
    Have a lovely afternoon, my friend,
    James
Comment from Jeff Watkins
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Your descriptions of the lean, sinewy body and intimacy touch me deeply. However, friendship and intimacy are not qualities. Certain qualities are needed to make friendship and intimacy possible. If you dig a little deeper, I'm betting you will find that you have those qualities.

I am also intrigued by your felt need to dig beneath your persona. I would be very much interested in reading a revised version of this writing, if you so choose to revise. Jeff

 Comment Written 12-May-2021


reply by the author on 12-May-2021
    Thank you, Jeff, for your suggestions. I am pleased, with what I have written and, will take your suggestions, under advisement. Should I decide to revise, I will let you know so that you can read, the revised version.
    Thank you for your candor, and the excellent rating.
    Have a good night,
    Jesse
Comment from Kit Nongkhlaw
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Well, it is so true. All of us desire these three things, friendship ( true friends), lean body ( good health), and intimacy ( real love). These are the three things everybody must have in their life. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 12-May-2021


reply by the author on 12-May-2021
    Hello Kitbok. I am so glad this prose piece resonates with you. Thank you for reading and reviewing my post. I appreciate the comments and excellent rating.
    Have a great day,
    Jesse
Comment from tfawcus
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These are three desires that many people will be able to identify with. I like the way you have expanded on them in this piece, bring them into sharper focus with your imagery. Nicely done.

 Comment Written 12-May-2021


reply by the author on 12-May-2021
    Thank you so much for stopping by, Tony. I always love it when you offer your valued opinion on my work. Thank you for your kind words and helpful comments on this prose piece.
    Have a nice day, my friend,
    Jesse
Comment from AnnaLinda
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Sage Jesse,

That's satire, right? Introspective? Ok...carry on or dig deeper perhaps.

Your wrting is fine... depth is lacking in my opinion.



AnnaLinda

 Comment Written 11-May-2021


reply by the author on 11-May-2021
    You know what they say about opinions...everyone's got one. You have a right to yours and me to mine. Thank you, AnnaLinda, for taking the time and effort to read and review my work. I appreciate the excellent rating and review.
    Have a nice day,
    Jesse
reply by AnnaLinda on 11-May-2021
    ❤️
Comment from T B Botts
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Hello Jesse-
I suppose that we would all like the things that you've mentioned here. I'm afraid a well toned body is a goal that I'll never attain at this juncture of my life. I have to be satisfied with what used to be. I can still exercise, although it's more to keep disease away than to look good. Ahh, friendship. When I read the comments that were provided, I would say that you've accomplished that goal. I think at least some people have to come out of their comfort zone in order to comment. The fan story family is fairly close knit and I think there is a friendship that is born out of our love of writing and reading and there is a respect for the authors who put themselves out there, baring their souls at times. Intimacy.... hmmm... how do you define intimacy? Is it the love that two people feel for each other that leads to white hot passion, or could it be the joy of just being in the presence of another person you admire and enjoy the company of? If you are looking for intimacy, I hope you find it, whatever it may be. Thanks for your words, they give me something to think about.
Have a blessed evening.

Tom

 Comment Written 11-May-2021


reply by the author on 11-May-2021
    Thank you, Tom, for your commentary on how my work relates to you. I am glad I gave you something to think about. Intimacy can mean both of the things you mentioned and much more besides.
    I am searching for both and more...
    I appreciate you taking the time and giving me the effort necessary to read and review my post.
    Have a wonderful evening,
    Jesse
Comment from Gloria ....
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Another fine prose offering from your quill, Jesse. These qualities are all desirable, and attainable, perhaps with modifications. Wouldn't it be lovely to be on a tropical island in the Mediterranean, as long as it's not like Castaway.

Great job, Jesse. I look forward to more of these writes from you.

Gloria

 Comment Written 10-May-2021


reply by the author on 11-May-2021
    Thank you, Gloria, for the kind and encouraging comments. Yes, I believe these three attributes are attainable too!
    It won't be for want of trying anyway. I will do my best to obtain these qualities that I long for the most.
    I am so glad you like my entering into the prose gallery of posts. You have been very supportive of this, and I appreciate it.
    Have a pleasant evening,
    Jesse
Comment from Irish Rain
Exceptional
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Lovely Mr. Jesse,
reads like poetry, written like prose.
I think you have a knack for this.
Good luck with your personal quest.
Sounds very worthwhile.
I don't think I have one, maybe just
try to better myself.
Loads of room for improvement there.
Love your writing,
blessings...

 Comment Written 10-May-2021


reply by the author on 11-May-2021
    Thank you so much for the exceptional rating and review! I am happy that you think I have a knack for writing poetic prose! That notion makes me good all over! Trying to better yourself is a noble quest indeed. Thank you for the kind words and super review!
    Have a wonderful day, my friend,
    Jesse
reply by Irish Rain on 11-May-2021
    I think it's your calling!! Mine is structured rhyme...when I try free verse, prose...I'm all over the place, ha ha...this is a good fit for you, you do it well! I also liked your message in it.
reply by the author on 11-May-2021
    Thank you so much for being supportive and encouraging of my venture into prose! It feels comfortable, as it suits my style. I am getting a lot of positive feedback like yours about it, so I am happy today! Thanks again!
    Take care,
    Jesse
reply by Irish Rain on 11-May-2021
    Good...I think it might be your forte!!
    Glad to know you're happy!
    I'm getting ready to go outside in a minute
    to see if I can see the rocket launch from here.
    Huge gas lines here...the Cyber attack is causing shortages...stay well!
reply by the author on 11-May-2021
    Stay well too, my friend!
    Enjoy looking at the rocket launch!
    Have a good evening,
    Jesse
reply by Irish Rain on 11-May-2021
    Well...it was supposed to be 8:05...but I either couldn't see it, or they postponed again.
    Happy tomorrow!!
reply by the author on 11-May-2021
    Happy tomorrow to you too!
    Jesse
Comment from Bill Schott
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This reflection, A Layer Underneath, establishes the threshold of nirvana for which life shines brightest. Friendship, personal excellence, and a loving relationship which always rides the crest.

 Comment Written 10-May-2021


reply by the author on 11-May-2021
    The threshold of nirvana...I love your perspective, Bill, and though I am not sure I agree with it, I appreciate it nonetheless.
    I find these attributes as something achievable and worthy of my striving for.
    So I will stop at nothing, or practically nothing, to gain them. If it is nirvana, then so be it! Thank you for your honesty with your perspective. The challenge is an honorable one, and I appreciate it.
    Thank you for this excellent rating and review.
    Have a great day,
    Jesse