Football - A Novel
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "Football Chapter 16 part 1"A mother faces life's struggles.
26 total reviews
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, we get into the romantic start and Gabi feels almost like family: "When Gabriel and Jordan arrived at the house, Katherine and the boys were setting the table. Jeremy ran up and hugged Gabriel's thighs. "I've missed you and Reggie so much. I'm glad you came. Are you eating dinner with us?"
Gabriel eyed Katherine. "I'd better go. I just wanted to say hi."
Katherine put her hand on the extra chair. "I think this chair and place setting has your name on it."
"Oh really?" His eyebrows rose.
"Really." Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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Wow, we get into the romantic start and Gabi feels almost like family: "When Gabriel and Jordan arrived at the house, Katherine and the boys were setting the table. Jeremy ran up and hugged Gabriel's thighs. "I've missed you and Reggie so much. I'm glad you came. Are you eating dinner with us?"
Gabriel eyed Katherine. "I'd better go. I just wanted to say hi."
Katherine put her hand on the extra chair. "I think this chair and place setting has your name on it."
"Oh really?" His eyebrows rose.
"Really." Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
Comment Written 05-May-2021
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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Thank you for the kind review. We'll see what happens.
Comment from Wendy G
It continues to be an interesting and well written story. I never see any spelling or punctuation errors. The development of the plot is calm and unrushed. Thanks for posting.
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It continues to be an interesting and well written story. I never see any spelling or punctuation errors. The development of the plot is calm and unrushed. Thanks for posting.
Comment Written 04-May-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from tfawcus
Even though I've missed a few chapters of this, I find it easy to pick up the thread when I do read a chapter. The conversation is so easy and natural and the situations so real that they come to life in the mind.
Keep up the good work. No spags that I can see.
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Even though I've missed a few chapters of this, I find it easy to pick up the thread when I do read a chapter. The conversation is so easy and natural and the situations so real that they come to life in the mind.
Keep up the good work. No spags that I can see.
Comment Written 04-May-2021
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Thank you for dropping by.
Comment from Sankey
Hi, so good to finally get to read your next chapter. You were not on at your usual time for whatever reason and we went out yesterday.(Monday here) No spags and a great read again!
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Hi, so good to finally get to read your next chapter. You were not on at your usual time for whatever reason and we went out yesterday.(Monday here) No spags and a great read again!
Comment Written 03-May-2021
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My computer's been acting up. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A good image and story
to go with it, Barbara.
-I like how there are different
things going on with different characters.
-The football game was exciting with
the extra point and discussion about it later.
-I was wondering why Gabe was being
evasive about coming to see Katherine,
but you indicate why at the end,
adding mystery and suspense to the story.
-Katherine and Gabe usually have good
discussions and can banter back and forth.
-Her first practice went well, and she is
obviously very fit!
-I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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-A good image and story
to go with it, Barbara.
-I like how there are different
things going on with different characters.
-The football game was exciting with
the extra point and discussion about it later.
-I was wondering why Gabe was being
evasive about coming to see Katherine,
but you indicate why at the end,
adding mystery and suspense to the story.
-Katherine and Gabe usually have good
discussions and can banter back and forth.
-Her first practice went well, and she is
obviously very fit!
-I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 03-May-2021
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Like your video regarding the fight song...such great words to run by. My granddaughters ran track; also have one running track with her team now; if you don't mind I would like to pass this song onto them....they would love it.
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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Like your video regarding the fight song...such great words to run by. My granddaughters ran track; also have one running track with her team now; if you don't mind I would like to pass this song onto them....they would love it.
Comment Written 03-May-2021
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You sure can. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
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thank you!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was really interesting. Some of your sports are so different from ours. It looks like Katherine and Gabriel are getting closer. I can understand Gabriel's concerns about staying so often, with that louse of a man having them spied upon, it could seriously damage both their careers. Well done, Barbara, excellent chapter. :) Sandra xxx
I'm not sure I'll be able to post this weeks, I'm so behind in everything having my time taken up in our moving. Goodness, there is so much to do! xxx
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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That was really interesting. Some of your sports are so different from ours. It looks like Katherine and Gabriel are getting closer. I can understand Gabriel's concerns about staying so often, with that louse of a man having them spied upon, it could seriously damage both their careers. Well done, Barbara, excellent chapter. :) Sandra xxx
I'm not sure I'll be able to post this weeks, I'm so behind in everything having my time taken up in our moving. Goodness, there is so much to do! xxx
Comment Written 03-May-2021
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I do understand about posting. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
You continue to enrichen the relationship--the interactions are touching and rendered with apt sensitivity-- all the characters and their dialog are believable. Nice work.
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You continue to enrichen the relationship--the interactions are touching and rendered with apt sensitivity-- all the characters and their dialog are believable. Nice work.
Comment Written 03-May-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from BethShelby
Running has never been my thing but apparently it is yours. I like your fight song. This was another good chapter. I get exhausted just thinking about running up a hill. Our PE teacher use to make us run around the ball field and it was sheer torture for me. Katherine and Gabriel seem well matched.
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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Running has never been my thing but apparently it is yours. I like your fight song. This was another good chapter. I get exhausted just thinking about running up a hill. Our PE teacher use to make us run around the ball field and it was sheer torture for me. Katherine and Gabriel seem well matched.
Comment Written 02-May-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lancellot
This is another well written and thought out chapter. Everything is lining up and progressing, like a smooth tale should. With a family of young kids it is easy to see why Katherine is going slow and making sure about things before rushing in. Gabe on the other hand, is odd. He is still a man, and certain sides don't show. I do hope the P.I. thread is explained later, right it doesn't make sense.
Good job.
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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This is another well written and thought out chapter. Everything is lining up and progressing, like a smooth tale should. With a family of young kids it is easy to see why Katherine is going slow and making sure about things before rushing in. Gabe on the other hand, is odd. He is still a man, and certain sides don't show. I do hope the P.I. thread is explained later, right it doesn't make sense.
Good job.
Comment Written 02-May-2021
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I promise the PI will be explained fully. Thank you for the kind review.