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Football - A Novel

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A mother faces life's struggles.

28 total reviews 
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
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They always say that boys will be boys.....but buying a playboy magazine might not be such a great idea for a young boy in sports. Pin ups sometimes are very nude....great idea to keep life clean, even when you are in high school.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
    One of my boys attempted it, but it didn't go so well with MOM. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ben Colder
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So typical with this type atmosphere. Yes, lots of girls get into trouble this way. I can see this unfolding.
Popped in and thought to give you a read.

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2021


reply by the author on 19-Mar-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from RPSaxena
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Hello Barbara.Wilkey,
Nice piece of Romance Fiction in continuation having lucid as well as perfectly matching the theme phraseology, captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end and the dialogues make it more enchanting.
Interesting Indeed!

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2021


reply by the author on 18-Mar-2021
    Thank you for the encouraging review.
reply by RPSaxena on 19-Mar-2021
    Barbara.Wilkey, Most Welcome!
    With best wishes,
    ~ RP
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
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barbara:

Every young man should read this chapter so he would understand that gawking at women in such situations as the Playboy magazine is not a good thing. When I was an AP and had to deal with something of that nature, I would always ask about their moms, sisters, female cousins, etc., and then tell them the girls in the magazine are all someone's daughter and may possibly have all those other roles. Loving your book.

Rdfrdmom2

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2021


reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from GE Parson
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Great post on several points.
#1 Showing and teaching young boys to respect
their Mothers.
#2 Explaining the history of why girls sell their
bodies to display them in Men's Mags.
#3 Teaching young boys not to goggle with
lustful eyes at the scantily clad women.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2021


reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from estory
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In this chapter we see Gabriel stepping tentatively into a father's role here, with Katherine's son, and giving the kid this fatherly talk about respect for women. Before that we get this little scene between Katherine and her mom and we see her mom kind of nudging her into thinking about Gabriel as a romantic figure. So they are sort of moving in that direction. Nice realistic dialogue I like how you described the grins and facial expressions and Gabriel tossing those boxes nervously around. It brings some more emotion into these relationship scenes. estory

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2021


reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
    Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from RetroStarfish
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Great chapter and a wonderful, meaningful conversation between Joshua and Gabriel. The dialogue is very well done, and it demonstrates Gabriel' shame about his past.
One tiny suggestion is to remove one of the two references to body language. It stands out a bit when Katherine uses the phrase again, after Gabriel used it. Perhaps Joshua is blushing or looking down as he passes her and she simply says "What's up with him?"
It's a very small thing in a lovely story.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2021


reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
    Thank you for the suggestion. I like it.
Comment from Wendy G
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This chapter represents normal growing up issues for young boys, and also the mistakes that others have made in the past and regret. It has been handled with wisdom and sensitivity, and positive role modelling of wise ways to handle such matters.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2021


reply by the author on 16-Mar-2021
    Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
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You nailed it--their interaction is touching and realistic--and sends a good message!--you continue to skillfully incorporate his backstory and his reinvention/reformation.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2021


reply by the author on 16-Mar-2021
    Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from judiverse
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Gabriel handles the problem of Joshua and the girlie magazines very well. Joshua's father probably wouldn't have been at home to be aware of the situation and explain to Joshua about how the magazines exploited women. Gabriel's wise not to stay for dinner. He's right. Too many dinners there would have people talking. Great story development. judi

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2021


reply by the author on 16-Mar-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
reply by judiverse on 16-Mar-2021
    You're very welcome. judi