Heard It Through The Grapevine
When a gossip tells a gossip, who's telling the truth?20 total reviews
Comment from Iza Deleanu
That is quite a surprise ending, the best so far:"Priscilla interrupted, "I'm confused. Was Jackson undercover, too?"
"Actually, he was the South Side Crew's leader."
"Not my son!" Priscilla screamed, "Where is he? He'll tell you."
Detective Austin shook his head, "Sorry, Priscilla, Jackson didn't make it."
Priscilla collapsed. She needed a shoulder to lean on." Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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That is quite a surprise ending, the best so far:"Priscilla interrupted, "I'm confused. Was Jackson undercover, too?"
"Actually, he was the South Side Crew's leader."
"Not my son!" Priscilla screamed, "Where is he? He'll tell you."
Detective Austin shook his head, "Sorry, Priscilla, Jackson didn't make it."
Priscilla collapsed. She needed a shoulder to lean on." Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Wow! Thank you so much for your kind words. I am glad that you enjoyed my story. Appreciate you taking the time to read and comment.
Comment from Wendy G
An excellent story with a very clever twist. You built up to it very well, with clear writing, authentic dialogue and realistic characters. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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An excellent story with a very clever twist. You built up to it very well, with clear writing, authentic dialogue and realistic characters. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Thank you, Wendy! I am blessed to receive such a kind review. I appreciate your time and comments. Smiles to you!
Comment from pome lover
that's a good one! Realistic dialogue and jargon.
Looks like you've got this one nailed.
You went from casual greetings to adversarial arguments, bringing in fear, tension mounts, BOOM - the accuser loses.
Good job.
pome lover
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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that's a good one! Realistic dialogue and jargon.
Looks like you've got this one nailed.
You went from casual greetings to adversarial arguments, bringing in fear, tension mounts, BOOM - the accuser loses.
Good job.
pome lover
Comment Written 02-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Thank you! I am blessed to receive such a kind review. I appreciate your time and comments. Smiles to you!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You certainly brought a twist to your tale here and I enjoyed your delivery and the irony of this situation, and maybe Priscilla should have been checking in her own backyard rather than poking her nose into other people's business, a fine write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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You certainly brought a twist to your tale here and I enjoyed your delivery and the irony of this situation, and maybe Priscilla should have been checking in her own backyard rather than poking her nose into other people's business, a fine write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Thank you, Dolly! I am blessed to receive such a kind review. I appreciate your time and comments. Smiles to you!
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is well-written and tells a good story. Your characters are well rounded and believable and, unfortunately, the bad guy's mom would never believe it was her son. Great work.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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This is well-written and tells a good story. Your characters are well rounded and believable and, unfortunately, the bad guy's mom would never believe it was her son. Great work.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Thank you, Carol! I am blessed to receive such a kind review. I appreciate your time and comments. Smiles to you!
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, interesting. I was a little confused by the part where Priscilla entered the car and the reason she stated for doing so, since Bobby had said the detective asked for both women. Why a detective would send a child was also strange but the story moved along fine. And the point or theme was clear to the readers.
well done.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Hmm, interesting. I was a little confused by the part where Priscilla entered the car and the reason she stated for doing so, since Bobby had said the detective asked for both women. Why a detective would send a child was also strange but the story moved along fine. And the point or theme was clear to the readers.
well done.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Thank you for reading. Guess I was thinking it was a small town with close knit neighbors.... Thank you for the review and comments.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Interesting story. I like the twist.
Here a woman was willing to gossip about another's son and was blind to her own son's drug use.
Well done
I enjoyed the read.
Mary
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Interesting story. I like the twist.
Here a woman was willing to gossip about another's son and was blind to her own son's drug use.
Well done
I enjoyed the read.
Mary
Comment Written 02-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Thank you, Mary! I am blessed to receive such a kind review. I appreciate your time and comments. Smiles to you!
Comment from Ric Myworld
We never truly know what side anyone is on, and just keep our distance and mind our own business ain't always the answer. Thanks for sharing your fine story. Wish I had a six.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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We never truly know what side anyone is on, and just keep our distance and mind our own business ain't always the answer. Thanks for sharing your fine story. Wish I had a six.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Thank you, my friend! I am blessed to receive such a kind review. I appreciate your time and comments. Smiles to you!
Comment from LisaMay
Smug mothers and secretive sons are to the fore in this tale of the harsh realities of life in backrooms and on the streets with gangs and drugs. Told with gripping drama.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Smug mothers and secretive sons are to the fore in this tale of the harsh realities of life in backrooms and on the streets with gangs and drugs. Told with gripping drama.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Thank you, Lisa! I am blessed to receive such a kind review. I appreciate your time and comments. Smiles to you!
Comment from poetwatch
It is said that the right hand doesn't know what the left hand is doing, author. It is the same with our children. Do we really know what an individual does while away from the house? That gossip-mouth Priscilla got a taste of reality. This is a good entry for the Surprise Me Contest. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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It is said that the right hand doesn't know what the left hand is doing, author. It is the same with our children. Do we really know what an individual does while away from the house? That gossip-mouth Priscilla got a taste of reality. This is a good entry for the Surprise Me Contest. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Thank you! I am blessed to receive such a kind review. I appreciate your time and comments. Smiles from me to you!
