A Stranger in the Dell
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Comment from June Sargent
Thank you for taking us along with you on this walk through the dell. I enjoyed meandering among the ancient trees listening to little critters scurrying about. Mist likely complaining about the stranger(s)! I loved this!
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2021
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Thank you for taking us along with you on this walk through the dell. I enjoyed meandering among the ancient trees listening to little critters scurrying about. Mist likely complaining about the stranger(s)! I loved this!
Comment Written 23-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2021
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I'm sure they were. Thank you for much for a lovely review.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Lovely picture and a beautiful poem. I could really get the sense of the scene you've described to us and I bet you returned home with a cloak of peace around you. Lovely,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2021
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Lovely picture and a beautiful poem. I could really get the sense of the scene you've described to us and I bet you returned home with a cloak of peace around you. Lovely,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 23-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2021
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Always when outdoors in nature. Thank you for a wonderful review. Hope you are staying safe and well.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
A lovely walk through the Dell with a stranger. The beautifully described scenes creating lovely imagery are much appreciated. You made it a very interesting walk.
Ralf
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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A lovely walk through the Dell with a stranger. The beautifully described scenes creating lovely imagery are much appreciated. You made it a very interesting walk.
Ralf
Comment Written 22-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Thank you. I'm glad you think so.
Comment from AnnaLinda
Yvonne,
I like how you re-introduced the title in the last line.
This is a very excellent piece of poetry...wonderful
imagery, meter and rhymes.
Perfect artwork was chosen to present with your
beautiful piece.
Anna
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Yvonne,
I like how you re-introduced the title in the last line.
This is a very excellent piece of poetry...wonderful
imagery, meter and rhymes.
Perfect artwork was chosen to present with your
beautiful piece.
Anna
Comment Written 22-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Thank you. I appreciate this great review.
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My pleasure
Comment from nancy_e_davis
A beautiful poem, great rhyming and so pleasant to read. Your words paint a LOVELY picture, making me feel like I was there with you in the quiet woods, enjoying the day.
Well done, Yvonne. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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A beautiful poem, great rhyming and so pleasant to read. Your words paint a LOVELY picture, making me feel like I was there with you in the quiet woods, enjoying the day.
Well done, Yvonne. Nancy:)
Comment Written 22-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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I'm so glad. That's the best kind of compliment. Thank you.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is an exceptional poem in all respects--made me smile and say "Ahhhh." The ballad-style form is perfect for your lovely recounting of a day of being the stranger in the woods. Lovely blend of literal and figurative language.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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This is an exceptional poem in all respects--made me smile and say "Ahhhh." The ballad-style form is perfect for your lovely recounting of a day of being the stranger in the woods. Lovely blend of literal and figurative language.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much. Thank you for pointing that the parts you like. Nothing so calming as being out in nature.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Yvonne.
This is a very well-done poem in ballad form. The content has a "warm and soft" feeling that surrounds the reader with pleasant sensations carried by the words.
Suggestion>>>
To keep the strict 8-6-8-6 meter for ballad style you might consider changing the last two lines of the third stanza to the following:
"The emperor of nighttime and
its many tiny czars."
It uses the "enjambment" technique by moving "and" to the third line without changing the meaning, and it keeps the strict ballad meter.
Robert
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Hello Yvonne.
This is a very well-done poem in ballad form. The content has a "warm and soft" feeling that surrounds the reader with pleasant sensations carried by the words.
Suggestion>>>
To keep the strict 8-6-8-6 meter for ballad style you might consider changing the last two lines of the third stanza to the following:
"The emperor of nighttime and
its many tiny czars."
It uses the "enjambment" technique by moving "and" to the third line without changing the meaning, and it keeps the strict ballad meter.
Robert
Comment Written 22-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much, Robert. I will take a look at it.
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You're welcome
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image and
presentation.
-Effective imagery, meter,
and thyme that create a
smooth flow and a vivid word picture.
-I like the use of "stranger in the dell"
in the opening and closing verses.
-It is a very good poem, and I
enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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-Very nice image and
presentation.
-Effective imagery, meter,
and thyme that create a
smooth flow and a vivid word picture.
-I like the use of "stranger in the dell"
in the opening and closing verses.
-It is a very good poem, and I
enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much. I appreciate it.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Pantygynt
The animals' bush telegraph never lets them down. you have to have more patience than Job himself if you want to be a David Attenborough. Those little critters are on to you as soon as you enter their realm.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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The animals' bush telegraph never lets them down. you have to have more patience than Job himself if you want to be a David Attenborough. Those little critters are on to you as soon as you enter their realm.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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So true, but it's so calming being out in nature. Thanks, Jim.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'A Stranger In The Dell', is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. It was a pleasure to both read and review this talented poet's work. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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'A Stranger In The Dell', is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. It was a pleasure to both read and review this talented poet's work. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2021
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Thank you.
You're welcome.