Within the Bone
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "An Awakening"A tale of love, magic, and revenge.
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Comment from AJ McCall
Oooh... Mara's power was awakened??!! That's some serious power for a Demon to get excited, lol. So they must break the curse by using Mara's power from the Void? So what about Caliban? I'm sure he's jealous, which is why Sammael suspects he'll rebel. And it's nice to see that Mara and Aalltoar will stick together, they're great friends. I did notice a sentence with an error: --the darkness of his shadow (a) hitting like a falling ton as it covered her.
Actually, I'm not sure if it's an error but it kinda confused me. But everything else very much intriguing!! Can't wait for the next chapter!!
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
Oooh... Mara's power was awakened??!! That's some serious power for a Demon to get excited, lol. So they must break the curse by using Mara's power from the Void? So what about Caliban? I'm sure he's jealous, which is why Sammael suspects he'll rebel. And it's nice to see that Mara and Aalltoar will stick together, they're great friends. I did notice a sentence with an error: --the darkness of his shadow (a) hitting like a falling ton as it covered her.
Actually, I'm not sure if it's an error but it kinda confused me. But everything else very much intriguing!! Can't wait for the next chapter!!
Comment Written 26-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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Thanks for spotting that error, I pulled it out. And thank you very much for reading and reviewing. I really, really appreciate it. Caliban?s definitely got the potential to be trouble in the future. Jealous he be, as it were.
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Yes, which will make the story better!!! You're very very welcome!
Comment from Goodadvicechan
It is a very dramatic experience in reading through the story. You did a good job to create such an atmosphere that there were moments of death or alive; endurance or give up...etc.
Very well done.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
It is a very dramatic experience in reading through the story. You did a good job to create such an atmosphere that there were moments of death or alive; endurance or give up...etc.
Very well done.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing. I appreciate it!
Comment from Goodadvicechan
It is a very dramatic experience in reading through the story. You did a good job to create such an atmosphere that there were moments of death or alive; endurance or give up...etc.
Very well done.
It is a very dramatic experience in reading through the story. You did a good job to create such an atmosphere that there were moments of death or alive; endurance or give up...etc.
Very well done.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2020