Within the Bone
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "A Terrible Wrath"A tale of love, magic, and revenge.
3 total reviews
Comment from AJ McCall
WHOA. Mara finally let... it... out. And so did Aallotar. They are really connected. I think the other vision Mara's uncle told of may be part truth because the Troll had said to Mara that she'd be the only survivor. Now, what are they going to do to them? Please write the next chapter soon! I'm DYING to know what's going to happen!!!
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2020
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WHOA. Mara finally let... it... out. And so did Aallotar. They are really connected. I think the other vision Mara's uncle told of may be part truth because the Troll had said to Mara that she'd be the only survivor. Now, what are they going to do to them? Please write the next chapter soon! I'm DYING to know what's going to happen!!!
Comment Written 18-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2020
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Thanks for reading and reviewing! Yeah, there was definitely an explosion. I'm hoping to have the next chapter done this weekend, so fingers crossed.
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Alright, mine's definitely crossed. You're welcome!!!
Comment from siais
Everything boiled over inside Mara, the years of relentless abuse and the sudden shock of her friend's torment breaking through her careful crust of calm. "I hate you!" she screamed. "Void take you all!"
A perfect finish, was reading breathless to find the end and this is Wonderful!
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2020
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Everything boiled over inside Mara, the years of relentless abuse and the sudden shock of her friend's torment breaking through her careful crust of calm. "I hate you!" she screamed. "Void take you all!"
A perfect finish, was reading breathless to find the end and this is Wonderful!
Comment Written 17-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2020
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing. I really appreciate the feedback.
Comment from lancellot
You know at first this looked like a long read but once I started and it got me, I was kind sad it ended, (and I like the ending). I went back through it but I didn't see anything that needed changing. Excellent editing. It nice to see time taken to get things correct the first time through.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2020
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You know at first this looked like a long read but once I started and it got me, I was kind sad it ended, (and I like the ending). I went back through it but I didn't see anything that needed changing. Excellent editing. It nice to see time taken to get things correct the first time through.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2020
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing. I'm glad I got stuff to come out without an error. I'm glad the ending came across well as well.
