Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
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Comment from Reese Turner
Fusion to confusion, this is pretty deep stuff for a shallow end kind of guy like me. Although, I can relate to the message - painfully so! "more ups than downs" is my life, but at 72 my brain seems to focus on the things I did less than perfect or even acceptable. I guess that's normal. God blessed with me with a love of golf, so I have new problems to deal with every day. Merry Christmas
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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Fusion to confusion, this is pretty deep stuff for a shallow end kind of guy like me. Although, I can relate to the message - painfully so! "more ups than downs" is my life, but at 72 my brain seems to focus on the things I did less than perfect or even acceptable. I guess that's normal. God blessed with me with a love of golf, so I have new problems to deal with every day. Merry Christmas
Comment Written 06-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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Reese, I think the complexity of a man's work-a-day life can add volumes of up's and down's downs moment. but switching to golf in retirement certainly shows you not feint of heart, kudo's! Merry Christmas right back!
Comment from Wendy G
This commentary on life with its roller coaster of successes and failures, soaring juxtaposed with inexplicable falling. But yes, we need to forgive ourselves, and be liberated from the malaise and self-condemnation we can bring upon ourselves.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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This commentary on life with its roller coaster of successes and failures, soaring juxtaposed with inexplicable falling. But yes, we need to forgive ourselves, and be liberated from the malaise and self-condemnation we can bring upon ourselves.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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Wendy, thank you for your review, yes I agree that everything we can be, will be, in life is affected by our ability to forgive oneself and only then can the fruit of forgiveness be planted with others.
Comment from karenina
I'm enchanted by this complex sonnet form! So many rules, so little time! This is the second I've read...and I am no less intimidated, thus may never take the plunge to try to write one.
Your theme is an important one. Especially related to this stanza:
"Oh yes! There were many days and all manner
of ways where I stepped so high my soul
soared fine and I had far more ups than downs,
then it all near magically turned sour."
The dissonance of "magically turned sour" only serves to emphasize the many tumults of life experience and our reaction to them.
Very nice write...I'm going to copy the instructions. Maybe one day...
Karenina
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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I'm enchanted by this complex sonnet form! So many rules, so little time! This is the second I've read...and I am no less intimidated, thus may never take the plunge to try to write one.
Your theme is an important one. Especially related to this stanza:
"Oh yes! There were many days and all manner
of ways where I stepped so high my soul
soared fine and I had far more ups than downs,
then it all near magically turned sour."
The dissonance of "magically turned sour" only serves to emphasize the many tumults of life experience and our reaction to them.
Very nice write...I'm going to copy the instructions. Maybe one day...
Karenina
Comment Written 05-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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Karenina, I do hope to read your Fusion Sonnet in the future..thank you for your review, yes I agree that everything we can be, will be, in life is affected by our ability to forgive oneself and only then can the fruit of forgiveness be planted with others.
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I do have the notes and you did inspire me...the question is will my skill hold up?--Karenina
Comment from Ann Market
Wow, I love the profound meaning here! I like how you wrapped up the poem (whose form was lovely) with the summarization "Mistakes do not need to entrap the mind" because it is so true; while it is certainly difficult, we can learn from our mistakes.
Wonderful poem!
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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Wow, I love the profound meaning here! I like how you wrapped up the poem (whose form was lovely) with the summarization "Mistakes do not need to entrap the mind" because it is so true; while it is certainly difficult, we can learn from our mistakes.
Wonderful poem!
Comment Written 05-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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Ann I thank you so much! I agree that everything we can be, will be, in life is affected by our ability to forgive oneself and only then can the fruit of forgiveness be planted with others.
Comment from tfawcus
I enjoyed reading your Fusion Sonnet. It has a worthwhile message that has global significance these days, when so many people are suffering hardship for one reason or another and blaming themselves for it. Your description of that state (stalled deep in life's weeds) is brilliant.
As far as I can see, your technical grasp of the form is spot on.
One suggestion:
where hurt and remorse does (do) breed.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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I enjoyed reading your Fusion Sonnet. It has a worthwhile message that has global significance these days, when so many people are suffering hardship for one reason or another and blaming themselves for it. Your description of that state (stalled deep in life's weeds) is brilliant.
As far as I can see, your technical grasp of the form is spot on.
One suggestion:
where hurt and remorse does (do) breed.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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Tony, thank you very much! Because I find your work quite good and technically sound, to receive your validation is very warming.
I do see the need do change this and have done so. Again, THANK YOU!
Comment from Gloria ....
Well J, I must admit to not having fully understood the "rules" of the fusion sonnet, but you have written a fine poem. Your sentiment is one of great import, as I can imagine many people carry around some regret or other that they have a hard time forgiving themselves for.
A fine poem and pleasure to read and review today.
Gloria
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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Well J, I must admit to not having fully understood the "rules" of the fusion sonnet, but you have written a fine poem. Your sentiment is one of great import, as I can imagine many people carry around some regret or other that they have a hard time forgiving themselves for.
A fine poem and pleasure to read and review today.
Gloria
Comment Written 04-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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Gloria, yes, this format is quite complex. The only way I can even begin to take a stab at such as these, I must develop a template from the step to step instructions and then I hope to have digested the roadmap clearly.
Comment from Cindy Decker
I like this fusion sonnet. It flows nicely, and asks us to forgive ourselves our past wrongs. I only found one minor error: where hurt and remorse (do) breed.
Excellent work JR. good luck in the contest.
Cindy
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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I like this fusion sonnet. It flows nicely, and asks us to forgive ourselves our past wrongs. I only found one minor error: where hurt and remorse (do) breed.
Excellent work JR. good luck in the contest.
Cindy
Comment Written 04-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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Cindy, yes I did error in this and thus have corrected same. I do so value you and the time taken to read and comment on this Fusion Sonnet.
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You?re welcome. It really is a nice poem.
Comment from LeftHandedScribe
Isn't so true that we are always the ones who get the most in our own way. We are surely here to manifest our glory and not focus on what is wrong with our nature for even in our mistakes we are perfect as is.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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Isn't so true that we are always the ones who get the most in our own way. We are surely here to manifest our glory and not focus on what is wrong with our nature for even in our mistakes we are perfect as is.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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Hello my lefty friend, thank you for your time and energy to read and comment on this poem.
Comment from damommy
Great job with this form, JLR. It wasn't as hard as it looked at first, was it? I like your message. Forgiving oneself is one of the hardest things in life to do. As for liking oneself, if we don't like ourselves, how can we expect anyone else to like us? 8-)
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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Great job with this form, JLR. It wasn't as hard as it looked at first, was it? I like your message. Forgiving oneself is one of the hardest things in life to do. As for liking oneself, if we don't like ourselves, how can we expect anyone else to like us? 8-)
Comment Written 04-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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I do thank you so much! This format is quite complex. The only way I can even begin to take a stab at such as these, I must develop a template from the step to step instructions and then I hope to have digested the roadmap clearly. Yes, forgiveness can only grow and spread if it is well tilled, nurtured and fed in one's own backyard.
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I make templates, too. 8-)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written fusion sonnet about forgiving oneself is first and then we can start to forgiving others with an open mind and heart. As they say charity starts at home then you can freely give to others.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020
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A very well-written fusion sonnet about forgiving oneself is first and then we can start to forgiving others with an open mind and heart. As they say charity starts at home then you can freely give to others.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020
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Sandra, to our own selves be true and forgiving!
