Football - A Novel
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Football Chapter 4 part 1"A mother faces life's struggles.
23 total reviews
Comment from w.j.debi
Mr. Frost really is a bad one. Even if he thought those things, he should know that he can't say them aloud without getting into deep trouble. And he hasn't given Katherine a chance, just because she got the job instead of his daughter if I remember correctly. Bad judgment. He is a marvelous villain.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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Mr. Frost really is a bad one. Even if he thought those things, he should know that he can't say them aloud without getting into deep trouble. And he hasn't given Katherine a chance, just because she got the job instead of his daughter if I remember correctly. Bad judgment. He is a marvelous villain.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Sanku
This was a very good chapter and it underlines the venom of a jealous misogynist men.he is rude and crude,our Mr Frost and I am looking forward to a punitive decision from the head.....
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2020
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This was a very good chapter and it underlines the venom of a jealous misogynist men.he is rude and crude,our Mr Frost and I am looking forward to a punitive decision from the head.....
Comment Written 09-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from eliz100
You have moved your story along beautifully with this piece. You keep enticing me with the antagonist, Mr. Frost. I look forward to the next instalment.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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You have moved your story along beautifully with this piece. You keep enticing me with the antagonist, Mr. Frost. I look forward to the next instalment.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from estory
The confrontation with Frost boils to a head. You really created a bitter character there. The dialogue is great, very realistic, pointed in the places where it needs to be. Lots of emotions and motivations of the characters comes through there. All the complicated relationships of these people moving through the school seem well orchestrated to set up this romance between coach and teacher and the struggle over status in the school that comes of it. estory
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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The confrontation with Frost boils to a head. You really created a bitter character there. The dialogue is great, very realistic, pointed in the places where it needs to be. Lots of emotions and motivations of the characters comes through there. All the complicated relationships of these people moving through the school seem well orchestrated to set up this romance between coach and teacher and the struggle over status in the school that comes of it. estory
Comment Written 05-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from seaglass
Well good. Frostie finally swallowed his foot. However, I have a feeling he's not gone. Usually, the dislikable character has a purpose in a plot. Great writing and descriptions make the story come alive.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Well good. Frostie finally swallowed his foot. However, I have a feeling he's not gone. Usually, the dislikable character has a purpose in a plot. Great writing and descriptions make the story come alive.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Every time I look at
the list of postings,
my eye goes to that sandwich!
-Panera Bread makes the
best chicken salad sandwich,
and this always makes me hungry!
-This is a very good chapter,
Barbara, and Mr. Frost has a
very appropriate name; he is
a real head case with a big
chip on his shoulder.
-The opening is very good,
with the camaraderie centering
around Gabriel's parents and
the tradition of the sandwiches.
-I remember some of my
teaching schedules with
classes right up to lunch
and no break or ones with
a 10:30 lunch!
-Well done.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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-Every time I look at
the list of postings,
my eye goes to that sandwich!
-Panera Bread makes the
best chicken salad sandwich,
and this always makes me hungry!
-This is a very good chapter,
Barbara, and Mr. Frost has a
very appropriate name; he is
a real head case with a big
chip on his shoulder.
-The opening is very good,
with the camaraderie centering
around Gabriel's parents and
the tradition of the sandwiches.
-I remember some of my
teaching schedules with
classes right up to lunch
and no break or ones with
a 10:30 lunch!
-Well done.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the encouragement.
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You are very welcome. I am enjoying the story.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is such an intriguing story to follow. I look forward to each new posting. and continue trying to guess what will happen next! Well done!
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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This is such an intriguing story to follow. I look forward to each new posting. and continue trying to guess what will happen next! Well done!
Comment Written 03-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from AJ McCall
Man, Frost is a pain in the butt! I'm wondering what exactly is fueling this rage and hate toward Katherine. Green better report him to H.R. You're writing this really well because I'm definitely taking Katherine's side, and loving Gabriel's character more and more. I did notice one thing I'd change: Friday's (I would write it: Fridays':) Can't wait to see what Paul and Gabriel stumble upon when going to catch up with Katherine!
(And that chicken sandwich is killing me! I'm vegan, lol!)
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Man, Frost is a pain in the butt! I'm wondering what exactly is fueling this rage and hate toward Katherine. Green better report him to H.R. You're writing this really well because I'm definitely taking Katherine's side, and loving Gabriel's character more and more. I did notice one thing I'd change: Friday's (I would write it: Fridays':) Can't wait to see what Paul and Gabriel stumble upon when going to catch up with Katherine!
(And that chicken sandwich is killing me! I'm vegan, lol!)
Comment Written 02-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the encouragement.
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You're welcome!
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Wow! What a mean teacher this Mr. Frost is.....is it because he does not like sports? Is he more for teaching education? I sure hope they soon get this figure out before the newcomer leaves her position.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Wow! What a mean teacher this Mr. Frost is.....is it because he does not like sports? Is he more for teaching education? I sure hope they soon get this figure out before the newcomer leaves her position.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
I thought this was going to be an easy going chapter, meeting parents, having lunch, and sitting in a meeting. But you didn't let me down, ending with your usual draw reader's in cliffhanger of an ending. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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I thought this was going to be an easy going chapter, meeting parents, having lunch, and sitting in a meeting. But you didn't let me down, ending with your usual draw reader's in cliffhanger of an ending. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Thank you for the encouragement.