CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 138 "The feeling's mutual..."A collection of poetry
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Comment from poet_girl
The personification and deep spirituality in this piece is beautifully expressed. Just as the artist yearns for inspiration, so too does the canvas...
Thank you for sharing.
poet_girl
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2008
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The personification and deep spirituality in this piece is beautifully expressed. Just as the artist yearns for inspiration, so too does the canvas...
Thank you for sharing.
poet_girl
Comment Written 03-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2008
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Poet_girl, your 'exceptional' review is truly so much appreciated. I thank you very much for most esteemed review and comments. I am so happy you enjoyed this work and felt it. With warmest regards, Sue
Comment from jamar2
A very nice piece and so easy to read, am getting into this style now, but dont think I could write anything like this, well done.
jamar.
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A very nice piece and so easy to read, am getting into this style now, but dont think I could write anything like this, well done.
jamar.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2008
Comment from Firefly54
Oh... I do know the feeling... This poem seems to say a lot more than fifteen words worth! I think the last line is the best for me. Good luck with the contest.
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Oh... I do know the feeling... This poem seems to say a lot more than fifteen words worth! I think the last line is the best for me. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2008
Comment from Pen&Ink
Hi Sue,
This is very clever, and the content warrants a five. Now for my reasoning on awarding a four. What I'm about to say might come across as splitting hairs. Poetic license aside, I might have written it this way:
"Waiting to be brushed
"By strokes of genius
"Empty canvas stares
"Blankly back at artist"
Like I said, the content is great. I just happened to notice that grammatical glitch.
Ray
I'm sure everyone got the meaning, but technically you have written it as though the artist is waiting to be brushed.
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Hi Sue,
This is very clever, and the content warrants a five. Now for my reasoning on awarding a four. What I'm about to say might come across as splitting hairs. Poetic license aside, I might have written it this way:
"Waiting to be brushed
"By strokes of genius
"Empty canvas stares
"Blankly back at artist"
Like I said, the content is great. I just happened to notice that grammatical glitch.
Ray
I'm sure everyone got the meaning, but technically you have written it as though the artist is waiting to be brushed.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2008
Comment from Eternal Muse
It made me smile. Excellent and a humorous write, I am amazed how much you've put in these few lines. Reminded me of a friend of mine, I once saw an empty frame hanging on her wall. When I asked her about it, she said she still waited for someone worthy to fit in there (smile). I never heard of a Naani form, but it is certainly ready for the magic strokes of Picasso, you've done all the groundwork - big smile.
Good luck in the contest, it was delightful.
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It made me smile. Excellent and a humorous write, I am amazed how much you've put in these few lines. Reminded me of a friend of mine, I once saw an empty frame hanging on her wall. When I asked her about it, she said she still waited for someone worthy to fit in there (smile). I never heard of a Naani form, but it is certainly ready for the magic strokes of Picasso, you've done all the groundwork - big smile.
Good luck in the contest, it was delightful.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2008
Comment from jenelleish
This is a poem that is somewhat deep yet easy to understand. It's nice to consider the thoughts of an empty canvass as a subject... Great job.
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This is a poem that is somewhat deep yet easy to understand. It's nice to consider the thoughts of an empty canvass as a subject... Great job.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2008
Comment from rama devi
LOVE THIS!
So well conceived, simply yet poetically worded, especially the closing two lines...and nice presentation with apt artwork. Would not be surprised if it wins, as all FS-ers can relate.
:D
I find no nits.
Good luck
Warm Regards,
rama devi
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LOVE THIS!
So well conceived, simply yet poetically worded, especially the closing two lines...and nice presentation with apt artwork. Would not be surprised if it wins, as all FS-ers can relate.
:D
I find no nits.
Good luck
Warm Regards,
rama devi
Comment Written 03-Dec-2008
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Very well written a strong contest entry that I enjoyed this will be a tough contest to select one from so many good ones good luck regards Fuller
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Very well written a strong contest entry that I enjoyed this will be a tough contest to select one from so many good ones good luck regards Fuller
Comment Written 03-Dec-2008
Comment from MissCellanea
This is such a creative verse. Personifying an artist's canvas! I understand the feeling well: Sometimes the stark, white screen on my laptop screams at me; the only bit of color, that blinking cursor. Excellent entry for the Naani contest. Best wishes. Sue
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This is such a creative verse. Personifying an artist's canvas! I understand the feeling well: Sometimes the stark, white screen on my laptop screams at me; the only bit of color, that blinking cursor. Excellent entry for the Naani contest. Best wishes. Sue
Comment Written 03-Dec-2008
Comment from SunlitWhisper
Man wish I'd thought of this one, LOL Love it seeing as how I'm an artist and use these tools of the trade. Good poem you've penned. Good luck as well.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2008
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Man wish I'd thought of this one, LOL Love it seeing as how I'm an artist and use these tools of the trade. Good poem you've penned. Good luck as well.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2008
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Sunlit, I've been on this fanstory writing poetry that I'm petrified to get the paints out (been about 2 weeks now). Yikes! Why do we torture outselves like this?!!! Do you post your work on fanart? Thanks so much for your awesome review! With regards, Sue
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No I've been thinking of doing that instead of the poetry thing but I like both. l haven't painted in a long while since my heart attack here is a slide of much of my paintings...enjoy.
http://www.slide.com/r/Q-gr5w8V5D-NdmZBDAVbewY9RBgoPFp2?previous_view=mscd_embedded_url&view=original
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It's 2:30 a.m. and am just about to fall asleep. But visited your slides. What a range!!! You should be SO proud (which I'm sure you are)!! Going to have another look at them tomorrow, because it is such a large body of work.
Thank you for that link. Beautiful!!!
Sue