CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from Hitcher
WOW! You are quite the gifted one aren't you Sue, I love the artwork friend, very nice! Another different form of poetry that I have not seen before, Cool, you did a great job of it from what I can see friend. Your life must be a roller coaster ride, I wish you all the strength and happiness in the world Sue.
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WOW! You are quite the gifted one aren't you Sue, I love the artwork friend, very nice! Another different form of poetry that I have not seen before, Cool, you did a great job of it from what I can see friend. Your life must be a roller coaster ride, I wish you all the strength and happiness in the world Sue.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
Comment from Nescher Pyscher
Hmm.
Okay. So this is the second poem by you I've read today. I scrolled on your Bio, and I can see that you're 'new to poetry".
Not sure I buy that, given that you've got a finely polished eye, and a refined touch on word-smithing, but okay.
::Grinning::
I liked it, and as it's deeply personal to you, I'm not gonna knock it in any way, but these kinds of poem are very close to abstract art in that the message needs to be conveyed in a dynamic way without cluttering up the canvas or descending into melancholia.
(Did that make ANY sense?)
Knock it out of the park, I guess is what I'm saying. If you're gonna go for the minimalist approach, it needs to be bottled lightning to be something amazing.
Again, I'm not knocking this poem. It's a nice, solid piece, and it looks to me like you played by the rules, but I've read two now that were "solid, work-a-day" pieces and I want to be impressed, I guess.
Please don't squelch me.
::Grinning some mo'::
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Hmm.
Okay. So this is the second poem by you I've read today. I scrolled on your Bio, and I can see that you're 'new to poetry".
Not sure I buy that, given that you've got a finely polished eye, and a refined touch on word-smithing, but okay.
::Grinning::
I liked it, and as it's deeply personal to you, I'm not gonna knock it in any way, but these kinds of poem are very close to abstract art in that the message needs to be conveyed in a dynamic way without cluttering up the canvas or descending into melancholia.
(Did that make ANY sense?)
Knock it out of the park, I guess is what I'm saying. If you're gonna go for the minimalist approach, it needs to be bottled lightning to be something amazing.
Again, I'm not knocking this poem. It's a nice, solid piece, and it looks to me like you played by the rules, but I've read two now that were "solid, work-a-day" pieces and I want to be impressed, I guess.
Please don't squelch me.
::Grinning some mo'::
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
Comment from S.Yocom
For your first time at this kind of poem, you did it very well. I like it. I read in yesterday's paper about an autistic woman who has her doctorate, gives speeches on autism, and teaches in a university.
Sally
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For your first time at this kind of poem, you did it very well. I like it. I read in yesterday's paper about an autistic woman who has her doctorate, gives speeches on autism, and teaches in a university.
Sally
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
Comment from ulster3
Hello Sixteezkid.
You did a great job of meeting your goal. It is so very descriptive, I haven't tried the form yet. This is a truly excellent work. I wish I had the answer for your last line.
fondly, rebecca
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Hello Sixteezkid.
You did a great job of meeting your goal. It is so very descriptive, I haven't tried the form yet. This is a truly excellent work. I wish I had the answer for your last line.
fondly, rebecca
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
Comment from Gramma Kathy
I'd not heard of this poetry form. Thank you for introducing it to me in such a soulful way.
You have succeeded very well in simplifying "this most complex disorder." How hard it must be to be unable to communicate! My heart goes out to you both.
Blessings to you.
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I'd not heard of this poetry form. Thank you for introducing it to me in such a soulful way.
You have succeeded very well in simplifying "this most complex disorder." How hard it must be to be unable to communicate! My heart goes out to you both.
Blessings to you.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
Comment from wierdgrace
this so touch my heart, I so families with autism children, and the love is so deep, I enjoyed this wonderful poem, and thank you for sharing.
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this so touch my heart, I so families with autism children, and the love is so deep, I enjoyed this wonderful poem, and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
Comment from utopian_dream_x
A simple poem with a strong message.
Poems likes this a great as people can relate to them and emphasize.
The picture is quite interesting as well, I think it suits the meaning behind your poem well.
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A simple poem with a strong message.
Poems likes this a great as people can relate to them and emphasize.
The picture is quite interesting as well, I think it suits the meaning behind your poem well.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
Comment from Joseph David Soukup
I am glad that you provided the Author Notes along with this piece. I am not educated in poetry as some of my other poet counterparts might have been, but I do believe this poem to be alright. I love the picture, but without it, would have been left unaffected by the poem itself. I love the truth and understanding of a different viewpoint. Autism is weird and different from our own sense of perceived reality, but that does not make it wrong. I like how you get that point across in so few syllables.
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I am glad that you provided the Author Notes along with this piece. I am not educated in poetry as some of my other poet counterparts might have been, but I do believe this poem to be alright. I love the picture, but without it, would have been left unaffected by the poem itself. I love the truth and understanding of a different viewpoint. Autism is weird and different from our own sense of perceived reality, but that does not make it wrong. I like how you get that point across in so few syllables.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
Comment from Eternal Muse
This was a very well executed Tetractys, with adhererence to the form and much thought. Also, you bring the topic of autism, which is very prevalent albeit, extremely painful. Excellent picture to accompany the poem. Thank you for sharing this with us.
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This was a very well executed Tetractys, with adhererence to the form and much thought. Also, you bring the topic of autism, which is very prevalent albeit, extremely painful. Excellent picture to accompany the poem. Thank you for sharing this with us.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008
Comment from CarolinasAngel
Autism is something that amazes me. The mind is truly an wonder!
I have a son who has selective mutism. He was tested for autism and passed. Selective Mutism is an anxiety disorder where he doesn't speak to people unless he's in his 'comfort zone' and somethings like being the center of attention, or people looking at him and things like that make him nervous. Bless him.
Special children are truly special. :o)
Nice poem - form well carried.
Write on!
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Autism is something that amazes me. The mind is truly an wonder!
I have a son who has selective mutism. He was tested for autism and passed. Selective Mutism is an anxiety disorder where he doesn't speak to people unless he's in his 'comfort zone' and somethings like being the center of attention, or people looking at him and things like that make him nervous. Bless him.
Special children are truly special. :o)
Nice poem - form well carried.
Write on!
Comment Written 25-Nov-2008