All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Alone in Paris"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, you did a great job writing this free verse poem about the tastes of paris where you found each other, i wish you the best of luck in the contest
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
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this is very well written, mystery writer, you did a great job writing this free verse poem about the tastes of paris where you found each other, i wish you the best of luck in the contest
Comment Written 03-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
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thx sweets!
Comment from Ekim777
I spent 24 hours alone in Paris; didn't speak to a soul, about anything relevant, So your poem strikes something of a chord. Paris is beautiful even when alone. But you had an intangible beginning of an experience. That must count for something. So what if you didn't know each other right up to the end but why did you both, right up to the end, feel alone? It seems the beauty of Paris and the sensuality of the experience was never enough. C'est la vie. -Ekim777
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
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I spent 24 hours alone in Paris; didn't speak to a soul, about anything relevant, So your poem strikes something of a chord. Paris is beautiful even when alone. But you had an intangible beginning of an experience. That must count for something. So what if you didn't know each other right up to the end but why did you both, right up to the end, feel alone? It seems the beauty of Paris and the sensuality of the experience was never enough. C'est la vie. -Ekim777
Comment Written 03-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
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aaah, but in the end we say "WE are alone in Paris," ... oui??
Comment from Shirlena
I went on a "love" adventure without having to leave my spot and this is what I enjoyed about this so much. This is a fantasy most women would have, give or take a few details. I met a musician from paris and talked to him on the phone. We worked on lyrics and compositions together and he sent me a picture. We never met in person and that was one of the sexiest affairs I ever had in my life-smile. This reminds me of it. Thanks for the memories!
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
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I went on a "love" adventure without having to leave my spot and this is what I enjoyed about this so much. This is a fantasy most women would have, give or take a few details. I met a musician from paris and talked to him on the phone. We worked on lyrics and compositions together and he sent me a picture. We never met in person and that was one of the sexiest affairs I ever had in my life-smile. This reminds me of it. Thanks for the memories!
Comment Written 03-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
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you write music???? oh I want to talk to you!!!! Seriously!!! I'm finishing my one woman show at the moment and am desperate for some lovely lyrics to replace a few (royalty rich!)ones I have ... "Let's Do It" ... "C'est Magnifique" ... so if you're interested ... :))))))))) oops! and thank you for coming to Paris with me Shirlene!!
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I do and we can talk if you would like to-smile. Now I don't write music but lyrics. I have several songs and I will give the website of the group I've written and even sang for to see if it would be to your liking. Thank you for asking and your poem was pure pleasure.
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how lovely! I'd love to hear your music - do you post it at all???
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Yes I do. I was part of a group called Twin Muses and here is the website. Give it a listen and tell me what you think. It may not be something you like but i'll let you decide. http://mrmoods.bandcamp.com/album/twin-muses-the-final-rendez-vous
Comment from elliejean
Alone in Paris. I love it. She didn't stay alone for long. A passionate night with a strange but great lover is a real dream. The differences in language makes it even better. Great work.e
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Alone in Paris. I love it. She didn't stay alone for long. A passionate night with a strange but great lover is a real dream. The differences in language makes it even better. Great work.e
Comment Written 03-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
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That's the dream e., yes??? a little sizzle never hurts!
Comment from Tryynity Belle
Is it hot in here or is it just me. I really enjoyed this... alot. It seems exactly what the contest asked for too. Good luck, I think you should do well, if not the winner better be damn good LOL
/cheers
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
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Is it hot in here or is it just me. I really enjoyed this... alot. It seems exactly what the contest asked for too. Good luck, I think you should do well, if not the winner better be damn good LOL
/cheers
Comment Written 03-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
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OFF TO THE COLD SHOWER WITH YOU! Blessings :) Sharyn
Comment from Angels27
Awesome writing for the contest mystery writer. The mood is set in the words...alone in Paris...and as it runs through...it emphasizes the rest of the emotions. Very sweet, passionate, and with hints of more to come. Good writing.
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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
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Awesome writing for the contest mystery writer. The mood is set in the words...alone in Paris...and as it runs through...it emphasizes the rest of the emotions. Very sweet, passionate, and with hints of more to come. Good writing.
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Comment Written 03-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
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thank you Angels! this is a fun competition! :)
Comment from kiwisteveh
It has to be a good sign that your poem features the city of love - your drawn out format also helps to tease out the blossoming romance between the two characters and the restaurant scene makes the final food imagery most appropriate.
Well done and good luck.
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It has to be a good sign that your poem features the city of love - your drawn out format also helps to tease out the blossoming romance between the two characters and the restaurant scene makes the final food imagery most appropriate.
Well done and good luck.
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Comment Written 03-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2012
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thx kiwi!