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A collection of poetry

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Comment from lennis
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A heartfelt message, filled with warm feeling for your dad. Good structure to the poem and the message is very clear. Good work.

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2008

Comment from jlsavell
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Sixteezkid, once again you have turned out a beautiful pieceo of poetry that is sich a wonderful tribute to your father. great write..thank you for sharing..jlsavell

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2008

Comment from bard owl
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What a wonderful tribute to your father. Your love is quite apparent and your father left a legacy of music to his family. Joyful music. Excellent imagery. Best of luck in the contest. The piece is beautifully done. Blessings, Linda

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2008

Comment from Curt Mongold
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This is a beautiful tribute to your father. My ex father-in-law was quite a picker in his day too. We used to beg him to get out his banjo and play on the holidays, and he rarely disappointed us. Thise of us who could play guitar would bring our instruments, and it was the best feeling, making music with the family while "dad" was the leader of the band.
I really miss those days, and thank you for the beautiful reminder of my own family.
Sincerely,
Curt

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2008

Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
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a great tribute to your father. our memories are all we have left when they are gone. your father would be proud of you and this poem you've wrote about him and his banjo.

great piece of writing. keep up the good work............jim

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2008

Comment from KYPollard/El Gato
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Wonderful poem here. The rhythm is nice. Quick. Your phrasing and sentence structure made it an easy read. I found no errors in your writing.

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2008

Comment from Nicnac
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Fabulous poem, Sixteezkid.
You created a poem with excellent imagery and description.

My husband plays guitar. He used to get together with a friend who played banjo. I loved to sit and listen to them pick together. There's nothing to rev the soul like good bluegrass music!

Foggy Mountain Breakdown
Bluegrass Mountain Medley
Cripple Creek - cant sit still when listening to this!
Salty Dog
Knoxville Girl - love this horrible tale lol

LOL thanks for the trip down memory lane. I enjoyed your lovely tribute to your dad - and his gift of music.
No revisions.

Blessings,
~Nic

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2008


reply by the author on 24-Nov-2008
    AHHHH! SALTY DOG!! When I was a wee lass, my dad taught me to sing in harmony and that was one song I LOVED sing with him. And "Cripple Creek" - hands down, on fire-the best!! Now you're taking me down a long memory lane. I so appreciate your very kind words and generous review. Yours most warmly, Sue
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2008
    If you like Bluegrass, here is link to hear my Dad's favourite piece: "Cripple Creek"

    Lester Flatt & Earl Scruggs:

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=B4sqishGuYw

reply by Nicnac on 24-Nov-2008
    Ahh... Thanks for the link. :) I'm listening to it right now.
Comment from PatriciaLiteHickman
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I am sorry for your loss, but this is a great tribute! well written and strong contest entry too! not a thing to correct; best wishes in the voting booth!

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2008


reply by the author on 24-Nov-2008
    Thank you so much for your very kind words. AND, encouraging words! Your review and thoughts are most appreciated. Warmest regards, Sue
Comment from Poetic Friend
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This is a touching ode to your father and his banjo. I love the last stanza:

And now that Dad has gone
To Heaven, now held dear
He took that Gibson banjo
Now playing, for all to hear.

This stanza is beautiful -- banjo music in heaven. Lovely, simpy, lovely.

Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2008


reply by the author on 24-Nov-2008
    Dear Poetic Friend, thank you so much for your very kind words. Dad passed on last March and I was thinking of him a lot the other day, so I wrote this. His banjo was "signature". So happy you highlighted the stanza you liked! Thank you for your most uplifting words and generous review. With my warmest regards, Sue
reply by Poetic Friend on 24-Nov-2008
    My condolence on your loss. Your father will be proud of your poem.

    My Dad passed away nine years ago. As the holidays approach, I think about him greatly. As a result of those heavy thoughts, I wrote the poem "Only Hours Away," in which I entered in this contest. I wrote this poem two years ago. I thought it was appropriate for the contest.

    Good luck in the contest. You have my blessings, dear.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2008
    Dear Poetic Friend, thank you for your lovely thoughts. Time takes out the sting, but we never, ever forget. Thank you for telling me about your poem, "Only Hours Away". Going to go read it now. From the heart, Sue
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2008
    Just read your poem. Love these lines:


    Reflecting on you, Dad--
    your life, your death,
    I realize tears
    will always pursue me,
    with an ebb and flow--
    waves of bliss and gloom.

    Made me have a good cry. I think I needed it because he's been on my mind for a few days now. Thank you for sharing your story and your loss. Yes, the tears do ebb and flow. Thankfully, we love them enough to do just that.

    Thank you for sharing your lovely words.
    Sue
reply by Poetic Friend on 24-Nov-2008
    I am sorry. I did not mean to make you cry. Our fathers live in our hearts forever.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2008
    No, please do not be sorry. I really needed it because he has been on my mind so strong for these past few days. In fact, that was what prompted me to write my tribute to him.

    After I wrote it, that's when I started the contest, because I realized that everyone out there has lost a loved one and it would evoke some most lovely words.

    I REALLY did need a good cry! Ha! And now feeling a bit better. Going to go to the cemetery this week. Always makes me feel better.

    Loved reading the love you had for your Dad.

    From my heart,
    Sue
Comment from debskatz
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Hi again Sixteezkid,

I really like this poem. What a lovely tribute to your father. I know y'all must have had some great times when he played.

This poem read easily, it was easily understood, & the rhymes were great. Good job!

smiles,

deb

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2008


reply by the author on 24-Nov-2008
    Hey Deb, thanks so much for your very kind words. YES, we the the best of times. My dad would have some guys come over on the weekends and they'd go down to the basement where the acoustics were great! A fiddler, rhythm guitar, mandolin, you name it. All bluegrass! And thank you for your very generous review. Most sincerely, Sue