Comment from GregoryC

Excellent

First rate court-room drama with all the right elements to keep us reading to the end, It caught my attention immediately and kep my interest right to the end. Brilliant narrative style (all in the present tense, which is difficult to maintain) and excellent - natural conversational dialogue, which is so very important in developing the characters and plot. The ending was a delight!
Gregory

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2008

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2008

Wow! Thank you so much,Gregory. :-) I can't tell you how happy I am to read this review!
Jan

Comment from Dave M

Excellent

Janilou,

This is an excellent story, and it certainly fits in with the contest rules. I enjoyed reading it, and I couldn't find any nits.

It is an odd tale of coincidences.

Dave M

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2008

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2008

Thank you so much, Dave! :-) Glad you enjoyed it. This has been a little slow to get reviews.
Jan

Comment from RenieReader

Exceptional

Wow! Jan, this is a fantastic murder mystery scenario. I absolutely loved the twist of the knife at the end. Who'd of thought wife number one would show up on the jury? You've got the knack, gal. Kudos and good luck in the contest.

Renie

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2008

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2008

LOL Yep, who'd figure! Thanks for the great review! I really appreciate it.
:-)
Jan

Comment from unidian

Excellent

Absolutely brilliant! I'm a lover of twists and what a twist that was. Wow! The whole story was as good as anything you'd find on the bookshelves. If this doesn't win ... but I'm sure it will. The best of luck! Tom (sorry, don't have a six ... although this needs a ten)

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2008

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2008

Well, wow! Thank you so much. I love twists too, and this one hit me out of the blue! Thanks go entirely to my muse, I must say. LOL So glad you liked it!

Jan

Comment from raimie

Excellent

Wow, crazy surprise twist ending! You go girl! I am like, what! smartley written no blaring spag! Love the dialogue in regards to the bull dog, supplies an appreciated spot of humor.

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2008

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2008

Thank you so much! :-) I am thrilled to hear how much you enjoyed it!
Jan

Comment from dkneale

Excellent

"Juror Number Ten thumps the table. I glance at his reddening jowls, and try not to think of the bulldog that bit me when I was five."-Nice imagery, have you ever really been bit by a dog? I'm guessing yes...

Wow..What a twist and awesome ending...Loved it...Debra

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2008

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2008

Uh, yep, I have. It wasn't a bulldog, though! LOL Thank you so much for the wonderful review. I am so glad you liked the ending.
Jan

Comment from lawriemac

Excellent

This is a good story, well written with very good dialogue.
The pace runs smoothly throughout and the descriptive passages are very true to life.
I saw no spag in this well constructed story and I feel it stands a good chance in the contest.
Best wishes
Lawrie

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2008

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2008

Thanks, Lawrie. I am glad you found it spagless and enjoyed it!
Jan

Comment from rmdelta

Excellent

Wow, what a great thrller you made up. YOu are a terrific writer and I do enjoy reading your stories. Who am I to critique a professional? Your characters are believable, the conversation lifelike and simply a joy to read.
thanks for writing it

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 Comment Written 15-Sep-2008

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2008

Professional? Where? Who? Thanks for the compliments. I am truly honored by your praise. :-)
Jan