A true story about messed up dreams
I need so many things;66 total reviews
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is an excellent poem that movingly takes the reader through
an all-too-common story of how materialism worms its way into
our lives and just keeps building power. I love the turnaround
the speaker experienced when he/she began to pray.
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This is an excellent poem that movingly takes the reader through
an all-too-common story of how materialism worms its way into
our lives and just keeps building power. I love the turnaround
the speaker experienced when he/she began to pray.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2019
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
We all start out that way, thinking the more nice things we have, the happier we will be, and the more friends we will gather. But, it doesn't work like that, those things don't bring us real friends, just hanger-ons. The true gifts are the joyful ones, the light of Jesus and all that it brings. Well done, this is a really lovely story/poem. Good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx
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We all start out that way, thinking the more nice things we have, the happier we will be, and the more friends we will gather. But, it doesn't work like that, those things don't bring us real friends, just hanger-ons. The true gifts are the joyful ones, the light of Jesus and all that it brings. Well done, this is a really lovely story/poem. Good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 18-Feb-2019
Comment from Stephanie Launiu
A well-written poem about the 'aha' moment of finding that material things bring no lasting happiness. There are many word images that set the mood of the poem. My favorite: physical pacifiers lay waste my waking hours. Good luck with the contest.
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A well-written poem about the 'aha' moment of finding that material things bring no lasting happiness. There are many word images that set the mood of the poem. My favorite: physical pacifiers lay waste my waking hours. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2019
Comment from Mustang Patty
Dear Anonymous Poet,
Thank you for sharing your story in a Poem contest entry. The growth of the central character to come to realize the emptiness of things and turn to God was beautiful.
Good luck to you,
~Mustang Patty~
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Dear Anonymous Poet,
Thank you for sharing your story in a Poem contest entry. The growth of the central character to come to realize the emptiness of things and turn to God was beautiful.
Good luck to you,
~Mustang Patty~
Comment Written 18-Feb-2019
Comment from His Grayness
I found this work to be highly expressive, raw in honesty and passionate in seeking purpose and understanding! It is very well written indeed and quite emotionally gripping. I offer my sincere best wishes and thanks to this author for a fine read! HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
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I found this work to be highly expressive, raw in honesty and passionate in seeking purpose and understanding! It is very well written indeed and quite emotionally gripping. I offer my sincere best wishes and thanks to this author for a fine read! HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
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Comment Written 18-Feb-2019
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow...now that is a seriously intense piece that stands witness to so much materialism that surrounds us these days... just so very well formed and delivered! :) ;) I haven't read any other entries, but this is certainly a strong contender IMHO... :) Thank you for sharing and best of luck a the polls! ;) :)
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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
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Wow...now that is a seriously intense piece that stands witness to so much materialism that surrounds us these days... just so very well formed and delivered! :) ;) I haven't read any other entries, but this is certainly a strong contender IMHO... :) Thank you for sharing and best of luck a the polls! ;) :)
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Comment Written 18-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
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Hey Y.M... thanks so much for your celestial review... I really look forward and always enjoy reading what you have to say... yours,
