Little Billy
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Cop"memiors from my life experiences.
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Comment from c_lucas
A policeman is the front line infantry of the Court. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Good luck in your contest.
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A policeman is the front line infantry of the Court. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Good luck in your contest.
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thanks
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You're welcome.
Comment from Melanika
I think this was nearly perfect. I myself would add an s to inform as I think informs sounds better. I realise that may make it stick out a bit but still words mean more to a poem than shape. Overall very nicely penned.
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I think this was nearly perfect. I myself would add an s to inform as I think informs sounds better. I realise that may make it stick out a bit but still words mean more to a poem than shape. Overall very nicely penned.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2010
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thanks
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If it is nearly perfect how could you give it four stars? Well I added your s would you consider adding a star now?
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Sure how is that done?
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Just click on cop and you can review it again thanks
Comment from heyjude
very well done. We need a poem dedicated to these men and woman who risk their lives daily to protect us. Keeping people's safety. Good luck on the contest.
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very well done. We need a poem dedicated to these men and woman who risk their lives daily to protect us. Keeping people's safety. Good luck on the contest.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2010
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Thank you
Comment from adewpearl
I especially like the final "quote" line of your poem, which is in good clarity pyramid format - your tribute to the work of your brother and other police officers is moving. I know I feel a lots safer knowing they are protecting me. I also really like the touching line about how they inform loved ones of losses, an important aspect of the job that gets overlooked. Brooke
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I especially like the final "quote" line of your poem, which is in good clarity pyramid format - your tribute to the work of your brother and other police officers is moving. I know I feel a lots safer knowing they are protecting me. I also really like the touching line about how they inform loved ones of losses, an important aspect of the job that gets overlooked. Brooke
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Thank you
Comment from rosah
awww! i really love this, unique, and honest, with poets eyes, they cry justice, how beautiful is that!!! thank you for sharing, go with love.
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awww! i really love this, unique, and honest, with poets eyes, they cry justice, how beautiful is that!!! thank you for sharing, go with love.
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Thank you
Comment from Lois Delaney
Great idea! I thought you used good imagination with this one. Everyday people make great subject matter.
Good wishes in this contest.
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Great idea! I thought you used good imagination with this one. Everyday people make great subject matter.
Good wishes in this contest.
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Comment from Cedar
Great piece, also the picture. The policeman and fireman
never have received enough credit. These men and women lay their lives on the line every day and for very little pay.
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Great piece, also the picture. The policeman and fireman
never have received enough credit. These men and women lay their lives on the line every day and for very little pay.
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Comment from Thesis
This author is very aware of the role of an officer. If he/she has a brother who is a police officer, then they know the important role of trying to keep balance of order. It's a hard job on one's emotions, feelings and soul. - Thesis
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This author is very aware of the role of an officer. If he/she has a brother who is a police officer, then they know the important role of trying to keep balance of order. It's a hard job on one's emotions, feelings and soul. - Thesis
Comment Written 14-Sep-2010
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Thabk you
Comment from Soledadpaz
Very nice ode to your brother and to all Police Officers in general. They do put their life on the line every day for the rest of us.
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Very nice ode to your brother and to all Police Officers in general. They do put their life on the line every day for the rest of us.
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Comment from Claire Beck
Very powerful! I think it's tricky to get all the pyramid elements in and still have substance, and you did it well here. Each line builds on the one before it. "Telling loved ones of their loss" really added a lot - I often forget that's part of the police officer's role. Love the "poet's eyes" line.
Nice job, and good luck with the contest.
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Very powerful! I think it's tricky to get all the pyramid elements in and still have substance, and you did it well here. Each line builds on the one before it. "Telling loved ones of their loss" really added a lot - I often forget that's part of the police officer's role. Love the "poet's eyes" line.
Nice job, and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2010
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Thank you