CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 142 "In Shatters"A collection of poetry
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Comment from Adam Smith
There is indeed a sickening sound as a soul is cut. The pain is endurable, but not the sound. It haunts, forever, the eviscerated.
Really groovy poem with a creative theme and unique images that remain tied together.
Enjoyed this much and was inspired as well...
Sincerely, Adam
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There is indeed a sickening sound as a soul is cut. The pain is endurable, but not the sound. It haunts, forever, the eviscerated.
Really groovy poem with a creative theme and unique images that remain tied together.
Enjoyed this much and was inspired as well...
Sincerely, Adam
Comment Written 26-Nov-2008
Comment from Minglement
Very nice double tetractys with beautiful message. Great illustration and color mood. It should have been a contest entry. Good work.
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Very nice double tetractys with beautiful message. Great illustration and color mood. It should have been a contest entry. Good work.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2008
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Sixteezkid,
interesting how you wrote a Tetractys Poem in two stanzas your last stanza is just in reverse far as the count.
Yes cruel words hurt worse at time then actions.
What impressed most about your poem was when you said--(which I know is true, because it happened to me when I was a child)-
For once spoken,
shards may be removed, yet the burn still seethes.
Gert
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2008
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Hello Sixteezkid,
interesting how you wrote a Tetractys Poem in two stanzas your last stanza is just in reverse far as the count.
Yes cruel words hurt worse at time then actions.
What impressed most about your poem was when you said--(which I know is true, because it happened to me when I was a child)-
For once spoken,
shards may be removed, yet the burn still seethes.
Gert
Comment Written 26-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2008
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Gert, thank you so kindly for your very generous review and comments. We all need to stop and think before we speak. (as you highlighted those lines, they just cannot be taken back). Thank you very much for your very generous review and comments. Respectfully, Sue
Comment from adewpearl
this is stellar - just the first stanza would be most excellent on its own, but the two mirrored stanzas together are top rate!! I can't imagine anyone's doing better than the form or the choice of words in service of a powerful message
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2008
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this is stellar - just the first stanza would be most excellent on its own, but the two mirrored stanzas together are top rate!! I can't imagine anyone's doing better than the form or the choice of words in service of a powerful message
Comment Written 26-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2008
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Brooke, as always, you do find the words that give such encouragement. I am so glad you liked this work! Thank you for your most generous review and kind words. With my warmest regards, Sue
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Happy Thanksgiving!!!
Comment from elainec4
Sixteezkid,
Wow! Double whammy! This is good--as is everything I've read of yours. Profound and thought-provoking. Enjoyed. elaine
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2008
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Sixteezkid,
Wow! Double whammy! This is good--as is everything I've read of yours. Profound and thought-provoking. Enjoyed. elaine
Comment Written 26-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2008
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Elaine, thanks you SO much for your most uplifting remarks! And thank you for your very generous review and great comments. so glad you have enjoyed my work. With warmest regards, Sue
Comment from mamre07
I love this one. I wanted to write one of them and would have begun with the word 'why' but that is as far as I got. This is a great poiece. Good luvk in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2008
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I love this one. I wanted to write one of them and would have begun with the word 'why' but that is as far as I got. This is a great poiece. Good luvk in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2008
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I close my eyes and visualize (hmmm..that rhymes- Ha!) I cannot wait to hear the next words after your "WHY"! Thank you very much for you very generous review and comments. Most sincerely, Sue
Comment from bard owl
This is an excellent contest entry. I have never seen a tetractys written with a second verse. The mirror image is very poetically pleasing. And you words speak the truth about hurtful words. Once said, the damage has been done and those words continue to echo and hurt an open wound. Best of luck in the contest. Blessings, linda
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2008
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This is an excellent contest entry. I have never seen a tetractys written with a second verse. The mirror image is very poetically pleasing. And you words speak the truth about hurtful words. Once said, the damage has been done and those words continue to echo and hurt an open wound. Best of luck in the contest. Blessings, linda
Comment Written 26-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2008
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Linda, I only just learned of this poetic form and have fell in love with it! I am so glad you enjoyed it. Thank you very much for your generous review and comments. Most sincerely, Sue
Comment from Rar22
Very powerful piece. I just entered the tetractys writing prompt contest and you would have been huge competition! "Burn still seethes" is so vivid, and I love that the poem begins with a question. Great artwork as well. :)
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Very powerful piece. I just entered the tetractys writing prompt contest and you would have been huge competition! "Burn still seethes" is so vivid, and I love that the poem begins with a question. Great artwork as well. :)
Comment Written 26-Nov-2008
Comment from Vallachi
If we do not wound with words than we wound with our body physically. It is best not to wound at all.
Good job doing this poetry form that some guy made up
I wonder does that mean I can make one up?
I suppose so, why not? I like your picture! It goes nice with what you wrote.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2008
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If we do not wound with words than we wound with our body physically. It is best not to wound at all.
Good job doing this poetry form that some guy made up
I wonder does that mean I can make one up?
I suppose so, why not? I like your picture! It goes nice with what you wrote.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2008
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Vallachi, I just starting writing poetry. I never knew I could find a voice in this form. And then, I suddenly found this form from another poet. I challenged myself and, WOW....I love it. Please do challenge yourself. I would love to read yours. So glad you appreciate it. Thank you so much for your very generous review and comments! Warm regards, Sue
Comment from Joan E.
Wow--I can see, hear and feel the biting pain your few carefully chosen words describe.
"Listen as the cuts penetrate our souls" is my favorite.
A most evocative work, with the tetracyts form providing the perfect framework.
I'm only sorry to be out of 6's.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2008
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Wow--I can see, hear and feel the biting pain your few carefully chosen words describe.
"Listen as the cuts penetrate our souls" is my favorite.
A most evocative work, with the tetracyts form providing the perfect framework.
I'm only sorry to be out of 6's.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2008
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Darn, out of 6's....HA!!! Just kidding!! Joan, thank you SO much for your awesome review. Thanks, also, for highlighting the line you like. Have a Happy Thanksgiving to you and yours. With warmest regards, Sue