Haiku Club Challenges, Book II
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "haiku (the ghost of Mamie Thurmond)"an anthology of haiku written by fanstory poets
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Comment from TAB_that's me
Of course the black man was accused and the real murderer went free.
you have 2 good interconnect lines with imagery and a good satori also with imagery, a kigo. The only think I'm not sure of is where the mountains (isn't that the topic this week?) comes in at.
Teresa
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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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Of course the black man was accused and the real murderer went free.
you have 2 good interconnect lines with imagery and a good satori also with imagery, a kigo. The only think I'm not sure of is where the mountains (isn't that the topic this week?) comes in at.
Teresa
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Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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Hills or Mountains, Teresa. It doesn't specify mountains only.
Thanks for reading.
Dean
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Ah, got it - ok - thanks.
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No worries. :)
Comment from royowen
Even though Mamie possibly "risked" her life by being a little on the "loose" side, some killings were blamed on the blacks from time to time. And excellent Haiku Dean, as part of the haiku group, well done, blessings, Roy
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Even though Mamie possibly "risked" her life by being a little on the "loose" side, some killings were blamed on the blacks from time to time. And excellent Haiku Dean, as part of the haiku group, well done, blessings, Roy
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Comment Written 24-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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Wealth and prestige verses poverty and mistrust. The poor servant man was fighting a no-win situation I'm afraid.
Thanks for the review, Roy. I appreciate your comments as always.
DK
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Well done Dean
